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Title: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Mairi on November 12, 2005, 02:21:48 AM
Does anybody here have some lyrics that they'd like to share with us? I think we used to have an old thread like this but I don't know what happened to it. Anyway, here's a silly little song I wrote today.

Me and My Shadow

I'm in love with my reflection
Because it gives me so much affection
She's the only person I ever go near
I'm in love with myself
Does that make me weird

(Bridge)
I've got somebody who'll always love me
Me myself and I are always meant to be
My alter ego is wonderfully free

(Chorus)
Me and my shadow
Go everywhere together
Me and my shadow
We're meant to be
Two perfect lovers
Hidden under cover
The only person I could ever love is me!

The girl in the mirror
Sees things so much clearer
She's practically perfect in every way
Oh, how I love her
I wish she would stay

(Bridge)

(Chorus)

She's alluring and she's mysterious
Sometimes she can be a bit curious
My baby's the only one I need
Did I mention that person
Happens to be l'il old me?

(Bridge)

(Chorus)
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: ringo rules on November 12, 2005, 03:30:31 AM
Haha very good I really like that!
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on November 12, 2005, 03:34:17 AM
This is part of my band's political album. I'm quite proud of it:

The Republican Sequence:Democracy Of Hypocrisy/The New Revoultion

Goodby Bush,
Goodbye Kerry,
Goodbye,

Goodbye Edwards,
Goodbye Cheney,
Goodbye,

You can pat yourselves on the back,
And continue to self justify,
And crusade to take away our civil rights,
Proceed to keep us scurrying in your maz like rats,

Is this what man died for in '76?
To trade blood for oil?
Vindictive vendettas lead us into their soil,
Hussein was bad,
No one's denying that,
but if we can march in and war wherever we please because there wrong,
Then I ask you one thing...
Why not Korea?

Oh say, can you see...
Past all the obesity?
The bombs being dropped backed by ripe hypocrisy?
And the legions of skinheads,
And the sosiopaths?
Potatoes must be freedom,
Not French,
Not mashed,
Oh say, can you see charred and tattered remnants of a revolution long forgotten of past?
Oh see how the WalMart logo strains,
To keep us from what could be away from their domain,
Their cage of hate!

Do you think your better than me because you can write out a detention?
Or is it just because you want some attention?
Or do you want us to be your clone?
Exceptions to every rule but by and large...
You mold us into something that can function and not make assumptions.

You censor our art,
You dillude and bleep and dub,
Well, I have had enough of your little games,
No more tampering with me,
I don't care if I get no air play,
So stand and salute your stars and stripes and swastikas and sickles and hammers,
because I would rather salute the Parental Advisory Sticker if the flag means death for deniro,

We were once something proud,
built on revolt,
Yet now we are determined to be held in the hands of pocket filling tyrants,
Spreading their package of assorted vaguitys and lies, whipping us into shape and throwing us back to the sty...

HANDS UP!
On your head!
It won't help anything but it helps me take your will away and open you to vulnerability!

They sent Johnny Boy off to the slaughterhouse,
He walked right in on that one,
I still can't decide whether it was righteous sacrifice,
Or self-righteous suicide...
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on November 12, 2005, 03:35:29 AM
Genre: Progressive Rock

FLOYDIAN Written by: Anderson Councell


FLOYDIAN PART 1--THE FLOYDIAN ANTHEM
the music lifts my minds shackles,
the music lifts up my sagging frown,
I have been given the crown,
to imagination,
the minds own playstation,
and my fingers tremble,
and I remember my work,
fading quickly now, that smirk,

and I am reminded that everything under
the sun was in tune,
but the piper at the gates of dawn fell,
lets wish him well,
'cause that was a might fall,
lets hope he don't land on the wall,
and the hammers will march,
and the diamonds will shine,
if only by intricate design,

'cause theres no queers in the theater
tonight,
don't mind the coons, or jews, or bongers,
so the show will go on,
as this work is done,
but don't worry you,
it'll be done soon,
and when at last it is,
we'll take a break,
no need to start another one,
at least not right now,
we can sit down,
the pin-prick may not be so little,
but its over now,
forget tonight,
we got ourselves a might,
so why don't we all just agree,
we're still learning how to fly,
you and me,
but we'd better learn fast,
the dogs are always barking,
guarding the machine,
we could never stop those fiends,
so we'd better move,
we don't have much more time,
so I'd better end this rhyme,

and I am reminded that everything under the sun was in tune,
but the piper at the gates of dawn fell,
lets wish him well,
'cause it was a might fall,
lets hope he don't land on the wall,
and the hammers will march
and the diamonds will shine,
if only by intricate design,

Goodbye Syd,
goodbye Rog,
the poems may end,
but the legend will live on
and when VH1 does Behind The Music,
at least we'll have Dave,
at least we'll have Nick,
maybe Rick,
so when the tour is done,
and when there's no more,
you'll have joined the pantheon,
you'll be heard on and on,
the final cut will never come,

And I am reminded that everything under the sun was in tune,
but the piper at the gates of dawn fell,
lets wish him well,
'cause that was a might fall,
lets hope he don't land on the wall,
lets hope he don't land on the wall!
and the hammers will march,
and the diamonds will shine,
if only by intricate design,

And as the division bells toll,
the tank is full,
so lets ride,
and for the last time,
that insane stone,
WILL BRIGHTLY GLOW<

And I am reminded that everything under the sun was in tune,
but the piper at the gates of dawn fell,
lets wish him well,
because that was a might fall,
lets hope he don't land on the wall,
the hammers will march,
the diamonds will shine,
if only by intricate design

a protest to sin,
being forgotten is legend's fine,
so if you can cheat age,
and stay great,
and keep from the past,
then I guess you are a mass,
a force to be reckoned with,
and everyone knows,
even a fool,
you never grow old,
in the shadow of The Wall,
during a Momentary Lapse Of Reason,
when the fans Wish You Were Here
when your Obscured By Clouds
when your in the presence of Animals,
holding your own Saucerful Of Secrets,
on The Dark Side Of The Moon

And for the final time,
I am reminded,
that when the piper at the gates of dawn fell,
he didn't quite come out,
the hammers halt,
the diamonds dim,
an empty, empty design.

But lets go back,
lets not face the facts,
lets pretend its still 69,
and your still young,
Syd's still around,
everything'll be just fine,
and when the fans break,
in pompous blasphemy,
and when were recognized as a pain stifled band for all to see,
we'll enter the 1970s,
And dark side'll sell 40,million
AND YOU"LL BE RICH AND PROSPER<
BUT YOU"LL CREATE YOUR OWN HELL<
BUT WITH FAME BRINGS DISASTER<
AND AFTER SOME TIME COMES ALIENATION<
AND YOU"VE LOST THE MINDS PLAYSTATION<
AND SO YOU MAKE A SWAN SONG<
LONGEST YOU"VE DONE<
AND YOU GET A BACKWARDS MIND TO TELL<
AND HE MAKES SOME PICTURES<
PRETTY IN THEIR OWN WAY<
BUT ONLY THE OTHER BACKWARDS MINDS CAN SEE<
AND IF THEY MISINTERPRATE IT LIKE IDIOTIC SOWS<
IGNORE THEM<
KEEP THE BARE BROWS<
AND GET THAT BLOKE<
FROM THE !@:00 train,
the film was made for backwards minds to rejoyce,
not your fault if morons feel the pain,
backwards minds see what it meant, really.
And honor daddy,
and do it again,
a whole album just for him,
butcha didn't get much profit,
and the others got kinda testy,
and you left the band,
and you betrayed them,
never to be heard from again,
Lets ges,
and make a few more,
still better than most other albums,
but only a shadow of Wish You Were Here,
on the dark side of the moon,
You've nothing to fear.

And I am reminded,
that everything under the sun was in tune,
but the piper at the gates of dawn fell,
lets wish him well,
'cause that was a might fall,
lets hope he don't land on the wall,
and the hammers will march,
[EINZ! ZWEI! ZWEI! EINZ!]
and the diamonds will shine
[they crazy]
if only be intricate design,
yeah, its a DESIGN>
{OOOH____]

Check your pulse!
here that delicate sound?

And I am reminded that everything under the sun was in tune,
but the fiddler fell,
lets wish him well,
'cause that was a might fall,
lets hope he don't land on the wall,
and the hammers will march
and the diamonds will shine
if only by intricate design

But there to far from me,
I'll never get to see,
Unless luck loves me,
but i'll always have the albums,
and the inspiration,
you helped jumpstart my minds playstation,
gave me a crash course education,
and on the day the rock hall-of-fame looks to me for number one...

you know what I'll say
you know what I'll say...

And in my mind,
the hammers will never stop marching,
the crazy diamond will always shine,
my backwards mind has made its own intricate design,

Combating a wave of rushing scum,
deadly rock,
You didn't need to shock,
you just needed to be you,
You didn't need darkness
or misery,
or satanism,
or cynism,
Uplifting generations,
and when there's Manson and Zombie,
your still higher above,
and you can make others dreams,
when others can only crush,
and speak of love,
You can make others feel good,
and strong,
and light,
you didn't have to fight,
I feel in the flesh,
I can feel the rush,
In the flesh?
Of course,
In the flesh,
being me,
thats something you helped me see,
In the flesh,
being me,
thats how you taught me to be free,

And I am reminded that everything under the sun was in tune,
but the piper at the gates of dawn fell,
lets wish him well,
'cause that was a might fall,
lets hope he don't land on the wall,
and the hammers will march,
and the diamonds will shine,
if only by intricate design,

You guided me through my youth,
protected me when I walked through the machine,
When I was young I saw Emily play,
Heed what I say,
The trial is on the way,
Here's your post card,
See you soon,
on The Dark Side Of The Moon,

And I am reminded that everything under the sun was in tune,
but the piper at the gates of dawn fell,
lets wish him well,
'cause that was a might fall,
lets hope he don't land on the wall,
and the hammers will march,
and the diamonds will shine,
if only by intricate design,

You'll always be the best MegaDeath
and yet you'll never be MegaDeth,
completely diffrent sounds,
how'd you think of that,
your a completely diffrent band,
a completely diffrent sound,
Syd had good judgment,
when a Rock-N-Blues band,
with a completely new sound,
and a song over 40 min comes to town,
and the UFO and Middle Earth
pick 'em up,
don't worry,
You get bigger things,
groupies and properties
histories and million sellers,
sure,
whats Ummagumma, anyway?
Does it matter either way?
You just gotta feel,
ya don't gotta know it,
and besides my friends,
your Meddle not metal,
nearly 30 years to go around,
generations The Beatles couldn't keep,
generations KISS couldn't reach,
generations Nervana was to cold for.
But you...
You...
You...
Your still here...

And I am reminded that everything under the sun was in tune,
but the piper at the gates of dawn fell,
lets wish him well,
'cause that was a might fall,
lets hope he don't land on the wall,
and the hammers will march,
and the diamonds will shine,
if only by intricate design,

Thank Anderson,
thank Councill,

and the hammers will march
[thank Anderson]
and the diamonds will shine,
[thank Councill]
if only by...
Intricate...
[Design...]

Roger was seduced by the dark side,
well we were on the Dark Side Of The Moon,
Syd deteriated,
we'll miss you,
Roger,
we'll dismiss you,
and why shouldn't we,
you used the name for your own agenda,
fell back on Davey and Nick,
and brought the group into a war
glad ya lost,
do ya ever feel bad,
do ya ever feel sad,
what would Syd say if he knew what you've become,
What would Syd say if he wasn't comfortably numb?

FLOYDIAN PART II---ROGER:
BOY,
IGNORE THE BRIGHTS,
THE BURNING SENSATION OF THOSE LIGHTS,
BOY,
IGNORE THE SCREAMS,
GIVE 'EM WHAT THEY WANT,
THEY'VE SEEN YOU IN THEIR DREAMS,
BOY,
IGNORE THE FANS,
YOUR ABOUT TO TRAVEL DESTINY'S SANDS,

[GUITAR SOLO]

YOU PLAYED A MEAN GUITAR,
BUT DIDN'T GET FAR,
YOU DREAMED OF FAME, FORTUNE, A NEW CAR,

[GUITAR SOLO]

NOW YOU'VE GOT EXCESS,
SOLD OUT,
USED TO BE ABOUT,
LYRICS,
ALL YOU WANT NOW IS MONEY AT A GIG,
AND GROUPIE SEX
NOW YOUR A BIG STAR,
YOU'VE GONE FAR,
YOU GOT DRUGS,
YOU GOT BOOZE,
YOU GOT GIRLS,
YOU GOT GUYS WHO'LL BE YOUR STOOGE,
YOU HAVE THE POWER,
TO DO WHAT YOU WANT,
YOU'VE LEARNED THAT EVEN LOVE,
CAN BE BOUGHT

YOU FOUGHT,
AND YOU'VE RISEN TO THE TOP,
AND NOW YOUR THE BIGGEST GUN,
ON VH1,
AND YOUR MILLION'S TO SEE,
ON MTV,
YOUR THE CREAM OF THE CROP,
IF YOU WANTED YOU COULD INVEST IN STOCK,
YOUR THE JERRY SEINFIELD OF ROCK,
YOU COULD HIRE A HITMAN IF YOU WANTED,
JUST TO HEAR HIS GUN COCK

[GUITAR SOLO]

AND SO YOUR NUMBER ONE,
YOU'VE WON,
YOU'VE STUNNED,
BUT NOW YOUR GRAY,
ON A SUNNY DAY,
BUT NOW YOUR ALL DONE,

[GUIOYDIAN PART III--DAVIE:
PLAY THAT GUITAR,
FOLLOW THAT STAR,
DRONING, PAIN-RIDDEN VOICE,
EVERYTHING WILL BE FINE,
JUST GIVE IT TIME,
THE FANS ALL LOOK UP TO YOU,
TELL ME,
WHAT SHOULD I DO,
THE ATOM'S DANCE ACROSS THE STRINGS,
YOU GIVE US SOME RICH HEARING THINGS,
A NATURAL BORN LEADER,
FULL OF HEART,
ANGST AND HAPPY FEAR,
AND IF THE WATERS DRY AND DISAPPEAR,
AND WHEN THE WALL CRASHES DOWN,
AND IF NICK TUNES IT UP,
JUST HUMOUR THE FANS AND PLAY,
YOU KNOW WHAT THEY WANT,
YOU KNOW WHAT THEY WISH,
GIVE 'EM A SHOW THEY WON'T SOON FORGET,
AND MAKE PLENTY O' DOUGH,
BUT THAT A'INT IT,
YOU DO IT,
FOR THE MUSIC,


FLOYDIAN PART IV--NICK:
PLAY THE TAPE,
BEAT THE DRUMS,
WRITE THE SONGS,
ON AND ON,
YOU'VE BEEN TURNED INSIDE OUT,
WHY NOT JUST STAND UP AND SHOUT,

[DRUM SOLO]

YOU'VE BEEN THEIR SINCE SYD,
YOU WERE THERE AFTER ROGER,
YOU ADDED THE MYSTIQUE,
YOU GAVE US THE GREAT SOUND,
YOU BROUGHT US THE DARK SIDE,
SOMEDAY WE'LL ALL SEE YOU,
IN THE GREAT GIG IN THE SKY,
YOU WERE IN THE SKY HIGH,
YOU GAVE US GREAT PERCUSSION,
YOU BROUGHT THE BAND INTO DISCUSSION,
AND SHOWED THEM THE REPRECUSSIONS,

[DRUM SOLO]

[SOUND OF LAUGHTER]
[GUITAR SOLO]

FLOYDAIN PART V--SYD, OR HAVE YOU EVER DREAMED?:

["ARNOLD LAYNE" PLAYS SOFTLY IN THE BACKGROUND LIGHTLY]

["WISH YOU WERE HERE" PLAYS SLIGHTLY LOUDER BUT STILL SOFTLY]

[GUITAR]

HAVE YOU EVER WONDERED,
HOW IT WOULD BE LIKE,
IF YOU STAYED AROUND,
WELL,
I'M SURE YOU DON'T,
AND WHY WOULD YOU,
EVEN IF YOU COULD?

[DRUM UPBEAT]

HAVE YOU EVER DREAMED?

[SAXAPHONE LEADS]

[KEYBOARD]

HAVE YOU EVER SCREAMED? [SCREAM CARRIES ON]

[CARRIES ON ENTIRE SONG WITH "ARNOLD LAYNE" AND "WISH YOU WERE HERE"]

[BACKING GUITAR]

[LEAD GUITAR]

[ALL INSTRUMENTS STOP ABRUPTLY, SILENT EXCEPT THE SCREAM, "ARNOLD LAYNE" AND "WISH YOU WERE HERE"]

[CLASSICAL VIOLIN STARTS]

[CLASSICAL TRUMPET STARTS]

[TONED DOWN]
MUSICAL GENIUS...[ECHO]
CRACKED BALLAD,[ECHO]
HAIR GEL AND HELL,[ECHO]
LSD ADDICTION...[ECHO]
POETIC AFFLICTION... [ECHO]
LOVE... [ECHO]
AND LOSS...[ECHO]
COVERED IN... [ECHO]
GLOSS... [ECHO]

FLOYDIAN PART VI--RICK
[GUITAR]

[DRUMS]

[KEYBOARD]

AND ROUNDING OUT THE CAST,
NOT LEAST BUT MOST CERTAINLY LAST,
A BLAST[ECHO]
FROM THE PAST[ECHO]
DON'T MOAN AND SIT AROUND,
BANG THAT PIANO DOWN!
SCREAM AWAY THOSE WORDS AWAY,
YOU'LL DO GREAT!

[KEYBOARD SOLO]

GO STRAIGHT TO THE TOP WITH THEIR HELP,
BUT THEN AGAIN,
WHERE WOULD THEY BE,
WITHOUT ONE TO HIT THE KEYS?

[KEYBOARD]

HELP THEM TRAVEL THE MORE ELEGANT SEAS,
HELP THRTAINLY IS RIGHT.

[TONED DOWN]
NO, NO, NO...


FLOYDIAN PART VII--ARNOLD AND EMILY:
AND ARNOLD AND EMILY WILL DANCE,
AROUND THE CLOCK THEY'LL NEVER STOP,
JUST TAKE MY WORD,
DON'T WORRY THEY'LL GET ALONG FINE,
I DON'T MIND,
THEY ARE OF COURSE,
THE LAST SIGN,
TO ILLUMINATE[ECHO]
FROM SYD'S MIND,
AND WELL SYD MIGHT BE DEAD,
ROGER BARRETT IS STILL VERY MUCH ALIVE,
SO, YOU CRAZY DIAMOND,
SHINE...

FLOYDIAN PART VIII--THE FLOYDIAN ANTHEM[REPRISE]:
AND THE HAMMERS WILL MARCH,
AND THE DIAMONDS WILL SHINE,

[CORE BEAT FROM "ROGER"{BASS}, "DAVEY"{GUITAR}, "NICK"{PERCUSSION}, "SYD, OR HAVE YOU EVER DREAMED"{CLASSICAL VIOLIN AND R&B SAXAPHONE}, AND "RICK"{KEYBOARD}

FLOYDIAN VERSE 9(I think, I lost count somewhere)--HORSE:

YOU GIVE,
AND YOU GIVE,
AND YOU PULL,
AND YOU PULL,
AND YOU FIGHT,
AND YOU FIGHT,
WITH ALL OF YOUR MIGHT,
AND YOU TRUST LOYALY
(BLINDLY)
AND YOU WORK RESTLESSLY,
(IGNORANT)
AND WHEN YOU ARE COLD AND BROKEN DOWN,
PROMISED A REST OR TWO,
A LIFE OF EASE,
REWARDS FOR YOUR SACRIFICE,
YOU FALL THROUGH THE ICE,
FEASTED UPON BY THE MICE,
ROTTING AND BREEDING LICE,
WHAT TO DO?
YOUR "FRIENDS" KNOW WHAT TO DO...
CALL IN ELMER'S...
CALL IN THE WAGON...
TAKE A HEFTY CHUNK OF CHANGE...
AND MAKE YOU INTO GLUE...
MAKE YOU INTO GLUE...
MAKE YOU INTO GLUE...
MAKE YOU INTO GLUE...
MAKE YOU INTO GLUE...
[fade out into echoes of that same line]

--------------------------------------------------------------------------------
PART 10: THE SPOTLIGHT, or SYD:

SELL-OUT,
WELL OUT OF TIME,
FELL OUT OF THE SPOTLIGHT,
OR WERE YOU PUSHED,
DID YOU CHOOSE NOT TO SPEAK,
OR WERE YOU SHUSHED,
DID THE PRESSURE GET TO YOU?
WHAT DID YOU DECIDE TO DO?
WHY NOT COME BACK FOR SOME MORE?

DOOR TO DOOR,
THROUGH THE FLOOR,

AT YOUR CORE YOU WERE JUST A MAN,
SHARING YOUR FABLES OF LUCIFER SAM,
FOR A WORLD TO LAUGH AND CHEER,
BUT WHY DID SOME JEER,
YOU CAN'T REALLY BLAME THEM AFTER 'DO YOU GET IT?',
BUT THATS NOT WHY THEY DON'T CALL OR VISIT,

DOOR TO DOOR,
THROUGH THE FLOOR,

AND WE ALL KNOW WHAT YOU MEANT,
WHEN YOU ASKED THAT QUESTION...

FLOYDIAN PART 11: (THE PRICE OF) THE HARD ROCK CAFE'

(Heavy Urban Blues Guitar Riff)

WELCOME M'BOYS,
ARE YOU HERE T' STAY?
'CAUSE YOUR ALWAYS WELCOME AT THE HARD ROCK CAFE'!
SEE MICK'S OL' SUNGLASSES,
OR PAUL'S HENDERSON SET!
YOU GUYS GOT ANYTHING ON YA?
WE COULD ADD IT!
OH AND, BY THE WAY...
THE PRICE IS NEVER FREE...
HERE IN THE HARD ROCK CAFE'!
SO DAVIE,
STAY AWHILE,
YA' CAME ALL THEM MILES,
WE COLLECT LIKE ITS GOIN' OUTTA STYLE!
SAY DAVIE, WATCHA GOT ONYA?
PICTURE OF YOUR WIFE? WE'LL TAKE THAT!
LAST PHOTO O' ROGER BEFORE THE FALLEN OUT?
I THINK WE'LL TAKE THAT BEFORE YER HEADIN' OUT!
OH, AND YOUR PHONE NUMBER, TOO!
YOU GOT E-MAIL?
YOU WANNA BE A LEGEND DONTCHYA?
C'MON BOY, DON'T FAIL!
WELL DAVE,
NOW YA SEE,
PRIVACYS THE PRICE FOR IMMORTALITY!
BUT DON'T WORRY,
YOU AND ALL YOUR PERSONAL THOUGHTS ARE HERE TO STAY,
HERE, IN THE HARD ROCK CAFE'!

FLOYDIAN part 12--SPEAK TO THEM:

(ROARING CROWD FROM LEFT SPEAKER)
FLOYD! FLOYD! FLOYD! [CONTINUOUS]

(ROARING CROWD FROM RIGHT SPEAKER)
ROGER! ROGER! ROGER! [CONTINOUS]

[HEART BEAT]

[LIGHTLY ECHOING]
I'VE BEEN MAD FOR F.UCKING YEARS. ABSOLUTELY YEARS...

[CROWD ON LEFT AND RIGHT SCREAM AND CLAP INSANELY]

[SLIGHTLY LOUDER ECHOING]
I KNOW I'VE BEEN MAD. I'VE ALWAYS BEEN MAD LIKE MOST OF US OUR.

[MACHINE SLOWLY STARTS UP.]

[CROWD BEGINNES CHANTING]
THEY'RE BACK! THEY'RE BACK!

[CHUCKLING STARTS]

[LEFT CROWD STARTS CHANTING]
ROGER! ROGER! ROGER!

[RIGHT CROWD STARTS CHANTING]
DAVE! DAVE! DAVE!

[THE SCREAM BEGIINES]

[OPENING CORD FOR BREATHE STARTS]
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Mairi on November 12, 2005, 04:07:10 AM
Yours are long but I like them
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on November 12, 2005, 04:09:45 AM
Actually, if you look at my rock opera thread you will notice those are aberrations and that mainly my songs are much shorter than the average one. Floydian was several poems sharing one concept, and The Republican Sequence was a sort of mini-opera, like Bohemian Rhapsody or A Quick One Well He's Away.

And even if you didn't like them I'd let it slide because of your signature...  ;)
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on November 12, 2005, 04:21:08 AM
Quote from: Mairi
Does anybody here have some lyrics that they'd like to share with us? I think we used to have an old thread like this but I don't know what happened to it. Anyway, here's a silly little song I wrote today.

Me and My Shadow

I'm in love with my reflection
Because it gives me so much affection
She's the only person I ever go near
I'm in love with myself
Does that make me weird

(Bridge)
I've got somebody who'll always love me
Me myself and I are always meant to be
My alter ego is wonderfully free

(Chorus)
Me and my shadow
Go everywhere together
Me and my shadow
We're meant to be
Two perfect lovers
Hidden under cover
The only person I could ever love is me!

The girl in the mirror
Sees things so much clearer
She's practically perfect in every way
Oh, how I love her
I wish she would stay

(Bridge)

(Chorus)

She's alluring and she's mysterious
Sometimes she can be a bit curious
My baby's the only one I need
Did I mention that person
Happens to be l'il old me?

(Bridge)

(Chorus)


This was beautiful. Personal, but not alienating, all can relate to it, feel the emotions in it, and come away with their own meaning of it. I wish I could do that but, sadly, usually I'm to obsessed with my own opinions and the message as I perceive it.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on November 12, 2005, 04:30:07 AM
Some other stuff from my political album:

They don't understand this noise we make,
They haven't since 55,
They think were all just stupid creatures,
They need someplace to hide,
They hide behind their yesteryear that never existed,
They hide from their insecurities and fears and have insisted,
They are fine,
They are open-minded,
They aren't sociopaths,
They aren't hypocrites,
They don't support censorship
And all of that bullsh*t
If they are the heros,
Then we are the bad men


THEY part 2

If they are heroes,
Then we are bad men,
So lets give 'em hell,
and go straight down,
Apparently,
You and me,
And everyone who doesn't agree with Them in this "free country"
Is goin' first class.
So lets be proud,
They can kiss our collective ass,
Get mad,
Get "bad",
Stomp grounds and rip down flags,
Let them know people have the right to be f**s,
The cross is a belief,
Not a code of government,
But They want us to live under it,
So stomp on grounds and fight the fight,
My fellow bad boys and girls,
Lets bang our heads,
Lets flip our fingers,
Lets bring this monster,
This mother down,
Lets not let them win it,
Lets not give into their ********,
Lets rewrite history,
And rewrite the dictionary,
Lets rewrite the definition of "hero",
Lets rewrite the definition of "bad man"


KING GEORGE II

A prince was in a stable,
Feedin' the ponies,
And his daddy looked and said,
"Boy your a man now,
Have been for some time,
My time is done,"
Said the king to his son,
"But your time is hear,
Your time is coming and you shall be,
The great king ruling all the land,
You'll be even more powerful than I,
Wisconsin to Hawaii will be yours,
You'll get money and food and whores,"
Said the prince to the king,
"But dad--"
"Shush son, shush,
Your a Bush,
Now listen here son,
A king who was insane,
His name is Hussein,
Tried to kill me,
So when you are king,
You must invade his kingdom and conquer,"
And then the good king smiled madly,
And he said,
"Do it for your daddy",
And the prince smiled madly also,
And then he thought about his plan,
This young and mighty prince,
And his face became dumbfounded,
And he's looked that way ever since
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Mairi on November 12, 2005, 04:37:41 AM
I have some pseudo-political lyrics, too.

Song For the Children

Through innocent eyes
And auburn skies
They watch as their world is crumbling
There's no time for tears
So they just quelch their fears
And watch as the sky is tumbling

(Chorus)
I'm singing a song for the children
Because they can't raise their voices
I'm singing a song for the children
Because they don't make the choices
I'm singing a song for the children
So that someday they'll be free
I'm singing a song for the children
Won't you sing with me?

So many lives shot down
So many bodies never found
All of the futures were left undecided
Like a flower ground in the dust
We never do the things we must
The children watched as the soldiers fighted

(Chorus)

I tell you it was a waste
When I see a crying face
I'll pick up the pieces and warm their souls
Like a mother
Or a brother
Who's come in from the cold

Some grammatical mistakes in there, but it's all poetical liscense.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on November 12, 2005, 04:42:02 AM
Quote from: Mairi
I have some pseudo-political lyrics, too.

Song For the Children

Through innocent eyes
And auburn skies
They watch as their world is crumbling
There's no time for tears
So they just quelch their fears
And watch as the sky is tumbling

(Chorus)
I'm singing a song for the children
Because they can't raise their voices
I'm singing a song for the children
Because they don't make the choices
I'm singing a song for the children
So that someday they'll be free
I'm singing a song for the children
Won't you sing with me?

So many lives shot down
So many bodies never found
All of the futures were left undecided
Like a flower ground in the dust
We never do the things we must
The children watched as the soldiers fighted

(Chorus)

I tell you it was a waste
When I see a crying face
I'll pick up the pieces and warm their souls
Like a mother
Or a brother
Who's come in from the cold

Some grammatical mistakes in there, but it's all poetical liscense.


The first verse reminds me of The Final Cut. Was that intentional.


I Was A Teenage Preppie Lover    

This is a poem I found last year when I liked this preppie girl. Now I'm not sure what I saw in her, besides a nice ass. I mean, she was nice, but she's just so not me that I don't know if I could talk with her every day. There are other things I could do with her several times within an hour, just not talking. Anyways, the poem is a fair bit wussier than my other work but its kinda cool. Very emo. I had actually forgotten all about this until earlier this week:

Flailing in and out of place and time,
Lost in the ocean that is your eyes I'm,
Trying to breathe,
And as you read this poem,
I feel I will suffocate,
Fall and stall,
To answer you when you finish it,
Oh sh*t,
I can't even get through it,
Stumbling,
Bumbling,
Fumbling around,
When you enter the room,
I sink in my chair,
Its so unfair,
I'll never get a chance with you,
Which may be a good thing 'cause I know how I am,
And I may not treat you fair,
And how dare me make a move on you when your with Ryan and Ryan and I walked down the halls and hangout,
Gimmee a second to stop,
Take it all in,
My pain is a sin,
Gimmee a second to stop,
And sigh,
Just sigh,
Forget it,
it wouldn't work out,
Bye bye,
Bye bye


Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Mairi on November 12, 2005, 04:58:51 AM
Aw, that's kinda cute. I have some emo teenage love crap stuff, too. I got rid of a lot of it, though, as most of it centered around my crush on Paul. ::)
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on November 12, 2005, 05:04:57 AM
Quote from: Mairi
Aw, that's kinda cute. I have some emo teenage love crap stuff, too. I got rid of a lot of it, though, as most of it centered around my crush on Paul. ::)

Cute. Heh heh. Thats nice. Isn't that what every 14-year old boy wants to hear about themselves? Yeah, I think its a lot more pathetic than it is cute. However, I've made it quite clear to my look-at-me-I've-got-a-nice-haircut-and-don't-have-CP-jock-friends that the phallic conontations of a guitar to all of their squealing, 13-year old girlfriends is like kryptonite.

I know you don't care about my personal life, I just need to remind myself that as ugly, dorky, and weak (as mentioned, I have CP), I am, I have something on the jocks that all the little girls adore: My fenderbender.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on November 12, 2005, 05:14:10 AM
A FINAL LETTER TO MINE LOVE


Darkness holds the heart in shadowed realm,
Death not a spector as much as love,
Feeling I'm in hell,
I'd keep going on,
With this song,
And could take up all day,
But aside,
From the first three lines,
There's really not much more to say
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Mairi on November 12, 2005, 05:26:54 AM
Not all chicks go for jocks, I certainly don't. If I may quote from The Seven Year Itch:

Quote
How do you know what every pretty girl wants? You think that every pretty girl is a dope. You think that a girl goes to a party and there's some guy- a great big hunk in a fancy striped vest, strutting around like a tiger- giving you that "I'm so handsome, you can't resist me" look- and from this she is supposed to fall flat on her face. Well, she doesn't fall flat on her face. But there's another guy in the room-maybe way over in the corner-maybe he's kind of nervous and shy and perspiring a little. First you look past him, but then you sense that he's gentle and kind and worried, that he'll be tender with you and nice and sweet- and that's what's really exciting!

And just when you thought you'd been cheered up...

EMO-NESS! :D


Show Me The WAy

I've walking for an hour
With my heart in my hands
And nobody seems to know me
I've been waiting for somebody
To help me understand
But nobody wants to show me
I've worn out my excuses
I've got no place to go
Is it because of something about me?
I'm looking for an answer
I'm waiting for a call
But there's only empty faces around me

(Chorus)
I'm just looking for a
Place to be
Won't somebody take me away
I'm just looking for a
Way to love
Won't somebody show me the way

I waited for a thoughtful soul
To ask me anything
But they didn't seem to notice my grief
So I listened to my own heartbeat
To hear a sort of rythmn
I was the only lonely soul on the street
I could stop another stranger
Just to ask them the time
But what's the point of even knowing
If it's 10 or 12 o clock
Just another seed for sowing

(Chorus)

I know I've got a lot of issues
That I have to work on
It'd be easier if somebody would hold me
It's getting to late out
For me to be walking around
I only wish somebody had told me

I got home, threw my jacket on the floor
Listened to some music,
Just like I always did before
I took some pills from off the shelf
And that is how I killed myself
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on November 12, 2005, 05:27:04 AM
My Homage to Syd Barrett

WHEE!

Floating through the sounds of clouds,
There the platglass sea,
Is awaiting me,
Riding on a bumblebee,
WHEE!
The sky of green,
The giant vine,
All that I sea in awe of,
It is mine,
Unable to grasp the,
Unlimited possibilities,
Out the minds doors,
The flying boars,
Go so high,
In this machine,
I hold the key,
To...
Say...
WHEE!
Nothing is wrong with me,
The clouds are fish in this crystal sea,
The key,
Is you and me,
That is all we need,
WHEE!
Floating away from this world,
This savage little planet that thinks its huge,
We'll be seeing all,
In our hot air balloon,
Very, very soon,
Eating cheese off the moon,
The stars twinkle oh, so blue
Taking off at full speed,
Dangerous reactions of heat,
The thrill of the rush,
The clouds flush,
Don't gush,
We are bearly out of the sky,
WHEE!
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on November 12, 2005, 05:31:28 AM
--------------------------------------------------------------------------------
The sky was once blue,
In the childhood I knew,
Before there was a gravitational pull,
Before myths of kingdoms filled the sky,
I saw an endless supply,
Of fantasies,
And wild dreams,
And now the sky,
Is only a place very, very high,
But perhaps,
Shall someone grant me wings,
I can sing once more and the sky will be blue again,
All I once knew again,
People call me a fool again,
Think I'm just a hooligan,
Back in school again,
We learn of all the technical bits and peices of the sky,
We don't see,
The beauty,

This is about how when I was younger I always knew someday I would fly. Once I got in school and learned all these facts the possibility died but the dream still dimly glows.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on November 12, 2005, 05:34:21 AM
If man of wing,
Then I could sing,
So happy and so high,
Passing stars and clouds and moons right by,
If man of wing,
There'd be no thing,
As a fear of death,
For we had seen heaven,
And couldn't wait there yet,
If man of wing,
Dare to dream,
For it will never be so
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on November 12, 2005, 05:46:33 AM
Goodnight my friends,
Goodnight once again,
I like this board,
But right now I am bored,
And my most recent convo seems to have died,
But thats okay,
'Cause I'm growing tired,
Caffiene addiction makes it hard to get wired,
Will chat for a while on PinkFloydOnline,
Then read some of my book on Sam Giancana,
Then maybe eat a banana,
Time to refuel from todays sins,
By falling asleep well watching The Simpsons

Goodnight.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Indica on November 12, 2005, 10:53:05 AM
Zombie Dog Blues

Playing Tennis, aint what it seems
Over the fence we hear muffled screams

I always play feeling like I
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: An Apple Beatle on November 12, 2005, 11:28:00 AM
Wrote this when i was 18...Little references to a few 'heroes.' ;) Title was written well before the band. lol

A Thousand Yard Stare

V1.
Fortune runs through kaleidoscope fountains,

Your spirit hides, In a looking glass stream,

Man will rise to cut down any mountain,

But, to be pure, you first must be clean.

Chorus

Singing I, I, I, I, I, I, I,ee x 3
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on November 13, 2005, 04:26:12 PM
Quote from: IndicaWalrus
Zombie Dog Blues

Playing Tennis, aint what it seems
Over the fence we hear muffled screams

I always play feeling like I
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Indica on November 13, 2005, 06:49:37 PM
haha, no really mate - thanks for the comments, it's just what we need..to make us get off our arses and record (only 3 of us)

The song is actually wrote from childhood experience.
Round my local sports club, we used to jump the fence and play tennis on the courts (members only y'see) - the groundsman lived in this scary shed like house..(we called him Shedman) and if the ball went over the fence...you had to nominate someone to get it...the bad thing was..he had this evil dog that was scary as hell.

It was heart pumping stuff..through the overgrown back garden!
:)
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on November 13, 2005, 08:17:42 PM
This is the first song with lyrics written from someone in my band besides myself. Its from our political album:

BLIND EYE TO THE BLOODY SKY

Phone Ringing.

Female Voice--Hello?

 Waiting for that days to pass,
the days that we turned a blind eye to the bloody sky,
the day we missed that final call,
The days gonebye that we turned a blind eye,

Male voice--Honey, I love you. I won't be coming home--Honey, let me talk. There's a man on board. There's a man on board... I swear he's insane.

It has begun,
Your final flight,

Robotic Voice--We are approaching our destination. We will be there soon. Sit back, relax, and enjoy the flight. We'll be there soon.

The 747 is hailing its 911,
It has begun... It has begun... It has begun... It has begun... It has begun....

Explosion. Phone going dead.

Female Voice--Hello?

(Genre: Progressive rock)
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: raxo on November 13, 2005, 08:26:50 PM
I've not seen the film nor read the book, sorry :-/






Oh, it's a song (theme). Great script!  ;D
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: raxo on November 13, 2005, 08:34:03 PM
Strange (at least) but the same day (09/11/01) some minutes before the thing (they were still on the air) I was jamming/composing/recording a demo with my keyboard: just a rhythm made using the tones of a telephone sample and a basic melody with some other tones too. I called it Telephone Sonet (working title) at that moment and then it became a historical moment knowing that hundreds of people were using mobiles at the same time for ... you know.
All this is a very personal thing I've never told nobody before but your theme reminds me it.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on November 13, 2005, 08:35:46 PM
Quote from: andersonCouncill
This is the first song with lyrics written from someone in my band besides myself. Its from our political album:

BLIND EYE TO THE BLOODY SKY

Phone Ringing.

Female Voice--Hello?

 Waiting for that days to pass,
the days that we turned a blind eye to the bloody sky,
the day we missed that final call,
The days gonebye that we turned a blind eye,

Male voice--Honey, I love you. I won't be coming home--Honey, let me talk. There's a man on board. There's a man on board... I swear he's insane.

It has begun,
Your final flight,

Robotic Voice--We are approaching our destination. We will be there soon. Sit back, relax, and enjoy the flight. We'll be there soon.

The 747 is hailing its 911,
It has begun... It has begun... It has begun... It has begun... It has begun....

Explosion. Phone going dead.

Female Voice--Hello?

(Genre: Progressive rock)

This is the same friend that has the Zeppelin shirt. I honestly don't think its that good, even though I wrote a fair amount of it for which I willingly gave up credit.

God, I sound like Roger Waters now, don't I?
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: raxo on November 13, 2005, 08:44:44 PM
I can't imagine him with the Zeppelin T-shirt and singing this ^.
You are not Waters (yet) but begin to sound as Paul (I did that, the open line is mine, ...d'you know?
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on November 13, 2005, 08:49:05 PM
Well, I came up with the terrorist dialouge, and the idea that the wife keeps interrupting him when he tries to tell her, as well as all the music.

Yeah, I'm a dick rocker. But its fun ;D
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: raxo on November 13, 2005, 09:22:10 PM
Glad you can smile again (even laugh if you want). Blue meanies OUT!!   ;)

I'd to go to the 'nothing thread' right now: I'M FEELING FINE!!!  ;D
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on November 13, 2005, 09:40:48 PM
Quote from: andersonCouncill
Well, I came up with the terrorist dialouge, and the idea that the wife keeps interrupting him when he tries to tell her, as well as all the music.

Yeah, I'm a dick rocker. But its fun ;D

Okay, fine. I'm a MEAN rocker.

Hello, my name is Dick, but you can call me Richard.

Hee Hee
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: lennonlemon on November 13, 2005, 09:47:12 PM
Quote from: IndicaWalrus
haha, no really mate - thanks for the comments, it's just what we need..to make us get off our arses and record (only 3 of us)

The song is actually wrote from childhood experience.
Round my local sports club, we used to jump the fence and play tennis on the courts (members only y'see) - the groundsman lived in this scary shed like house..(we called him Shedman) and if the ball went over the fence...you had to nominate someone to get it...the bad thing was..he had this evil dog that was scary as hell.

It was heart pumping stuff..through the overgrown back garden!
:)

Very Sandlot.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on November 13, 2005, 09:52:12 PM
Quote from: lennonlemon

Very Sandlot.

I thought the same thing when I read that.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Indica on November 13, 2005, 11:30:29 PM
Sandlot?  :-/
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on November 13, 2005, 11:43:00 PM
Quote from: IndicaWalrus
Sandlot?
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Indica on November 14, 2005, 05:21:19 PM
Just checked it, yeah I know what you mean!
We always wanted to be like the Goonies..but I suppose every kid was like that :)

That's the sort of imagery I was thinking of when I wrote it.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on November 15, 2005, 02:12:13 AM
i took the title of lennons HDYS? and used that line but the tune is completely different. i wrote this during the peak of Iraq war. a lennon inspired peace song

Oh bullets fly by,
And we see our buddies die,
And we wonder what went wrong,

Oh it
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on November 15, 2005, 02:14:38 AM
just some love song i wrote when i was at a rocky point with my gf.

If I kiss you,
Will you tell me I
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on November 15, 2005, 02:22:50 AM
last song ill post till i get some replies on my last three (btw, i still have like 65 other songs ive written). this one is a really catchy tune that i did that was alot like some of the early beatles stuff. quick, ray charles-y like

You
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on November 15, 2005, 02:39:26 AM
i realize that my songs may be short but they work. if any of you like them at all. (i've got some of my friends that love my love songs....if i actually had a band to play them with) send my a private message if you want me to post more.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on November 15, 2005, 03:24:20 AM
Your brilliant. Everything. Really, brilliant.

NOW POST SOME MORE!
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: The End on November 15, 2005, 12:45:41 PM
You can listen to this song here: http://www.geocities.com/the_end_gb/smile.htm

SEE HER SMILE

VERSE 1
While Suzanna is sound asleep
New York awakens to the traffic in the street
She
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: The End on November 15, 2005, 12:48:07 PM
And you can listen to this one here if you want: http://www.geocities.com/the_end_gb/liverpool.htm

LIVERPOOL STREET

VERSE 1
Because she worked so late tonight
She has to take that dreaded ride
Descends the stairs into this
Necessary nightmare.
Picks her pathway through the crowd
It
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: The End on November 15, 2005, 12:52:02 PM
This one was written about a typical boring Sunday - waking up with a hangover and watching the same old stuff on TV! You can both hear and listen to this one right here: http://www.geocities.com/the_end_gb/sunday.htm

SUNDAY AGAIN

VERSE 1
Outside the window it
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on November 15, 2005, 02:27:12 PM
not to be a little bugging d*ck but i would like some reviews of any one of my songs that I've posted.

btw, The End, your songs arent bad. i enjoyed the one off the site. to lazy to read the others at the moment
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: The End on November 15, 2005, 06:02:44 PM
Ta mate :)

I liked the one you wrote for your girlfriend - very honest and heartfelt ;D
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on November 16, 2005, 02:23:58 AM
hahaha, yea...she didnt buy it though ;D oh well, but ill post some others up. like this one

She
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on November 16, 2005, 02:26:08 AM
i made this like two years ago before i got into U2, and i just realized that this kinda sounds like "One"

I only have one wish to be,
That you can always stick by me,
And that they will see,
That we should stick together,

One wish,
For a better world,
One wish,
To make it so,
And always be close to you and me,

It doesn
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on November 16, 2005, 02:28:54 AM
see, now this is what happens when you mix "Working Class Hero" and U2's "Sunday Bloody Sunday"  ;D


The people are vultures,
Their lies are not true,
They tell you to do it,
And they laugh at you too,

They
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on November 17, 2005, 07:53:02 PM
fellow musicians, are these any good?
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Mairi on November 17, 2005, 07:55:34 PM
The love songs a little cliched but I'd have to hear the melodies to have a full opinion. I like the last one quite a bit though. Maybe you should write more like that.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: An Apple Beatle on November 17, 2005, 08:49:09 PM
It's the chords underneath that can change a lyric....hard to say without heavy analysis...I am a man of little time.  :-/...It's all in the final presentation. ;)
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on November 17, 2005, 10:11:41 PM
sorry i'm being such an ass about this but i thought i'd run my stuff by you guys before i run them by my band.

and yes, i finally, finally have a freaking band after 3 years of failure.

(always go with people that are younger then you...silly freshmen ;D)
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on November 27, 2005, 02:45:51 AM
my most emotional song i've got, something along the lines of "Mother" emotionally. seriously, i actually put my heart and soul into the tune and it just blows your mind once you here it...which ill put up once me and my band record it. the tone is like that of U2's "Kite"



They
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Mairi on November 27, 2005, 03:21:48 AM
That was really sad. Good imagery too. Do you have a name for it?
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Mairi on November 27, 2005, 03:38:37 AM
Oh, this is another little song I wrote called Gypsy. It was orginally supposed to be about the object of my unknown affection, but it kind of turned into something else.

You've got eyes like a gypsy
And a smile twice as wide
Your gypsy cart is left behind
But you don't seem to mind
There's something you will find
You don't have to act so kind
But you're a gypsy
So what's lost is yours to keep
You don't have to dig so deep

(Chorus)
Gypsy boy,
Won't you stay for a while?
With your long ago tales
And your far away smile
Your touchstone heart
And your dewdrop tears
Tell me many stories
But they don't calm my fears

Your gypsy cart is moving
I understand you must go
I only hope that you can know
Just what your tattered spirit shows
As the campfire embers glow
With your gypsy troupe in tow
Just like a child
We'll just have to say adieu
See you next life, good luck too

(Chorus)

Gypsy laughter echoes through the night
Lost in stars of shiny gold
Another chapter will unfold
What is lost will be untold
But I can't put my life on hold
For another gvypsy's promise sold
It's too upsetting
Beneath the darkened summer sky
I'll remember you and I

(Chorus)

And if we ever meet again
Under circumstances gray
We can dance for one more day
Admit the things we'd never say
Find each other when we're stray
From the forgotten
Think of me when you hear this song
And know that you could never be wrong

(Chorus)
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on November 27, 2005, 04:49:29 AM
thats a good song.

i was thinking something like "Watch Over". its supposed to be emotional. i just needed to express everything i felt. and i put all my emotion into it... and this crapped out ;D
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on November 27, 2005, 07:00:32 AM
Tip toeing between genius and insanity,
That is me,
And more than likely,
You too
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: on November 27, 2005, 02:57:56 PM
This is a simple song I wrote, I have better, I don't think it's quite there, as George Harrison said: "A few words needed yet".

---------------------------------------------------
"I Can't Believe (It's Over)"

I can't believe it's over
I can't believe it's true
You were the one I loved, and that was true
You took my heart and ripped it in two

I can't believe it's over
I can't believe it's through
You took my love from me, and now I'm blue
You took my heart and ripped it in two

So sad again, I can't belive it
The air's so bad, I just can't breathe it

You we're the first I ever found
You took my hand and lifted me from the ground
You let it go I fell and found you we're the one that let me down

I can't believe it's over
I can't believe it's true
You were the one I loved and that was true
You took my heart and ripped it in two

I can't believe it's over
I can't believe it's over
I can't believe it's over
I can't believe it's over
-----------------------------------------------------

I've written about thirty all together but my Mother just throws them out when I'm not around, that really p*sses me off. Hell, I guess John had the same problem with Mimi. Ha!
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on November 27, 2005, 03:17:01 PM
hahaha, that ones actually pretty good. you might want to try and put it all into like a Word document, that way there should be at least a copy saved to your computer. which you might want to back up on a disk or something (i didnt do that the first time and lost like 12 good songs i wrote down on one computer but not the other one)
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on November 27, 2005, 03:17:57 PM
Quote from: andersonCouncill
Tip toeing between genius and insanity,
That is me,
And more than likely,
You too

thanks, much appreaciated, always thought i tetered on insanity and genius, just needed a reason ;D
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: GreenApple on November 27, 2005, 03:23:09 PM
Is it blues? They say the Blues can heal!
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: raxo on November 27, 2005, 03:42:17 PM
^If it's not it should be 'cos the lyrics and measure are right for blues.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: on November 27, 2005, 04:13:25 PM
Here's a touge-in-cheek nonsense rocker for Ringo:

"Some Release"

Well I saw her by the bus stop at the end of the street
I wanted her for mine 'cos she looked so sweet

Yeah
Yeah, Yeah
Yeah, Yeah, Yeah!!!!!!

Well I walked up to her I could feel her heart beat
I said listen baby what a way to meet

Yeah
Yeah, Yeah
Yeah, Yeah, Yeah!!!!!!

Now I'm laying here feeling so complete
I say hey baby that was some release

Yeah
Yeah, Yeah,
Yeah, Yeah, Yeah!!!!!!

I have put my Bob Dylan hat on before and written one or two wordy songs, I like this one though because, although simple I can remember it totally off hand which ain't bad for something thats nearly two years old.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: raxo on November 27, 2005, 09:45:20 PM
Quote from: The_End
This one was written about a typical boring Sunday - waking up with a hangover and watching the same old stuff on TV! You can both hear and listen to this one right here: [url]http://www.geocities.com/the_end_gb/sunday.htm[/url]

I really like them (thumbsup) (who's singing?):

The first one (See Her Smile) is obviously the most mainstream and the lyrics, telling the story of that woman, in the best McCartney style,... ;)
The third one (Sunday Again) is the one I like the most ( ;D)
second and third (Liverpool Street) ones remind me somehow... and sorry for saying... remind me to Beautiful South.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on November 27, 2005, 11:58:08 PM
i have no idea what inspired me to write this creepy little diddy, but i was browsing through my massive lists of songs and found this. hope you enjoy

I saw the bullet
Flying through the hole,
Prying up my soul,
Taking on its toll,

My life went by,
I felt a mother
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on November 28, 2005, 12:00:40 AM
okay, one last song from me for awhile, inspired from Bono. during a concert on Bullet The Blue Sky he broke off into a musical poem thingy i guess about John. so i thought id try my hand at it.
Here's "Mark and John"

Hey Mr. Mark,
Lurking in the dark,
You see Johnny
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: twistandshout on November 28, 2005, 12:50:29 AM
Hmm. Five pages of lyrics and not one contribution from wayne L.!

I must say, for a guy who claims to write about 100 lyrics per month, I'm disappointed.

No guts, no glory wayne. Your not aspiring too much!
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on November 28, 2005, 12:54:48 AM
in the words of my fellow highschoolers "ooooooooooooohhhh, you got burned!"  ;D :P ::)
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Mairi on November 28, 2005, 01:58:18 AM
Around where I live, we say "Snipped!" Don't ask me why... we have all our own slang... I think it comes from living in the country. ::)

Anyway, I liked the first song somedude. No offense, but I didn't really like the MDC one. I think you are a better writer when it comes to abstract subjects rather than concrete.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on November 28, 2005, 03:27:12 AM
thanks. i tried. to be honest i didnt really like it, but i get good feedback on it. its my lennon moment, its all crap even though people love it ;D
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on November 28, 2005, 03:28:49 AM
would i be to humble if i said i was a genius :P
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on November 28, 2005, 04:54:33 PM
ok ok, last one for awhile i promise, i wrote this in 15 mins around midnight so its not great or finished but i thought id post it up here for yall to see.


Chorus:
I saw you as a brother,
I saw you as a friend,
But now I know the truth,
You
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on December 01, 2005, 02:10:50 AM
have i like scared off anyone from talking on this thread anymore
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: on December 01, 2005, 04:56:36 AM
Yes.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: twistandshout on December 01, 2005, 08:45:54 PM
On a dark desert highway, cool whip in his hair
warm smell of penis colonics rising up in the air
up ahead in the distance, he saw a shimmering light
his head grew heavy from the meds and his sights grew dim
he had to stop for the night
there she stood in the doorway
he heard the mission bell
and the waynerd was thinking to himself, "Hey, I recognize that foot smell"!
this could be Heaven as this could be Hell
then she lit up a candle and she showed him the way
there were voices down the corridor,
he thought he heard them say...

welcome to the Hotel Bellevue waynerd
such a lovely place
such lovely feet
plenty of room at the Hotel Bellevue
any time of year, you can find him here

his mind is definately twisted, as the waynerd got the weak knee bends
she got a lot of pretty, pretty boys, that she calls friends
how those feet dance in the courtyard, sweat summer sweat
some dance to remember, one he'll never forget

so waynerd called for the doctor
please bring me some more dilaudids and wine
he said we haven't had that spirit here since nineteen sixty nine
and still those voices are calling waynerd from far away
wakes him up in the middle of the night
just to hear them say

welcome to the Hotel Bellevue waynerd
such a lovely place
such lovely feet
they livin' it up at the Hotel Bellevue waynerd
what a nice surprise, bring your alibis

mirrors on the ceiling
the pink pumps are full of champagne on ice
and she said, "We are all just prisoners here waynerd, of our own device."
and in the doctors chambers
they gathered for the feet
they suck and lick them
but they just can't kill that beast named waynerd

last thing he remembered, he was
running for the door
the waynerd had to find the passage back
to the place he was before
relax said the night man
we are programmed to receive
you can check out anytime you like waynerd
but you can never leave!
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on December 01, 2005, 09:38:25 PM
pretty good. is this your unoffical Wayne L. insult song. I laughed my ass off to this. but why waynerd
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: twistandshout on December 01, 2005, 10:25:47 PM
Quote from: somedude210
pretty good. is this your unoffical Wayne L. insult song. I laughed my ass off to this. but why waynerd

Oh, you might say that he and I go back aways!!  ;D

Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: lennonlemon on December 02, 2005, 12:18:32 AM
I never liked Hotel California so I am bias.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on December 03, 2005, 09:54:11 PM
i take it im not gonna get a review of my awesome lyrics

i am so incredibly humble, am i not
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on December 10, 2005, 09:19:19 AM
If I review yours (which is beautiful, I may add) will you review this song

Genre: Freestyle Jazz

IS CAPTAIN BEEFHEART DEAD?

A river breaks a sea of trout blood dancing in the mud
Should we keep going on through this place
This heavy forsaken world
Where we are baked?
Through time we have kept moving this jazz cycle around and around
And found only pain through this guitar
This scar
Are we the last of a breed of rockers?
I certainly hope not
Is Captain Beefheart Dead
Yesterday was the twenty fifth anniversary
Of John's assasination?
Well you all sit and play your playstation
May I inquire that we heed the warnings of Mr. Reed?
Follow the path of Syd?
Did you say that's it or is it sh*t?
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on December 10, 2005, 03:58:43 PM
not bad, didnt really keep the same rythem thoughout, but that isnt all that bad.

whose captain beefheart?
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on December 10, 2005, 04:56:28 PM
Quote from: somedude210
whose captain beefheart?


Well, as I just woke up I'm too lazy to explain it so I'm jus going to link you to the thread, 'kay?

http://dmbeatles.com/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?,b=othermusic,v=display,m=latest
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on December 10, 2005, 08:25:27 PM
ah of course, silly jar-jar :P
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on December 11, 2005, 10:52:20 PM
and lyrics reviews out there?
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Mairi on December 12, 2005, 10:50:33 PM
Actually not a song but a poem I've been trying to set to music:

Not really brown hair
But a sea for you to touch
And sort of kind of loving
Just a little bit too much
And I know it's not the things
You should be accustomed to
But really it's all I've got
To offer to someone like you
Sometimes I'm quite cynical
But I also believe in dreams
And I believe in something
Or at least that's how it seems
It's not the same as Barbie dolls
All lined up in a row
And I'm not as pretty as the other ones
Who'll jump when you say go
I may not be a princess
I may not be as good as all the rest
But I do have long brown hair
Tumbling down my modest bre@sts
So maybe it is something else
And I've never been on your mind
But turn around and take a look
There's something you can find
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: raxo on December 12, 2005, 11:01:43 PM
Each line seems so real... so true to the truth: naked truth, really.
I do admire you for being so brave as you've shown in that poem, ... woman.
I take my hat off.

P.S. I don't think it needs music,... it has strengh.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on December 12, 2005, 11:15:13 PM
ur just saying that cause u proposed to her. we didnt have that chance.

btw nice poem. like to hear it as a song
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on December 12, 2005, 11:19:08 PM
jeez, she goes soul searching...what do i do? i talk about jesus and the devil and sh*t. damn political songs  ;D :P
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on December 13, 2005, 12:14:06 AM
Mairi, that was wonderful. the best post here thus far.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: raxo on December 13, 2005, 04:54:33 PM
Quote from: somedude210
ur just saying that cause u proposed to her. we didnt have that chance.

btw nice poem. like to hear it as a song


BUT WHAT THE HELL ARE YOU SAYING, dude???!!!! I've NEVER proposed to her or even tried or thought (sorry, it sounds terrible). TELL US when and where I did such a thing!!!.
You're badly wrong: it was TheMasterOfGoingFaster:
http://dmbeatles.com/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b=admin,m=1133655518

I've just said what I do thought, as I used to ... and the poem explains by itself.
I like Mairi for being the way she is,... and you're not near to reality. I'm old enough for not being playing those games, guy, ... tho I can admit I may sound like a teenager sometimes...
By the way, what's the problem if YOU, somedude210, want to porpose to her???

P.S. I don't think it needs music,... it has strengh.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Indica on December 13, 2005, 05:11:59 PM
I have to say, the poem impressed me :)
Great body of work.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on December 13, 2005, 06:56:16 PM
Quote from: raxo

BUT WHAT THE HELL ARE YOU SAYING, dude???!!!! I've NEVER proposed to her or even tried or thought (sorry, it sounds terrible). TELL US when and where I did such a thing!!!.
You're badly wrong: it was TheMasterOfGoingFaster:
[url]http://dmbeatles.com/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b=admin,m=1133655518[/url]

I've just said what I do thought, as I used to ... and the poem explains by itself.
I like Mairi for being the way she is,... and you're not near to reality. I'm old enough for not being playing those games, guy, ... tho I can admit I may sound like a teenager sometimes...
By the way, what's the problem if YOU, somedude210, want to porpose to her???

P.S. I don't think it needs music,... it has strengh.


whoa, whoa, whoa, whoa...lois this is not my batman cup.;D

but anyway, sorry, i was sorely mistaken. i was just kidding around. i didnt mean to upset you. i must've thought that it was you that proposed since you say so much that i cant keep track of what you actually say. im sorry dude. didnt mean to cause you so much flippage

we cool?
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on December 13, 2005, 09:55:35 PM
Quote from: raxo

BUT WHAT THE HELL ARE YOU SAYING, dude???!!!! I've NEVER proposed to her or even tried or thought (sorry, it sounds terrible). TELL US when and where I did such a thing!!!.
You're badly wrong: it was TheMasterOfGoingFaster:
[url]http://dmbeatles.com/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b=admin,m=1133655518[/url]

I've just said what I do thought, as I used to ... and the poem explains by itself.
I like Mairi for being the way she is,... and you're not near to reality. I'm old enough for not being playing those games, guy, ... tho I can admit I may sound like a teenager sometimes...
By the way, what's the problem if YOU, somedude210, want to porpose to her???

P.S. I don't think it needs music,... it has strengh.



Well, if--And this is a big if--I were to know her personally and somewhat well (which I don't) I could see that. However, I do not, and I would never propose to one over the internet. Its scary, man. There have been times though, were I swore to myself well talking to a girl "God, if any of the girls in Wisconsin were anywhere near THAT cool, I would soo ask them out". However, any sort of "relationship" with someone over the internet that you have never met, beyond friendly chatting, just creeps me out so, uh no, not me. And I was under the assumption TheMasterOfGoingFast was kidding around.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on December 13, 2005, 09:57:51 PM
Mairi, if you would like I could set it to music and post it for you. However, as it is your poem I would largely leave it to you to figure this kind of stuff out. Just an offer.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Mairi on December 14, 2005, 02:11:48 AM
That would be so cool! I'd love to hear a version of it to music. I'm crap at writing melodies anyway.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on December 14, 2005, 02:46:26 AM
Quote from: Mairi
That would be so cool! I'd love to hear a version of it to music. I'm crap at writing melodies anyway.

Well, I'll tell you what:

Give Mary more room on your sig and I could make sure it gets on an album. Or I could just do it if you wanted me to and didn't want to change your sig, I suppose.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Mairi on December 14, 2005, 02:37:44 PM
heh heh, you want more Marilyn?
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on December 14, 2005, 09:20:26 PM
ill drink to that!!! (beer)
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Bobber on December 14, 2005, 09:23:30 PM
Quote from: somedude210
ill drink to that!!! (beer)

Yes, we know now that you probably drink to anything.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on December 14, 2005, 10:49:20 PM
hahahahaha, oh yea...but more of maryilyn, id definately drink to that one
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on December 15, 2005, 12:23:51 AM
Quote from: Mairi
heh heh, you want more Marilyn?

I'm a 14 year old male... I WANT ALL OF MARILYN!
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: The End on December 15, 2005, 12:47:33 AM
Quote from: Mairi
Actually not a song but a poem I've been trying to set to music:
([url]http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v120/hermionestarchild/Picture0021.jpg[/url])
Not really brown hair
But a sea for you to touch
And sort of kind of loving
Just a little bit too much
And I know it's not the things
You should be accustomed to
But really it's all I've got
To offer to someone like you
Sometimes I'm quite cynical
But I also believe in dreams
And I believe in something
Or at least that's how it seems
It's not the same as Barbie dolls
All lined up in a row
And I'm not as pretty as the other ones
Who'll jump when you say go
I may not be a princess
I may not be as good as all the rest
But I do have long brown hair
Tumbling down my modest bre@sts
So maybe it is something else
And I've never been on your mind
But turn around and take a look
There's something you can find


This is absolutely AWESOME Mairi! So honest and personal. Do you have an idea in your head how it should sound if set to music?
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on December 15, 2005, 02:46:56 AM
Quote from: The_End

This is absolutely AWESOME Mairi! So honest and personal. Do you have an idea in your head how it should sound if set to music?

When I first read that post my thought was, that certainly dispells the myth that "There's no such thing as girls on the internet."

Also, if I made it into a song, what would you like me to call it? I'm thinking of just naming it after you.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on December 15, 2005, 03:09:18 AM
Okay, be open minded when you read this everyone, or else you'll think I'm insane. Its very creepy and disturbing... But  it is NOT advocating this kind of behavior. If anything, it is anti-violence, showing the disturbing nature at the human nature.

LOVE YOU SO

Why won't you take my e-mail?
I'm feeling ignored.
Oh, you might like to here this,
Y'know that picture you posted on the board?
I changed it to make background,
Printed it up and pasted it all over my wall,
All thats left is to win your heart,
Come to me,
Come to me,
Thou art...
Please please explain,
What made you stop?
We had so much in common,
We both liked Lennon,
We both have cats,
Were both vegetarians,
I am so entranced by your smile,
If only I could see you for a while,
Gimmee your number and I promise I'll dial,
Come to me,
Come to me,
Thou art...
You can cry on my shoulder,
I will be your boulder,
I will never let you go,
You will never leave my heart,
You will never leave my mind,
And someday before you know it,
You'll be in my eye Do not be afraid,
Do not fear a thing,
I will hold you and I will sing like your pretty bird,
Haven't you heard,
I love you,
I love you so,
Come to me,
Come to me,
Thou art,
Be mine,
Please.
Be mine please,
Be mine,
Please,
My mind is plagued by a disease,
Only you can cure,
You my love,
You,
Are the remedy,
Save me,
Cure me,
I know I'm insane but,
I know you love me deep inside,
Even though I am mad just a bit,
Is it that your afraid,
Its okay,
You can trust me honey,
Baby maybe one day we'll get married,
Share a house with 8 kids,
And I can work and you can cook,
And late at night we'll each read books,
Well lying in bed,
Come with me,
Without you my soul is dead
Please be mine,
I can't take it without you,
Will end it without you,
Sometimes I want to shout at you,
I feel ignored,
Sometimes I think your just some internet whore,
But ahh thats just foolishness,
Is it not?
I love you and you I too,
And the two of us shall do the things all things two lovers do,
I found your boyfriend's e-mail,
Don't worry he won't get in the way,
Through hacking I've found him to be gay,
Blackmailed him and let him know,
She's got a new guy now,
In me,
Can't you see?
We were meant to be...
Be mine
Be mine
Be mine
Be mine
Be mine
Be mine
Be mine so
Be mine please,
I feel it all slipping away,
I'm going insane,
The more I long for you,
The more I need you.
You may be flattered to know,
I've stopped looking at porn,
Your beautiful enough,
Drop dead gorgeous,
That I don't need that smut,
Those fake breasts,
Those greasy butts,
'Cause I've got you,
A Modern Munroe,
I'll die without you,
Die inside,
And when dead inside,
Who is really alive?
So without you,
I hope yo know,
I'll blow myself out in the snow,
Ohh...
Be mine
Be mine
Be mine
Be mine
Be mine
Come to me
Come to me
Come to me
Come to me
Come to me
Come to me
Come to me
Come to me
Come to me
Come to me
Come to me
Come to me
Come to me
Thou art...
Oh how I need you,
I breathe, see, and eat you,
Your always on my mind,
Not sexually,
I'm not that kind of guy,
Why would you ignore me so?
We have so much in common,
Come to me
Come to me
Come to me
Thou art...
Come to me,
Come to me,
Come to me,
Thou art...
Come to me,
Come to me,
Come to me,
Thou art...
I'm almost there...
Please be my mate...
I just crossed into the state...
I'm in your county...
I'm in your town...
I'm on your lane...
I'm in your house....
I'm on your bed...
With you beneath me...
Why'd it have to be this way...
Why would you do this to me?
Look what you went and made me do, hon...
Its okay, I still love you...
They won't bury you...
I won't let them...
You'll stay in my house...
You'll sleep in my bed...
We never had what we could have before...
Maybe now it will be easier...
Now that your dead...

I'm not proud. I am made uncomfortable to read it and even more uneasy thinking about the fact it came out of my head. I am sorry if this has offended anyone.
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Post by: The End on December 15, 2005, 09:09:08 AM
Great set of lyrics actually - very filmic. I love the way the madness just builds and builds - reminds me a little of Eminem's "Stan".

Nice one! :)
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: The End on December 15, 2005, 09:11:02 AM
Quote from: andersonCouncill

I'm thinking of just naming it after you.

Me? Nah, name it after Mairi!! ;D Hee hee
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on December 15, 2005, 01:17:30 PM
Quote from: The_End
Great set of lyrics actually - very filmic. I love the way the madness just builds and builds - reminds me a little of Eminem's "Stan".

Nice one! :)

I love that song.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on December 15, 2005, 07:49:15 PM
obviously i cant top mairi's but this is something that i came up with last night. about half way through i realized that it carried similar tune to Happy Xmas (War is Over). so  i thought id put the parts of each verse from Xmas for you guys to follow along

(beginning)
You told me to fight,
You told me to win,
Wielding the wit,
That is razor thin,

(and so this is xmas...)
We fought for justice,
We fought for peace,
But our cause is too small,
To let it release

(a very merry xmas...)
We
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on December 15, 2005, 09:49:52 PM
Don't worry. Many of my poems resemble my inspirations works. WHEE!, my tribute to Syd Barrett, sounds almost identical to Flaming in spots.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Mairi on December 15, 2005, 10:17:51 PM
I know what you mean, one of my songs sounds a lot like "Pieces of You" by Jewel.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on December 15, 2005, 10:43:37 PM
Mairi, before I can do anything with that I need to know what kind of sound you want:

Heavy
Melodic
progressive
ambient
bluesy

I mean, there are many more but out of those 5 if what I was thinking.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Mairi on December 15, 2005, 11:26:28 PM
Something melodic, maybe a little Jealous Guy-ish sounding.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on December 15, 2005, 11:30:29 PM
Quote from: Mairi
Something melodic, maybe a little Jealous Guy-ish sounding.

I was thinking melodic, too, actually. Ever hear Remember The Day by Pink Floyd?
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Mairi on December 15, 2005, 11:31:54 PM
Yeah, that sounds familiar...
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on December 15, 2005, 11:36:30 PM
Quote from: Mairi
Yeah, that sounds familiar...

Its early. From their second LP, and not the Floyd most people know. Certainly not the vision of a bi-polar rock star like The Wall.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on December 15, 2005, 11:46:36 PM
Flicker flam!
Thank you ma'am!
Love you?
Yes I do!
Flacker Flim!
Wanna see a film?
Me and you?
'Cause I quite do!
Falm Filcker!
I'll buy you a silk shirt!
When I get the money!
I'll buy you whatever you want!
Whatever you need!
If you'll call me honey!

This is my attempt at an early Beatles style song.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on December 16, 2005, 01:46:08 AM
eh. you must embrace the 60s pop feel, my young padawan learner  :P

only then can you fully create an early beatles-esque song, grasshopper

a wise man once said, "we're gonna be around longer then christianity"
....think like you are more powerful then jesus and you will make a early beatles-esque song ;D
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on December 16, 2005, 01:48:24 AM
btw, can anyone at least critizise any of my songs please...

all i am saying, is give em a chance
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on December 16, 2005, 02:24:49 AM
Quote from: somedude210
i have no idea what inspired me to write this creepy little diddy, but i was browsing through my massive lists of songs and found this. hope you enjoy

I saw the bullet
Flying through the hole,
Prying up my soul,
Taking on its toll,

My life went by,
I felt a mother
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on December 16, 2005, 02:45:07 AM
sweet, thanks man. dont forget the others that no one has reviewed yet. i think they're like the last two or three i posted
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on December 16, 2005, 02:47:43 AM
Quote from: somedude210
btw, can anyone at least critizise any of my songs please...

all i am saying, is give em a chance

I don't want to critique them if there songs, because then I'm only getting part of it. And it just takes time for me to put up a full analysis which is why I've kept to mainly shorter responses.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on December 16, 2005, 02:08:11 PM
song is such a general term for me, at most, i have a basic tune to the lyrics. they're just beefed up poems
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Mairi on December 18, 2005, 04:49:11 AM
Just another one I wrote recently

Dream

Last night I dreamed that you and I
Were walking hand in hand
And you whispered all your hidden thoughts
As we walked along the sand
But the second that I closed my eyes
You vanished with the mist
And I stood alone and wondered why
I never had been kissed

(Chorus)
But it was only a dream
And we were never meant to be
It was just a fantasy
You were never close to me
And you will never see

As the summer rain began to fall
I sat down by the shore
And as it trickled down my face
I only hoped for more
Left alone to lick my wounds
I watched the ocean's tide
Like a lonely sailor cast away
With no one by my side

(Chorus)

You know it's easier to believe
When nothing's in your way
But that doesn't seem to be the case
When you're waiting every day
I can see what today's wind will blow
Whatever will happen to you I don't know...
Now I'm searching for another reprieve
How can I be sure you won't just leave?
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on December 18, 2005, 04:55:34 AM
pretty good...your songs are like good expanded versions of mine...its deep

btw, do you like emo music. i was wondering since from what ive been able to understand about emo, its music about losing someone or something, with like loads of metaphors...and i think that does kinda fit with that. but then again im not all that on top of emo.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on December 18, 2005, 04:55:39 AM
Quote from: Mairi
Just another one I wrote recently

Dream

Last night I dreamed that you and I
Were walking hand in hand
And you whispered all your hidden thoughts
As we walked along the sand
But the second that I closed my eyes
You vanished with the mist
And I stood alone and wondered why
I never had been kissed

(Chorus)
But it was only a dream
And we were never meant to be
It was just a fantasy
You were never close to me
And you will never see

As the summer rain began to fall
I sat down by the shore
And as it trickled down my face
I only hoped for more
Left alone to lick my wounds
I watched the ocean's tide
Like a lonely sailor cast away
With no one by my side

(Chorus)

You know it's easier to believe
When nothing's in your way
But that doesn't seem to be the case
When you're waiting every day
I can see what today's wind will blow
Whatever will happen to you I don't know...
Now I'm searching for another reprieve
How can I be sure you won't just leave?

Thats sweet. Reminds me of a dream I had last night though mine was a fair bit darker.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Mairi on December 18, 2005, 04:59:51 AM
Quote from: somedude210
pretty good...your songs are like good expanded versions of mine...its deep

btw, do you like emo music. i was wondering since from what ive been able to understand about emo, its music about losing someone or something, with like loads of metaphors...and i think that does kinda fit with that. but then again im not all that on top of emo.

No, I don't listen to emo... or whatever it is the kids are listening to these days... ::) lol...

Most of my songs are really depressing, but that's only because I don't really have anything wonderful to sing about... and even when I try to write something upbeat, it comes out sounding cliched. I think Me and My Shadow was the only good "up" song I ever wrote.

Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on December 18, 2005, 05:02:28 AM
Im in bed
Aching head
Gold is lead
Choke on bread
Underfed
Gold is lead
Jesus bled
Pain is red
Doctor
Groul ghoul
Greasy spoon
Used spoon
June blue

Music seems to help the pain
Seems to stimulate the brain
Doctor kindly tell your wife that I'm alive,
Flowers thrive
Realize
Realize
Realize...


WHAT?!?!
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on December 18, 2005, 05:04:02 AM
Quote from: Mairi

No, I don't listen to emo... or whatever it is the kids are listening to these days... ::) lol...

Most of my songs are really depressing, but that's only because I don't really have anything wonderful to sing about... and even when I try to write something upbeat, it comes out sounding cliched. I think Me and My Shadow was the only good "up" song I ever wrote.


When I'm being serious my songs are very depressing but if I just go goofy they can be upbeat...

Most of my "serious up" songs are about sex, lewd as it may be.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Mairi on December 18, 2005, 05:08:05 AM
Haha, I wrote a song about sex once. It was crappy. Seeing as I don't have much experience in that area. :P
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on December 18, 2005, 05:12:15 AM
Quote from: Mairi
Haha, I wrote a song about sex once. It was crappy. Seeing as I don't have much experience in that area. :P


I have a few, I think you read em. There in my rock opera.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on December 18, 2005, 05:16:14 AM
Women are my rock star thing. Aside from getting my messages across, its the girls... I could do without fame and fortune but I sooo want the rock star thing. I have a notebook were I keep quotes concerning my ideals.. ehh... Misadventures. Not for any reason, they are just funny stories that I like. And a quote concerning loss of bodily fluids of young girls well see The Boys at the Ed Sullivan show. And a story concerning an octopus, a groupie, and Led Zeppelin. Its all quite funny that I keep that stupid sh*t. I must get really bored sometimes.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on December 18, 2005, 05:24:00 AM
I seriously wrote this in like the last 15 minutes. Its a slow tempo that builds up on the "Lay down your love..." part

Close your eyes,
Let your mind fly,
Let your spirit soar,
To the pearly white doors,

Lose yourself,
Let your mind know it
And your heart opens,
The door
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on December 18, 2005, 05:25:31 AM
I either have like uplifting love (see like early beatles paul songs), rather sad and depressing love songs, or really political songs that range from sarcasim to anger (last one was sarcasim...and the "Mr. Bobo" song)
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on December 18, 2005, 05:25:57 AM
and yes, I refered to the president as Mr. Bobo  ;D ;D ;D
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on December 18, 2005, 05:28:54 AM
Quote from: somedude210
and yes, I refered to the president as Mr. Bobo
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on December 18, 2005, 05:33:48 AM
well, "dear mr dickhead" could refer to anyone and everyone. at least i kinda narrowed it down.

anyway, come on, tell me how good or bad my crap songs are. (in the words of lennon, all my songs are crap!)
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on December 18, 2005, 06:49:52 AM
MOTEL

Heroin Whores pave the doorways of place
And there's cum on the floor and there's cum on the bedspread and there's cum on the dreser at the bed's end
So come on ol' girl from the side o' the road and we'll get all comfy
Girl can you not see we were meant to be
And there's whore's in the beds and there's pimps in the bath and there's coke in the dresser and there's gold in the bed
And a junkie lays at the doorsteps not movin' a bit, lyin' in his own sh*tt 'cause for the last three weeks he's been dead
So come on ol' girl from the side o' the road and we'll get all comfy
Girl can't you see we were meant to be
And there's pervs in the back who crawled outta the theater with wet paints and sticky fingers
And there's leatherbound men whipping naked women and there's a vet in the third floor with a shotgun to his head
So come on ol' girl from the side o' the road and we'll get all comfy
Girl can you not see we were meant to be
And the owner is in the storage room on a chair with a noose round his neck and upstanding hair
And his daughters on the street 'cause he pushed her out in the cold and she needs to make a buck and her money's two-fold
'Cause she'll do anything for any amount o' money so she has no standards she'll do jocks or middle-aged, or nerds
And she don't know it yet but she's 2 months pregnant from a night at a party where she was gagged with drapes and then gangraped
And she where's too much make-up and she's headed down the path back to that motel where the Heroin Whores pave the doorways of the place,
And thats why I'm hear ol' girl from the side of the road 'cause until then we only knew rumors and its worse then I ever coulda knew,
And what're ya gonna do?
I'm goin' to the motel,
Give that doorbell a ring,
Ya may be mad now girl but I guarantee
I just saved your life
This is a sting
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Mairi on December 18, 2005, 05:19:42 PM
This is a really STUPID, STUPID song that could be a huge hit (it's very catchy)

The Coconut Song

If you're feeling down in the dumps
The Coconut Song will pick you up
You just have to shake your thing
It makes you wanna dance and sing

(Chorus)

Coconut
Coconut
Coconut
Coconut
Coconut
Coconut
Coconut
Coconut

Dance and dance and never stop
Until you reach the very top
Wave your arms up in the air
Wave 'em around, like you just don't care

(Chorus)

It's a brand new dance sensation
The Coconut song is sweeping the nation
So everyone get out on the floor
And dance and dance some more!

(Chorus)

Come on, take a chance
It's the Coconut dance
Come on, take a chance
It's the Coconut dance

(Chorus X2)


Bob Dylan would NOT be proud.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Indica on December 18, 2005, 05:38:43 PM
But Bananarama might!
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on December 19, 2005, 03:09:58 AM
Quote from: Mairi
This is a really STUPID, STUPID song that could be a huge hit (it's very catchy)

The Coconut Song

If you're feeling down in the dumps
The Coconut Song will pick you up
You just have to shake your thing
It makes you wanna dance and sing

(Chorus)

Coconut
Coconut
Coconut
Coconut
Coconut
Coconut
Coconut
Coconut

Dance and dance and never stop
Until you reach the very top
Wave your arms up in the air
Wave 'em around, like you just don't care

(Chorus)

It's a brand new dance sensation
The Coconut song is sweeping the nation
So everyone get out on the floor
And dance and dance some more!

(Chorus)

Come on, take a chance
It's the Coconut dance
Come on, take a chance
It's the Coconut dance

(Chorus X2)


Bob Dylan would NOT be proud.

Ms. Marley, the doctor will see you now, please take the noose off from around your neck and get off our chair.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on December 19, 2005, 03:10:39 AM
Quote from: andersonCouncill
MOTEL

Heroin Whores pave the doorways of place
And there's cum on the floor and there's cum on the bedspread and there's cum on the dreser at the bed's end
So come on ol' girl from the side o' the road and we'll get all comfy
Girl can you not see we were meant to be
And there's whore's in the beds and there's pimps in the bath and there's coke in the dresser and there's gold in the bed
And a junkie lays at the doorsteps not movin' a bit, lyin' in his own sh*tt 'cause for the last three weeks he's been dead
So come on ol' girl from the side o' the road and we'll get all comfy
Girl can't you see we were meant to be
And there's pervs in the back who crawled outta the theater with wet paints and sticky fingers
And there's leatherbound men whipping naked women and there's a vet in the third floor with a shotgun to his head
So come on ol' girl from the side o' the road and we'll get all comfy
Girl can you not see we were meant to be
And the owner is in the storage room on a chair with a noose round his neck and upstanding hair
And his daughters on the street 'cause he pushed her out in the cold and she needs to make a buck and her money's two-fold
'Cause she'll do anything for any amount o' money so she has no standards she'll do jocks or middle-aged, or nerds
And she don't know it yet but she's 2 months pregnant from a night at a party where she was gagged with drapes and then gangraped
And she where's too much make-up and she's headed down the path back to that motel where the Heroin Whores pave the doorways of the place,
And thats why I'm hear ol' girl from the side of the road 'cause until then we only knew rumors and its worse then I ever coulda knew,
And what're ya gonna do?
I'm goin' to the motel,
Give that doorbell a ring,
Ya may be mad now girl but I guarantee
I just saved your life
This is a sting

Please tell me what you think about this.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Bobber on December 19, 2005, 08:59:11 AM
Quote from: Mairi
This is a really STUPID, STUPID song that could be a huge hit (it's very catchy)

The Coconut Song

If you're feeling down in the dumps
The Coconut Song will pick you up
You just have to shake your thing
It makes you wanna dance and sing

(Chorus)

Coconut
Coconut
Coconut
Coconut
Coconut
Coconut
Coconut
Coconut

Dance and dance and never stop
Until you reach the very top
Wave your arms up in the air
Wave 'em around, like you just don't care

(Chorus)

It's a brand new dance sensation
The Coconut song is sweeping the nation
So everyone get out on the floor
And dance and dance some more!

(Chorus)

Come on, take a chance
It's the Coconut dance
Come on, take a chance
It's the Coconut dance

(Chorus X2)


Bob Dylan would NOT be proud.

This might be a bigger hit than all of Bob's stuff.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Mairi on December 19, 2005, 12:58:54 PM
I liked your song alot, Brian... especially the ending, because I didn't see it coming.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: on December 19, 2005, 04:56:07 PM
Quote from: andersonCouncill
MOTEL

Heroin Whores pave the doorways of place
And there's cum on the floor and there's cum on the bedspread and there's cum on the dreser at the bed's end
So come on ol' girl from the side o' the road and we'll get all comfy
Girl can you not see we were meant to be
And there's whore's in the beds and there's pimps in the bath and there's coke in the dresser and there's gold in the bed
And a junkie lays at the doorsteps not movin' a bit, lyin' in his own sh*tt 'cause for the last three weeks he's been dead
So come on ol' girl from the side o' the road and we'll get all comfy
Girl can't you see we were meant to be
And there's pervs in the back who crawled outta the theater with wet paints and sticky fingers
And there's leatherbound men whipping naked women and there's a vet in the third floor with a shotgun to his head
So come on ol' girl from the side o' the road and we'll get all comfy
Girl can you not see we were meant to be
And the owner is in the storage room on a chair with a noose round his neck and upstanding hair
And his daughters on the street 'cause he pushed her out in the cold and she needs to make a buck and her money's two-fold
'Cause she'll do anything for any amount o' money so she has no standards she'll do jocks or middle-aged, or nerds
And she don't know it yet but she's 2 months pregnant from a night at a party where she was gagged with drapes and then gangraped
And she where's too much make-up and she's headed down the path back to that motel where the Heroin Whores pave the doorways of the place,
And thats why I'm hear ol' girl from the side of the road 'cause until then we only knew rumors and its worse then I ever coulda knew,
And what're ya gonna do?
I'm goin' to the motel,
Give that doorbell a ring,
Ya may be mad now girl but I guarantee
I just saved your life
This is a sting

Too many words for my liking.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Indica on December 19, 2005, 05:27:58 PM
Quote from: andersonCouncill

Please tell me what you think about this.

I think it's not that bad of an idea, but you try and say too much.
It gets lost in in its own meaning.

I like the contrast of something such as love against the seedy world which is described (including the narrator)

For me personally, it's a tad graphic in detail - I prefer more subtly, but the hard hitting aspect is obviously what you're going for.

If worked on, could go places :)

Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on December 19, 2005, 07:44:16 PM
Quote from: somedude210
obviously i cant top mairi's but this is something that i came up with last night. about half way through i realized that it carried similar tune to Happy Xmas (War is Over). so  i thought id put the parts of each verse from Xmas for you guys to follow along

(beginning)
You told me to fight,
You told me to win,
Wielding the wit,
That is razor thin,

(and so this is xmas...)
We fought for justice,
We fought for peace,
But our cause is too small,
To let it release

(a very merry xmas...)
We
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on December 20, 2005, 12:09:51 AM
i remember how you loved me,
the time i was in pain,
but now that you're gone,
there is only sorrow for my pain,
in the days ahead,
i want to something for my needs,
and find that someone,
besides the cacti and the weed,
i thought i could win,
the lover of my heart,
but now i am cold,
colder than i thought,

and now the months are turning,
with eyes of blue and red,
knowing that my end's near,
is something that i dread,
i'm not known for anything,
like racism or world peace,
i'm just a man with a dream,
that no one will hear...

of life and love,
and my failures,
a dying man's last wish,
to live without the hate,
not to judge but embrace,
and know your fate,
i've seen many in the world,
who hate because they can,
by calling them black,
or gay, or a hispanic man,

so i ask you,
on the day i'm about to die,
what makes it cool,
to hate someone and cover them in lies,
the one thing i want,
before i pass away,
is life and unity,
and make it a beautiful day,

there is no reason, to hate one another,
we are all one people, one nation, one color...
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Mairi on December 28, 2005, 04:10:55 PM
This is a song I wrote a couple of months ago. I didn't like it at the time, but I re-discovered it today and I guess it's not all that bad. At least it's one song that's not so depressing.

Love Song

Roses and candy?
I find them stupid
Love tokens
Of a clueless cupid
I really want
Some righteous
Not a valentine
From a dove
I want a love song
Make it catchy
The words should rhyme
Not too matchy-matchy

(Chorus)
Write me a love song
A good one, too
I want a love song
Written by you
Give me my love song
I need one by now
Just write me a love song
Don't ask me how

Not too sappy
Not too brute
Be sure to mention
I'm really cute
Or something like that
You know what I mean
Don't you remember
Music videos you've seen
Elton John knows
Go ask him
And did I mention
make me grin?

(Chorus)

A love song baby
Fast or slow
I'm down with that
I could go
A jukebox song
a new favorite
When I get my song
I'll savour it
That was dumb
A stupid rhyme
But where's my song
It's almost time

(Chorus)

(slower)
If you won't write a song for me
I'll write one for myself
And leave it on the windowsill
Or somewhere on the shelf
I know no one would listen
But that's okay, you see
I just want to have my love song
Copyright it to me
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Mairi on December 28, 2005, 04:13:45 PM
Somedude, I really likes your song a lot by the way... it's sad, but it has a positive message... definitely channeling Lennon there.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Mairi on January 04, 2006, 06:16:50 PM
I changed my mind, I don't like my song. I'll post a different ome I wrote called Homemade Heart later.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on January 05, 2006, 01:47:08 AM
i always channel lennon  ;D
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on January 05, 2006, 01:48:06 AM
heres one i just made (so obviously it sucks) about the miner tradgedy here in the states.


In a small little mining town,
Trapped in the walls of fear,
Twelve look on in despair,
Without the air,
And love above the ground,
The ground around, rattles and hums

Town holds on,
Gasping for news,
Looking on with hope,
That the twelve will return,
In a small little mining town,

Town bells ring,
They are all alive,
Families hug and praise,
Happy that there
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on January 05, 2006, 02:58:05 AM
Lennon had Mother, I have Father

...i am no lennon

Father,
In my darkest hour,
You weren
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Bobber on January 05, 2006, 08:27:14 AM
^Sad story. The last verse is a bit unnecessary to me... Reading the lyrics I was thinking of Julian Lennon actually.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on January 05, 2006, 09:16:43 PM
hahahahaha! well i did say that i channelled lennon...just didnt say which one ;D

as for the last verse...yea, i didnt really liked it either. its like the yoko ono of the song, it just brings it down ;D
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on January 06, 2006, 03:10:06 AM
Empty Shoes

Walking miles,
By the waves,
Is lifting up a broken soul,
When nothing but an open eye,
Can look across my universe,

Pools of tears,
And sound of sadness,
Is going through my open mind,
Nothing is as simple as,
Walking through the ends of time,

You may see only empty shoes,
But someday you will see them all,
Nothing but the heels of men,
Drifting in from near and far,

One day they will come to see,
The day when all right will be,
And you can see that lover,
That you lost in this vast universe,

The only empty you can see,
Is nothing more to you or me,
But this is what is left by those,
Who you loved and will forever be,

The endless shoes,
Go on and on,
With nothing ever stopping them,
And never finding love again,

Fill these shoes,
With your own love,
And others will soon follow you,
And find all those that they have lost,
Traveling through this universe,
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Joost on January 06, 2006, 08:12:51 AM
This is what always happens when I'm trying to write lyrics:

OK, I think I finally have a good idea for a song lyric... I'll just start and see if it works out

Five minutes later:
Wow, this is a really good verse... Wow...

Five more minutes later:
Wow, this second verse is really good too... These are my best lyrics so far... Hands down!

Fifteen more minutes later:
I'm stuck now, but I need one more verse and a chorus... I'll finish it tomorrow I guess.

Next day:
Jesus Christ, how could I possibly think this was good? What the hell was I thinking yesterday? This is rubbish! I'll just start from zero again.

And then the whole process repeats itself again.

 8)
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on January 06, 2006, 08:11:55 PM
yea ive done this with many of them. like that empty shoes on, i origianlly wrote it after a friends grandparent died. so i wrote it and was like "my god, this is not that great..."

it does pay off though, i did my first song "Dance with me sweetheart" and it honestly...sucked monkey testicles. but i changed it 2 years later after an awesome night at a school dance and rewrote it with the same meaning and it was seriously some of my best. i never heard anything bad about it, girls even cried over how good it was.

...and then my computer died a week later and i never moved a copy to the one in my room, so ive tried to rewrite it.

...i cried for three weeks, i couldnt write a single song for 2 months after that...
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on January 06, 2006, 08:14:12 PM
granted i had already wrote like 78 different song lyrics by the time it died. i lost about 6 of those permanently.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on January 09, 2006, 12:45:23 AM
Quote from: somedude210
Empty Shoes

Walking miles,
By the waves,
Is lifting up a broken soul,
When nothing but an open eye,
Can look across my universe,

Pools of tears,
And sound of sadness,
Is going through my open mind,
Nothing is as simple as,
Walking through the ends of time,

You may see only empty shoes,
But someday you will see them all,
Nothing but the heels of men,
Drifting in from near and far,

One day they will come to see,
The day when all right will be,
And you can see that lover,
That you lost in this vast universe,

The only empty you can see,
Is nothing more to you or me,
But this is what is left by those,
Who you loved and will forever be,

The endless shoes,
Go on and on,
With nothing ever stopping them,
And never finding love again,

Fill these shoes,
With your own love,
And others will soon follow you,
And find all those that they have lost,
Traveling through this universe,

review it damnit!  ;D ;D
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Kevin on January 09, 2006, 10:22:13 AM
Quote from: Biscuit_Power
This is what always happens when I'm trying to write lyrics:

OK, I think I finally have a good idea for a song lyric... I'll just start and see if it works out

Five minutes later:
Wow, this is a really good verse... Wow...

Five more minutes later:
Wow, this second verse is really good too... These are my best lyrics so far... Hands down!

Fifteen more minutes later:
I'm stuck now, but I need one more verse and a chorus... I'll finish it tomorrow I guess.

Next day:
Jesus Christ, how could I possibly think this was good? What the hell was I thinking yesterday? This is rubbish! I'll just start from zero again.

And then the whole process repeats itself again.

 8)

Ha ha. Exactly my experience. I have a whole collection of fab 1st verses and chorus. Refrains/middle 8's/bridges almost always defeat me. I'm a good intro man though.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: An Apple Beatle on January 09, 2006, 11:33:11 AM
Hey man...I'm in that club too!!! hehehehehe

I seem to have said it all after verse 1 and a chorus....Been concentrating on instrumentals recently. lol
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Kevin on January 09, 2006, 12:02:29 PM
I can still remember my first "song." I must have been about 12 and their was a talent show on telly where people would send in songs and some C Lister would perform them. i remember thinking "I can do that."
Remember, I was 12 and I came up with a melody without instruments. It had a "light entertainment"  finger- clicking lounge feel. This was the chorus:

I look into your deep brown eyes
I thought I saw truth and sincerity
It cannot be
My eyes must be playing tricks on me.

it's funnier with the melody. The tricks on Me bit was very big and dramatic.
Obviously i couldn't do it. Didn't send it in of course.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on January 15, 2006, 05:11:05 AM
I have a brand new song (i know, it should be a national holiday when i come up with a new one, cause they are just so great). i'm almost as repetitive in my songs as the Stones. woot!


If there
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Joost on January 17, 2006, 03:21:28 PM
Quote from: somedude210

review it damnit!  ;D ;D

I think it's good, but I'm affraid you got a little bit too much help from Lennon this time.  ;D

First you've got "across my universe", followed by:

Pools of tears,
And sound of sadness,
Is going through my open mind

Which is just a little too similar to

Pools of sorrow waves of joy
are drifting thorough my open mind


See what I mean?
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on January 17, 2006, 08:38:51 PM
hahahahahaha, right on the money. i actually never intend to do anything with this for that reason. but would it help if i said it didnt have the same tune? ;D

review the others...damnit!!;D;D
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on January 18, 2006, 01:20:15 AM
DRUG

Your my drug
An instant high
You pleasure me and slowly poison me
I die at your touch
And when your in my mouth the sensation is too much
Afraid I might die
Of an orgasmic overdose
Your the one for me
I'm going through withdrawal
When your not around
I die
Slowly I fall
Falter
Stutter
And when you are gone
I will die

My attempt at a Billy Corgan
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Mairi on January 18, 2006, 04:37:38 PM
somedude, sorry I xcan't review all your songs but I like "Empty Shoes" she best. I always like sad songs because they're so heartfelt.

Brain (oops I meant to type Brian but I'll leave it that way) your song is good, some interesting plays on words and nice rhyming, but a bit short. I guess it's important t leave your audience wanting more though.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on January 19, 2006, 01:35:42 AM
Quote from: Mairi
somedude, sorry I xcan't review all your songs but I like "Empty Shoes" she best. I always like sad songs because they're so heartfelt.

Brain (oops I meant to type Brian but I'll leave it that way) your song is good, some interesting plays on words and nice rhyming, but a bit short. I guess it's important t leave your audience wanting more though.

yea, but if you listen to it, its like a really bad takeoff of Across the Universe. oh well, ive got some more that i can always post. ;D

"review it damnit!! ;D ;D"
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on January 19, 2006, 01:38:19 AM
AH HA!!! found it! little bastard! found the song that i made for my first girlfriend. and it was (at the time) probably the best i wrote


At last, we meet,
If only for a brief,
Time to say goodbye,
Together at last,
Forget about your past,
For, tonight it is only you and me,

Ro-o-oses, fill your hair,
Smiles come back at me,
Let our love fill the air,
At last, we
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on January 19, 2006, 02:08:40 AM
Quote from: Mairi
somedude, sorry I xcan't review all your songs but I like "Empty Shoes" she best. I always like sad songs because they're so heartfelt.

Brain (oops I meant to type Brian but I'll leave it that way) your song is good, some interesting plays on words and nice rhyming, but a bit short. I guess it's important t leave your audience wanting more though.


That song is about a girl going out with my friend. Not because she's my "drug" per se, but she is really cool.

No, she's never been in my mouth, nor any other woman/girl.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on January 19, 2006, 02:13:52 AM
wrote another one: thinking something like "Time for us"

Time for you,
Time for me,
A time for us to be,
Like nothing left in the world,
Like a buffalo herd,
Like a child in need of a word,
Like the rhythm of rain on the roof,
When a world needs to see the proof,
I
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on January 19, 2006, 02:14:28 AM
Free me from this cage I am locked in
Free me from this place I am trapped in
Free me from this soul that is wretched and racked and racked in nothing but sin
Free me from within
For there is nothing in this body and little in this soul worth letting live
Free me from inside
Grim Reaper open your doors oh so whide

Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death

Take me away from the mountain of treachery
Come upon to me Sweet Lady Death and let me wrap my arms around thee
I can't keep myself the same
I can't stop hurting this dame
Maim me so I can go away and stop hurting those who love me so
I don't mean to do what I do, I swear
Its just how I am, Evil, like a color code that I must wear

Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death

Keep my locked in this cage
Up to the end of my days
I fear I'm going insane
Nothing will ever be the same
I've seen what I had became
Over the endless years
Trying to fight your endless fear

Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
<Ancient beliefs of an uneducated religion>
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
<Believing whatever the TV says is true>
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
<I wish I could open your eyes>
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
<You cognitively disabled dieties>
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
<Go away, your the reason I'm insane>
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
<Stay in your house and rock bake and forth humming The Star-Spangled Banner>
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
<'Cause your too weak to admit the truth so you feel like you need to make me out to be the freak>
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
<Its just the truth I seek>
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
<But so you have been taught and so you believe...>
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
<The truth is an evil to be locked away>
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
<You frustrate me so>
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
<You make me insane>
Screaming in my brain
YOU MAKE ME INSANE
I have unraveled insane
YOU MAKE ME INSANE
Black and White and Gray
YOU MAKE ME INSANE
In the all its all the same
YOU MAKE ME INSANE
Pain is all that is left
YOU MAKE ME INSANE
Other than sweet release of death
YOU MAKE ME INSANE
Screaming in my brain
YOU MAKE ME INSANE
I have unraveled insane
YOU MAKE ME INSANE
Black and White and Gray
YOU MAKE ME INSANE
In the all its all the same
YOU MAKE ME INSANE
Pain is all that is left
YOU MAKE ME INSANE
Other than sweet release of death
YOU MAKE ME INSANE
Screaming in my brain
YOU MAKE ME INSANE
I have unraveled insane
YOU MAKE ME INSANE
Black and White and Gray
YOU MAKE ME INSANE
In the all its all the same
YOU MAKE ME INSANE
Pain is all that is left
YOU MAKE ME INSANE
Other than sweet release of death
YOU MAKE ME INSANE

YOU MAKE ME INSANE
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Gore...
Cheney...

you make me insane you make me insane you make me insane
YOU MAKE ME INSANE YOU MAKE ME INSANE YOU MAKE ME INSANE

GORE!
CHENEY!
TIPPER!
WHORE!
LYNN!
WHORE!
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on January 19, 2006, 02:23:46 AM
Quote from: andersonCouncill
Free me from this cage I am locked in
Free me from this place I am trapped in
Free me from this soul that is wretched and racked and racked in nothing but sin
Free me from within
For there is nothing in this body and little in this soul worth letting live
Free me from inside
Grim Reaper open your doors oh so whide

Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death

Take me away from the mountain of treachery
Come upon to me Sweet Lady Death and let me wrap my arms around thee
I can't keep myself the same
I can't stop hurting this dame
Maim me so I can go away and stop hurting those who love me so
I don't mean to do what I do, I swear
Its just how I am, Evil, like a color code that I must wear

Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death

Keep my locked in this cage
Up to the end of my days
I fear I'm going insane
Nothing will ever be the same
I've seen what I had became
Over the endless years
Trying to fight your endless fear

Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
<Ancient beliefs of an uneducated religion>
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
<Believing whatever the TV says is true>
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
<I wish I could open your eyes>
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
<You cognitively disabled dieties>
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
<Go away, your the reason I'm insane>
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
<Stay in your house and rock bake and forth humming The Star-Spangled Banner>
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
<'Cause your too weak to admit the truth so you feel like you need to make me out to be the freak>
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
<Its just the truth I seek>
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
<But so you have been taught and so you believe...>
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
<The truth is an evil to be locked away>
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
<You frustrate me so>
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
Screaming in my brain
I have unraveled insane
Black and White and Gray
In the all its all the same
Pain is all that is left
Other than sweet release of death
<You make me insane>
Screaming in my brain
YOU MAKE ME INSANE
I have unraveled insane
YOU MAKE ME INSANE
Black and White and Gray
YOU MAKE ME INSANE
In the all its all the same
YOU MAKE ME INSANE
Pain is all that is left
YOU MAKE ME INSANE
Other than sweet release of death
YOU MAKE ME INSANE
Screaming in my brain
YOU MAKE ME INSANE
I have unraveled insane
YOU MAKE ME INSANE
Black and White and Gray
YOU MAKE ME INSANE
In the all its all the same
YOU MAKE ME INSANE
Pain is all that is left
YOU MAKE ME INSANE
Other than sweet release of death
YOU MAKE ME INSANE
Screaming in my brain
YOU MAKE ME INSANE
I have unraveled insane
YOU MAKE ME INSANE
Black and White and Gray
YOU MAKE ME INSANE
In the all its all the same
YOU MAKE ME INSANE
Pain is all that is left
YOU MAKE ME INSANE
Other than sweet release of death
YOU MAKE ME INSANE

YOU MAKE ME INSANE
you make me insane
YOU MAKE ME INSANE
you make me insane
YOU MAKE ME INSANE
you make me insane
YOU MAKE ME INSANE
you make me insane
YOU MAKE ME INSANE
you make me insane
YOU MAKE ME INSANE
you make me insane
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YOU MAKE ME INSANE
YOU MAKE ME INSANE
YOU MAKE ME INSANE
YOU MAKE ME INSANE
YOU MAKE ME INSANE
YOU MAKE ME INSANE
YOU MAKE ME INSANE
YOU MAKE ME INSANE
YOU MAKE ME INSANE
YOU MAKE ME INSANE
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you make me insane
YOU MAKE ME INSANE

Gore...
Cheney...

you make me insane you make me insane you make me insane
YOU MAKE ME INSANE YOU MAKE ME INSANE YOU MAKE ME INSANE

GORE!
CHENEY!
TIPPER!
WHORE!
LYNN!
WHORE!

Three most listened songs on Rhapsody at the time of writing?

1.Third Eye--Tool
2.Roundabout--Yes
3.Karn Evil 9--ELP
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Bobber on January 19, 2006, 08:06:20 AM
Quote from: andersonCouncill
Free me from this cage I am locked in
Free me from this place I am trapped in
Free me from this soul that is wretched and racked and racked in nothing but sin
Free me from within
For there is nothing in this body and little in this soul worth letting live
Free me from inside
Grim Reaper open your doors oh so whide

Screaming in my brain
etc.

Is this serious or is it a rap?
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on January 19, 2006, 09:08:38 PM
holy freaking crap! that thing is long. good though
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on January 19, 2006, 09:09:20 PM
i would be amazed if you could sing that under 7 minutes
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on January 20, 2006, 02:51:33 AM
Quote from: somedude210
i would be amazed if you could sing that under 7 minutes

Its got long instrumental sections so... I think.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on January 20, 2006, 11:54:37 PM
Quote from: somedude210
wrote another one: thinking something like "Time for us"

Time for you,
Time for me,
A time for us to be,
Like nothing left in the world,
Like a buffalo herd,
Like a child in need of a word,
Like the rhythm of rain on the roof,
When a world needs to see the proof,
I
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on January 21, 2006, 06:08:18 AM
Quote from: somedude210

nice little didy i did for me and my gf ;D

i know, i'm such a romantic :P

Not quite Closer by NIN...

Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Mairi on January 23, 2006, 09:04:14 PM
ooooh I love it! it's so pretty!

This is a new song I wrote. It is the result of listening to basically nothing but Dylan for three hours. I hope it doesn't sound like too much of a rip-off.

The Performer

He said, "We haven't got much in common except that we're so much alike"
And I laughed as I looked over and said, "Baby, why don't you hand me the mic?"
I picked up my acoustic guitar and I tried my very best to sing the blues
But it seemed like every single note I hit was just old news
I stood there in the spotlight and I did just as I could to deny it
But there's no telling if I lost it or found it cause I never could hide it
Someone shouted up to me, and said, "hey, I really like your show..."
I laughed again inside cause I knew he really didn't know

(Chorus)
And now the executioner's eyes are looking at me from his tower
And the judge and the jury are both fighting for more power
And the lawyers are arguing in the court
They say, "She's gotta, she's gotta sing the refrain"
And I pull out my pick and play the whole darn thing again

Yes they held a candle to my face and asked me if I could deny it
So I held my breath and let go of everything just to defy it
The ceiling tiles were telling me I'd better be getting home soon
And the trees outside were begging for me to climb them like last noon
but the ghosts of my consience tell me I gotta go home
They are looking through my paint layers and commenting on the tone
And the woman with the smile watched me through a pair of bifocals
She gave me a wilted daisy and then began to comment on my vocals

(Chorus)

Some old magazines were lying helplessly on the table
I wanted to go over and read them but I just wasn't able
I had to do another spirited number to keep the masses glad
Why do I find it so ironic when they ask me why I'm SO sad
The demons in the doorway are beckoning for me to join them
And the queens under the table were saying I promised to coin them
The boy in the scarf and jacket with his hair all brown and askew
Was waiting for me to finish, he was performer number two

(Chorus)

The scattered applause echoed throughout the performance hall
And my mind told me, "Honey, leaving would put an end to it all"
But my clockwork soul wass unable to open that particular piece of mail
I thought I might as well finish and continue to chase my tail
Ah, but what is that noise that I am beginning to hear
It seems as if the sound of rejection is filling up into my ears
What kind of creature would I be to stay here and take this abuse
I can't get anything else to I'll take the hate and put it to use

(Chorus)
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on January 24, 2006, 12:45:53 AM
Quote from: Mairi
ooooh I love it! it's so pretty!

This is a new song I wrote. It is the result of listening to basically nothing but Dylan for three hours. I hope it doesn't sound like too much of a rip-off.


you were talking about mine right? sweeeeeeeeeet

your song is great, its so great, it kicks serious ass. politcal theme right? since you were listening to dylan and everything. but that kicks ass. forgive my swearing but that really does rock.  ;D ;D
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on January 24, 2006, 12:55:16 AM
remember a long time ago when i did the "If I kiss you" well this another one "If I Could Dream". love does such strange things to my songwriting...and i love it...but would it kill me to make another political song

If there
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Post by: andersonCouncill on January 24, 2006, 12:55:23 AM
WELCOME TO SHAWSHANK

There must be a guy like me in every prison in America
And I thank god it was me
Ya see.
I'm about the only guy with a promised good ride
When you've been here as long as I have
But y'know this story at mine
I wanna tell ya 'bout a man came here one day
He came off that bus
Calm and cold and cool
Something different about him from the other new cons
Not sure what it was--not at the time
And then they pushed him into that cell
And it was the same way for him it was for me
And every other man in here
Its not 'til the door slams shut
And the sound resounds
And the truth becomes clear
Thats the only sound you can hear
Thats when the look on his face showed his heart had just sank,
That sound has one purpose,
To hit it on home,
Your hear and you a'int never leavin'
Make yourself cozy and waste the time away
Welcome to Shawshank
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on January 25, 2006, 10:45:53 PM
eh, not bad. not one of my favorites from you AC.
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Post by: andersonCouncill on January 25, 2006, 10:53:40 PM
38 SPECIAL

She was a bored housewife with nothing to do
Waiting for hubby to come home
Nothing to do
So why not spend the days hooked with a sleazy golf pro?
She never thought that he'd know
He found out
Swell,
"I'll see you in Hell before I see you in Reno!"
So she ran off for the night to spend in here steamy little love nest
He went to the bar and had a drink or two
Or maybe more
Just by a few
And then drove there and loaded one
Sobered up and thought it through
He knew what would be the best to do
He parked by the river Royale
Threw in the gun and went home to sleep
Little did he know he was about to enter hell
The maid checked in early in the morning
To find a horrific scene
She'd see it forevmore
Four in Quentin
And four in the whore
Four for four
Andy hired a lawyer top bill
But that didn't stop the papers
And what a thrill for the readers
To read about the even-steven killer
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on January 25, 2006, 11:06:13 PM
....eh, its different, but i dunno. theres just something there that doesnt make it all that good. its like WYWY, it would be good if you had the right music to go with it.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on January 25, 2006, 11:08:41 PM
Quote from: somedude210
....eh, its different, but i dunno. theres just something there that doesnt make it all that good. its like WYWY, it would be good if you had the right music to go with it.

WYWH not right musically?!?! Are we thinking of the same WYWH?

And have you read the novella its based off of?
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on January 26, 2006, 02:01:22 AM
we're talking about the one from Sgt Peppers right? the lyrics are great, but it just loses its magic in the music
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on January 26, 2006, 02:16:52 AM
Quote from: somedude210
we're talking about the one from Sgt Peppers right? the lyrics are great, but it just loses its magic in the music

First off, Within You Without You is the best song on there! Secondly, I thought we were talking about Wish You Were Here by Pink Floyd.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on January 26, 2006, 08:13:43 PM
DIANA

I hope you cry yourself to sleep every night
I hope you have screaming pains of guilt
You've weaved yourself into a web,
A decietful little quilt,

I hope you know what you put me through

And I hope you know how pathetic you are
Because all your lies and deciets,
Can't fool god watching from afar
I hope your conscience eats at you and you cry and you cry and you never die
So you have to live your life crying and crying and thinking about your sins and all you've done
And all you'll never do because your wasting time with your lies and your sighs and the rolls of your eyes
Thinking your a god
You fowl little pestering b****
A boil are all these lies that will someday pop with puss in your face
A wasted case
Is it guilt
Is it fear?
I don't give a ****
As long as you cry
Pathological liar
Scream with pain and fear and frustration
And guilt 'cause your ******* yourself over in the long run
You Barclay Hunt sucking b**** whore
Why don't you join the police CORP
So you can go full out lesbo like you want to
I hope when you die the last thing you realize is that you were wrong and a selfish b****
You couldn't cure the itch
In her soul
Play your ******* role
Be the good guy to those to little f***s
They're already kitten killing theiveing b****s that are incurably ****** up
And I could care less about how you are
'Cause when this song comes up and blows the charts
And everyone asks who exactly you are
I'll just smile and wave
And say "Look to your shoes, down under the pavement
Somewhere down in Hell
Because she's not as strong as the devil,
Just another lost soul"



Quote
Today I woke up to my nephew (barely 2) watching Madagascar, a film I also enjoy. I was in a good mood until I remembered my stepbrothers would be hear screaming and hollering. The younger of them just turned ten last week but acts like he's 7. Their mother was so obsessive about not letting my stepfather seeing them she lies to police constantly. That my stepfather is abusive, that my mother is an alcholic. She's a general b****.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Mairi on January 26, 2006, 08:52:46 PM
Whoa, that sucks... well, broken familes in general suck (I should know) but that must be hard for you and your stepbrothers. Sorry to hear that.

Well, this is another song I wrote... I tried to make it cryptic but it's pretty obvious now that I look back on it.

Knockin' On My Door

Once again I hear you knockin'
Knockin'upon my wooden door
You say you're a friend and you gotta get outta the rain
But somethin' tells me, baby
You ain't never comin' back again

(Chorus)
So if I opened up my door
Would you stel all my possesions
If I opened up my door
Would you listen to all my confessions

You say that you are thirsty
But I don't have any wine...
I wasn't waitin' for you to stop on by
You say in a whisper
"Why don't we give it a try"

(Chorus)

It would be just so crazy
To let someone like you in
So why don't you find somewhere else to go
Cause baby, it's just useless
And this I think you know

(Chrous X3)
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on January 26, 2006, 08:56:13 PM
Quote from: Mairi
Whoa, that sucks... well, broken familes in general suck (I should know) but that must be hard for you and your stepbrothers. Sorry to hear that.

Well, this is another song I wrote... I tried to make it cryptic but it's pretty obvious now that I look back on it.

Knockin' On My Door

Once again I hear you knockin'
Knockin'upon my wooden door
You say you're a friend and you gotta get outta the rain
But somethin' tells me, baby
You ain't never comin' back again

(Chorus)
So if I opened up my door
Would you stel all my possesions
If I opened up my door
Would you listen to all my confessions

You say that you are thirsty
But I don't have any wine...
I wasn't waitin' for you to stop on by
You say in a whisper
"Why don't we give it a try"

(Chorus)

It would be just so crazy
To let someone like you in
So why don't you find somewhere else to go
Cause baby, it's just useless
And this I think you know

(Chrous X3)


I could care less about the miserable whore OR my stepbrothers. One is a lying theif and one killed a kitten.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Mairi on January 26, 2006, 09:13:12 PM
Oh... nevermind then.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on January 27, 2006, 01:40:55 AM
This is a love note thingy that i wrote for my girlfriend but i thought i'd try it as a song

"The Longest Day"

The longest day,
The day I tried to spend with you,
But there was nothing I could do,
A day made long and hard,
Held on only by the kiss you gave me,
Yesterday,

It seemed like an eternity from you,
If only a day of hardship,
A day to forget,
Made only better by your smiling face,
With you I am safe,
Ready to face the world another day,

I have the strength,
But its you that keeps it going,
I have heard the non believers,
But its you the drowns them out,
And it's your love that makes us one,
One heart, one mind and one soul...
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Joost on February 05, 2006, 09:10:19 PM
I'm going to record a new album with my band next week, and we still had three songs left without lyrics and because I wrote the music to those three songs, I said I'd try to write the lyrics. And even though I have never before been able to write a single lyric that I liked, I somehow managed to come up with three lyrics in two days that will be on the album.

The trick was: not trying to write about myself. :)

I found out writing about other people or writing fictional lyrics is A LOT easier.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on February 05, 2006, 11:38:33 PM
yup, i wrote love songs long before i had fallen in love. worked wonders. congrats on your album, im still trying to form a band.

if need be, make one of the songs and instrumental, if its good enough, it will do wonders. or do something like the song "October" and do like 3 mins of music, and the last minute or so just add some nice, sweet lyrics. gotta have the right tone to it though
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Joost on February 06, 2006, 10:30:59 AM
Quote from: somedude210
congrats on your album, im still trying to form a band.

Thanks. It's gonna be my 6th release (albums + EPs) actually.  8)

Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on February 06, 2006, 07:44:04 PM
sweet...er
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on February 11, 2006, 11:48:57 PM
Quote from: somedude210
remember a long time ago when i did the "If I kiss you" well this another one "If I Could Dream". love does such strange things to my songwriting...and i love it...but would it kill me to make another political song

If there
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on February 12, 2006, 04:01:08 AM
Quote from: Biscuit_Power

Thanks. It's gonna be my 6th release (albums + EPs) actually.  8)


What's your band called? What if I wanna hear some?

DON'T MESS WITH TEXAS

Genre: Hardcore Punk

Don't mess with Texas
And don't call me Sexist
I am an open-minded individual
Now do as I say or you shall perish
And you hippie liberals better cherish,
Every free f***in moment you have,
'Cause within time your all going right into the gas,
Right into the gas
Don't mess with Texas
I'll get into your business
Don't matter if I belong there or not
You'll be dead shot
Daddy's gonna be proud
Don't mess with Texas
You'll be dead 'til you die
'Cause I know what I believe
And I believe what I believe is right
And don't you dare fight it
'Cause in America you don't have that right
And you better not write
If you don't agree
Shut up
Watch what you say
Or into the gas chambers with you
Will bake you and feed you to Muslim "terrorists" as stew
Don't mess with Texas
Don't Mess with Texas
Don't mess with Texas
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on February 12, 2006, 04:04:07 AM
Quote from: somedude210

review please ;D

It's alright but somewhat sickeningly sweet. But I like it nonetheless, some nice chose of words in there. And I'm sure other songwriters find my writing sickeningly abrasive, so what the hell.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Joost on February 14, 2006, 04:22:42 PM
Quote from: andersonCouncill

What's your band called? What if I wanna hear some?


I made two CDs with a band called Striving Higher and three seven inch EPs (one also released on CD) with a band called Downslide. Last week I recorded with a new band called Operation Phoenix and this will be a full length CD.

Downslide MP3s:
http://www.njwrecords.com/media.php
http://www.crucialresponse.com/main/media.php

Striving Higher and Operation Phoenix are a lot more melodic and punk rock-ish than Downslide, but I don't have any MP3s at the moment.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on February 23, 2006, 01:24:00 AM
That's really cool. I wish I could do something like that with my band.

This is my attempt at an old-school blues song, in the spirit of John Coltrane.

LONELY MAN'S BLUES

I'm burnin' inside
Hole ten miles whide
Scream the scream of hope
Deadbrained like on dope
But that a'int it
Don't miss the point
I a'int never picked up a joint
Oh, what could it be
Oh, what could it be
That's sitttin' here
Killin me,
Killin me slowly
What can I do
What can I be
To make you see
To make you see me
How can I show you
Show you my love
You my angel
From up above
Head in the stove
Knife on the counter
Better counter react
My heart is under attack
Is it that my soul's black?
I try to be good but somehow it seems sin's always catchin' up on me
Why is it that you, an angel from up high, could ever love me?
How can I make you realize
I really love you
Yes I do
What will it take to make you see...
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on February 23, 2006, 02:14:53 AM
i havent done any lyrics lately but i started doing a bob dylan-esque protest song. ill probably post it tomorrow
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on February 23, 2006, 02:23:04 AM
What did you think of my new one? It was kind of a throw away.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Mairi on February 23, 2006, 01:00:31 PM
I liked it. I can really relate. The grammar sound weird to read, though.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on February 24, 2006, 04:57:26 AM
ok, dont think i put this one up, its short and depressing and incomplete but why not put it up. gotta keep this thread alive. the last two verses are done on here, so they may not flow with the other 3.

Wind

Can you hear my whisper,
Blowing past your ear,
I listen to your ranting,
Suffering and fear,

Can you not see me?
Standing right here,
Or do you not care,
That i am near,

Must you hide you face,
Even though i know,
Find your place,
And let yourself grow,

The days go on,
time doesnt stand still,
You'll win some and lose 'em,
But you'll get your fill,

I'm gonna miss you,
But i'll still hold a place for you,
With so much time,
And so little to do,
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on March 03, 2006, 03:29:09 AM
Quote from: somedude210
ok, dont think i put this one up, its short and depressing and incomplete but why not put it up. gotta keep this thread alive. the last two verses are done on here, so they may not flow with the other 3.

Wind

Can you hear my whisper,
Blowing past your ear,
I listen to your ranting,
Suffering and fear,

Can you not see me?
Standing right here,
Or do you not care,
That i am near,

Must you hide you face,
Even though i know,
Find your place,
And let yourself grow,

The days go on,
time doesnt stand still,
You'll win some and lose 'em,
But you'll get your fill,

I'm gonna miss you,
But i'll still hold a place for you,
With so much time,
And so little to do,

Review it damnit!
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Bobber on March 03, 2006, 09:30:09 AM
^Give it another title. I like the depressive style of this lyric.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on March 04, 2006, 03:56:39 AM
i never had a title, it just happened to be the first thing to pop in my mind.

...is it a problem when people keep saying how good your depressive style of lyrics are?
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Bobber on March 05, 2006, 10:33:29 AM
No, as long as you use writing lyrics as an outlet.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on March 06, 2006, 07:49:41 PM
two more songs i started in school:

"I Used To Be A Commie" (folksy-country song)

Oh I used to be a commie,
Back in 1952,
When McCarthy was the man,
That turned the place into a zoo,

Oh I never read a book,
Or heard of Mr. Marx,
And still I told Congress,
To shove it up their arse,

Oh I wish I was a commie,
Joining the pink or yellow horde,
And ride around town as they say,
"Well ain't just that absurd,"

Oh Mary Lou and Joey Peel,
Got arrested late that night,
Cause someone said they're commies
They didn't put up a fight

Oh I never read a book,
Or heard of Mr. Marx,
And still I told Congress,
To shove it up their arse
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on March 06, 2006, 08:06:30 PM
this one is inspired by recent events:

"Say Goodbye, Deadman"

I can't believe the words I heard today,
Try as they might, it just wouldn't go away,
She broke up with me without a care,
I guess this is the cross that I bear,

Well it's Goodbye,
Say goodbye, deadman,
She's got other plans,
So say goodbye, deadman,
Say goodbye, Say goodbye,

I can't understand what happened today,
If only it happened some other day,
Why did this happen to me?
I may be blind, but at least I can see,

Well it's Goodbye,
Say goodbye, deadman,
She's got other plans,
So say goodbye, deadman,
Say goodbye, Say goodbye,

Democracy and communism unite,
Band together for the individual right,
Remember what you came here for,
Don't write crap songs that makes your life a bore.

Well it's Goodbye,
Say goodbye, deadman,
She's got other plans,
So say goodbye, deadman,
Say goodbye, Say goodbye,

What the hell is wrong in the world?
Can't people find sh*t like this absurd?
You really want to be a tool?
Think this song is good and drop out of school,

Well it's Goodbye,
Say goodbye, deadman,
She's got other plans,
So say goodbye, deadman,
Say goodbye,
Say goodbye,
Deaaaaaaaadman...
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on March 06, 2006, 10:25:40 PM
and yes, i know there is a song called "wake up dead man" but dead man is the only thing i stole from the song
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Joost on March 07, 2006, 03:36:52 PM
A trick that usually works if you think the lyrics you write are too depressed: write it like it's about somebody else and change the "I's" into "you's". That way you can easily change a self-pitying song into an encouraging song.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on March 08, 2006, 08:31:26 PM
Hey Mairi, heres a song of mine for you. a new variation of Dylan's "Times that are a changin'"

It
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Post by: Mairi on March 09, 2006, 04:35:11 PM
Pretty good... veyr reflective of the times as well... sadly.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on March 10, 2006, 01:33:20 AM
just one more song/poem thingy (i actually have a few more good ones that ill post every so often...and as always, REVIEW THEM DAMNIT!):

One of my generation
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on March 12, 2006, 02:18:41 PM
review any of my latest ones please. much appreaciated
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Post by: somedude210 on March 12, 2006, 10:26:16 PM
song i wrote at work...this song is for anyone out there that got dumped:

"Wake up to an empty bed" (dont worry, im changing the title)

Woke up this morning,
Found that you weren
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Joost on March 13, 2006, 02:51:48 PM
These are the three lyrics I wrote for my band... We already recorded the music for these tracks, the vocals will be recorded this weekend.

Same Old Song

This is nothing new to me
I've seen it all before
I'm almost starting to get used to it

But I thought you stood above this
And that you had more class
You caught me by surprise with what you did

Chorus:
THE THINGS
YOU SAID
I would have expected from everyone else
But NOT FROM YOU

THE THINGS
YOU SAID
Wouldn't hurt me coming from anyone else
From YOU THEY DO

I thought that you were special
High above the rest
It turned out to be just the same old song

So it seems that I misjudged you
When I thought you were the best
It's a shame you had to prove me wrong


Wrong

Cause you don't understand
Doesn't mean that it doesn't make sense
For us there's no use in trying
Cause you'll never give us a chance

You know you're always right
Because for you your opinions are facts
We've heard it all before
In our faces and behind our backs

Chorus:
We wear the wrong shirts
We're with the wrong trends
We sing the wrong words
We like the wrong bands

On this record we'll lose money
And for this show we drove all night
As long as this makes sense to us
We know we're doing it just right

We don't need your approval
We don't even give a f***
And if you don't see the point
Then I guess that's your tough luck

We don't have a clue
We're doing it all wrong
Make sure you're not having fun
Make sure you don't sing along


Got Your Back

Again it ends in dissapointment
Leaving you with your hands empty
And your head full of frustration - yeah

It's a path that you've been down before
So yet again you took a wrong turn
And you could use some navigation - yeah

You took a chance, gave it a try
Your expectations were so high
I know that now it seems
You'll never live your dreams

You're pretty sure that you've been cursed
And things just go from bad to worse
But no matter what you do
Know that I have faith in you

You think it wasn't meant to be
And that it's just out of your reach
But always keep in mind
That you don't stand alone

I'd be glad to lend a hand
And I will try to understand
Just know I've got your back
Don't have to do it on your own
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: McCartney on March 13, 2006, 08:19:05 PM
Ok, here's what I thought was close, but then I saw that the verses need to be longer after I re-read it.


When Sh*t Hits the Fan

Look into my eyes
Read the thoughts scattered in my mind
You
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on March 14, 2006, 01:23:28 AM
Mccartney! you too! good song dude, i hear so little from you. id like to hear some more lyrics or music for them
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on March 14, 2006, 01:30:56 AM
BP, not bad for you. like them better then the last batch you posted.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on March 14, 2006, 01:31:06 AM
no offense of course
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Joost on March 14, 2006, 08:26:31 AM
Quote from: somedude210
BP, not bad for you. like them better then the last batch you posted.

That's interesting, since this was the very first time I ever posted lyrics on this board...

 :)
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on March 14, 2006, 01:41:52 PM
crap, sorry bout that, i got you confused with anderson
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on April 01, 2006, 06:16:03 PM
I've been listening to a lot of Blink 182 lately, sorry.

Supersized,, overprized conservative bullsh*t standards
meanders and panders to no point at all
Leading us to nowhere so f*** it all
Oh, baby get down on your knees and defile the country with fellatio
Distressed looking you in this world shoot through blue
Die with me so I don't die alone so I'm not hated
Don't leave me oh no
Don't you know not to knock a man down?
Its not fair to hit someone with that sound of tears
All my ears hears is the pain and guilt and frustration
Of making minimum wage at a gas station
So play with yourself
And burn in hell
f*** acceptable society
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on April 01, 2006, 06:19:10 PM
Quote from: somedude210
crap, sorry bout that, i got you confused with anderson

What songs were you talking about?
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on April 02, 2006, 12:25:18 AM
your songs are good, some that you post arent as good as others. and i mistook those to be your work. sorry dude, didnt mean to confuse you. i thought that those that were posted that i mistook for yours, they just werent as good as the ones you normally post. but maybe BP is just a different style.

i screwed up. sorry man
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on April 04, 2006, 01:45:44 AM
Quote from: somedude210
AH HA!!! found it! little bastard! found the song that i made for my first girlfriend. and it was (at the time) probably the best i wrote


At last, we meet,
If only for a brief,
Time to say goodbye,
Together at last,
Forget about your past,
For, tonight it is only you and me,

Ro-o-oses, fill your hair,
Smiles come back at me,
Let our love fill the air,
At last, we
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Mairi on April 04, 2006, 03:30:20 PM
That's cute. Could be a little shortter, though.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on April 05, 2006, 01:35:26 AM
thanks
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Mairi on April 05, 2006, 08:19:04 PM
Ok.. new song that I wrote.. I kinda like it.

Second Place

Perpetual runner-up
The drink in the empty cup
Standing next to the winner
Wishing she was a sinner
Never quite good enough
Winnging's always been so touch
The sting of defeat
Causes her to retreat
Heads for the door
With her eyes to the floor

(chorus)
She's the girl in second place
No one seems to know her face
But she's always been there
Oh the girl in second place
Has been stained by disgrace
And she wishes that she didn't care

Never gets the gold
Her records all unsold
Waiting for that chance
Where she can get to dance
To show what she can do
But she's always number two
Never gets applause
Always just the pause
She wants to be the champ
But she's under the lamp

(chorus)

Can't seem to reach the top
Always told to stop
Although she has a thirst
To finish first
She's left alone to cry
To wish that she'd die
Batter person wins the prize
Audience loves the lies
Guess who this is all about
AS if there was a doubt

I'm the girl in secind place
No one seems to know my face
But I've always been there
Yes, I'm the girl in second place
I've been stained by disgrace
I wish that I didn't care

LOL., yes I know it's utterly depressing.. don't worry, I'm not going emo on you. :P
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Indica on April 05, 2006, 09:18:27 PM
Excellent!
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on April 16, 2006, 11:25:22 PM
im lazy at the moment but i took the lines

"This is the last dance,
this is the last..."

from "Under Pressure" by Queen and expanded that into a song.

...i know, its a crappy idea, but its been a slow month.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: The End on April 19, 2006, 05:37:05 PM
Quote from: raxo
I really like them (thumbsup) (who's singing?):

The first one (See Her Smile) is obviously the most mainstream and the lyrics, telling the story of that woman, in the best McCartney style,... ;)
The third one (Sunday Again) is the one I like the most ( ;D)
second and third (Liverpool Street) ones remind me somehow... and sorry for saying... remind me to Beautiful South.

All written, recorded and sung by me!! ;D

Thanks very much for the kind words Raxo - sorry for the delay in replying!

I'm not offended by being compared to The Beautiful South, they were a top-notch band back in the day!

See Her Smile is my favourite, to be honest - just love the story aspect of it and the chords! It was part of a triliogy of songs telling different sides of the story.

Liverpool Street is a story of a journey that I took one night when coming home sober on the train  - the carriage was FULL of drunks! The bit about the really drunk girl being helped off of the train by a total stranger, who's winking at his mates, is all true too - very scary, dunno what happened to that girl.

Sunday Again was writtn about boring English Sundays when you wake up hungover, there's bugger-all on TV and it's p*ssing down outside!
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: raxo on April 19, 2006, 05:45:51 PM
Quote from: The_End

All written, recorded and sung by me!! ;D

Thanks very much for the kind words Raxo - sorry for the delay in replying!

I'm not offended by being compared to The Beautiful South, they were a top-notch band back in the day!

See Her Smile is my favourite, to be honest - just love the story aspect of it and the chords! It was part of a triliogy of songs telling different sides of the story.

Liverpool Street is a story of a journey that I took one night when coming home sober on the train  - the carriage was FULL of drunks! The bit about the really drunk girl being helped off of the train by a total stranger, who's winking at his mates, is all true too - very scary, dunno what happened to that girl.

Sunday Again was writtn about boring English Sundays when you wake up hungover, there's bugger-all on TV and it's p*ssing down outside!

No worries about the delay ... at least you've got one less thing to do now! ... the shame is that this one was not on your "Al's promises" list  :P  ;D ...

I do love them ... Al of them! ... but you know I'm not as mainstream as most people (tho I like The Guys ... a bit) so my favourite ones are Al-ways those hidden treasures that a few are looking for ... and in this case this is Sunday Again ... for me ... I feel it as if some part of me was there ... if you let me say that!  :)

The lyrics are great in Al ... and knowing, now, the real stories their meaning is more power-full ... thanks for the explanation ... and for sharing them ... and for those minutes of joy ('cos I'm "currently listening to" ... Sunday Again ... but not tell nobody!!! ... Reputation, y'know!!! LOL!!! :D )
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: raxo on April 19, 2006, 06:16:39 PM
For those of you who don't know what are we talking about ... check these three links and try to close your wide open mouths after listening to Themd!

SEE HER SMILE
Here: http://www.geocities.com/the_end_gb/smile.htm


LIVERPOOL STREET
Here: http://www.geocities.com/the_end_gb/liverpool.htm


SUNDAY AGAIN
This one was written about a typical boring Sunday - waking up with a hangover and watching the same old stuff on TV! You can both hear and listen to this one right ... and it's my favourite one!!!
Here: http://www.geocities.com/the_end_gb/sunday.htm



Many more here: http://www.geocities.com/the_end_gb/music.htm






Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: pc31 on April 20, 2006, 10:44:21 AM
and the forum song??????
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: The End on April 20, 2006, 11:34:00 AM
I'm having problems uploading stuff at the moment - pooter probs!
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: pc31 on April 21, 2006, 12:06:02 AM
me too...we may need to upgrade...but we are too cheap...ain't we?
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: The End on April 23, 2006, 09:01:42 PM
Quote from: pc31
me too...we may need to upgrade...but we are too cheap...ain't we?

We must be I s'pose - but I only bought this Mac under a year ago!
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on April 30, 2006, 01:42:19 PM
wrote this about 1230 last night. came to me as i was trying to get to sleep and thought "well what happens if i suddenly died. i'm on top of the world, so would they think of it as a suicide or find it suspicious?" so i went with a "i committed suicide but everyone is thinking that someone killed me, well i am having the best time at my life...makes sense if you think of it"

One day, you'll find me,
Lying in the grass,
Wondering who killed,
That f***ing smartass,

I'll tell you, my friend,
Of my horrible fate,
Dying alone,
In a nice quiet lake,
The pain I felt,
Making love to the past,
Hoping someday,
That pain won't last.

But how could it be,
Such a successful boy,
Killing himself,
And finding such joy,
It may not happen,
but some say it might,
Finding him there,
After a cold, wintery night,

Laying there,
With a smile on his face,
Knowing the drama,
Of living in such a place,
And despite all his wickedness,
Failures and lack of proof,
He will still be remembered,
As a soldier of truth,

I'll touch the hearts,
and souls of the present,
and f*** those that think,
I'm some sort of preasant,

And one day you'll find me,
Lying in the wood,
And wonder who killed,
That person of good,
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on May 08, 2006, 11:01:56 PM
Has this thread died?

hmm, heres one of mine that i made involving only questions.

Can you judge a blind man?
Can you trust a thief?
Can you shoot a guy,
And feel no grief?
Can you laugh at a fool?,
If the fool is you?
Can you help a savior?
Out of the blue?

Can you keep a dream alive?
Can you feel no pain?
Can you learn to survive,
When you know how to live?
Can you love,
When no one
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: on May 09, 2006, 12:07:40 AM
Here be a few scraps of a formless nothing, I'll write some more and hopefully make something of it:

Song;

Oh what to do
I haven't a clue
I'm a quitter
A loser
No good to no one
No help to myself
I fear it's fallen through

One in a billion
Maybe even more
No luck with nothing
Can't even score

It's one big shti this mess that I'm in
One things for certain I keep failing to win

It gets me down
This face which I frown
My brains a mess
Wont pass no test

But I still got hope
When I fail to cope
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Mairi on May 09, 2006, 03:37:04 PM
Quote from: somedude210
Has this thread died?

hmm, heres one of mine that i made involving only questions.

Can you judge a blind man?
Can you trust a thief?
Can you shoot a guy,
And feel no grief?
Can you laugh at a fool?,
If the fool is you?
Can you help a savior?
Out of the blue?

Can you keep a dream alive?
Can you feel no pain?
Can you learn to survive,
When you know how to live?
Can you love,
When no one’s around?
Can you go,
And try not to stop?

Is King’s dream dead?
Have we lost our drive?
Has John gone unheard?
Even though he didn’t survive?
Can we imagine such a place?
Where everyone is equal?
Can we have a dream?
Where we are blind?

Can we isolate ourselves,
But open our minds?
Can we greet each other,
But despise them inside?

Will we see a day,
When all is well?
When all is good?
When all we could do is pray?
When all was a beautiful day?
When there is no war?
When there is no hate?
When there is no fighting?
When there is no fate?

What will they think,
Many years from now?
Losing everything we know,
And never wondering how?
Will the dream be dashed?
With a new world order?
Or can it not last?
Forever?

Can we not help those in need?
Can we not give in to greed?
Can we not live as one?
One nation? One world? One color?

your song reminds me of Blowin' In The Wind.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on May 09, 2006, 08:44:28 PM
thanks, always like having the not so popular dylan-esque protest song.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on May 09, 2006, 08:45:50 PM
this is one i made with one of the last lines from Bohieman Rhapsody. and i just went with it from there.


This is,
The last dance,
This is,
The last
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Bobber on May 10, 2006, 07:32:55 AM
Looks like Donna Summer's Last Dance.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on May 10, 2006, 07:59:01 PM
haha, well i realized that it wasnt boheimuim rhapsody that the line was from, it was Under Pressure. similar tune to that line too, just extended

and yes, i butchered Boheimium....i failed german spelling week ;D wheres dirk when you need him
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: on May 10, 2006, 08:58:16 PM
I did a double take
I did not know what to do
I had to meet you to save my sake
I just had to kiss you

Oh if you ask me, I wont reject you
If you show me, I can't deny you
If you'll love me, I may well love you too

We are together now
We are in each others arms
We cannot believe why or how
We seemed to make it through

Oh if you ask me, I wont reject you
If you show me, I can't deny you
If you'll love me, I may well love you too

You were a real fake
You were another screw
You gave only to take
Everything that seemed so true
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on May 10, 2006, 09:34:04 PM
not bad TMOGF. good stuff, like to hear it sometime
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: on May 10, 2006, 11:04:22 PM
Thanks, I'd like to hear it too. Ha!

That's the problem of just having the lyrics: No instruments and no melody in your head. If you didn't know what Love Me Do sounded like and someone posted the lyrics, well. Lyrics aren't the be all and end all.

Is there such a thing as an acoustic tuner machine, because I'm going to take it up again but as soon as it goes out of tune I'll have to stop!

Quote from: somedude210
Has this thread died?

hmm, heres one of mine that i made involving only questions.

Can you judge a blind man?
Can you trust a thief?
Can you shoot a guy,
And feel no grief?
Can you laugh at a fool?,
If the fool is you?
Can you help a savior?
Out of the blue?

Can you keep a dream alive?
Can you feel no pain?
Can you learn to survive,
When you know how to live?
Can you love,
When no one
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on May 11, 2006, 01:34:36 AM
a more broader version of "Look At Me"

Who am I?
Why am I here?
Tell me someone,
The end is near,

What are we doing?
Where are we going?
Our life is draining away,
While the river is flowing,

Is there someone?
What is going wrong?
Life is going on,
I don
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on May 12, 2006, 10:55:14 PM
DUEL IN THE SUN

Prepare for yet another duel in the sun
All these bigwigs trying to decide who is number one!
Goodbye to decency
Goodbye to fun
Its ours!
For its time for the duel in the sun
No one can understand why the two,
The two counterparts can't look at eachother and see they are
One and the same!
Its insane! This game!
Its the game of a fool
And I wish I knew!
Why we had to fight tonight!
But I know no more then everyone!
Why they must duel within the sun!

Duel in the sun!
Duel in the sun!
Duel in the sun!

Duel in the sun!
Duel in the sun!
Duel in the sun!

Duel in the sun!
Duel in the sun!
Duel in the sun!

Come one!
Come all!
And place your bets now!
Come all!
Come one!
Comes to bloodshed and tears tonight!
Everyone falls out and about themselves and forgets where they are!
Screaming and drooling and raving and ruling all that they give and none which they are!

Duel in the sun!
Duel in the sun!
Duel in the sun!

Duel in the sun!
Duel in the sun!
Duel in the sun!

Duel in the sun!
Duel in the sun!
Duel in the sun!

And the two brothers die
And the inevitable cry
And all is forgotten now
And the war is also forgotten somehow
It matters not anymore
No one remebers the brother's war
But still the bigwigs fight on
Albeit its a different battle
But still it helps no one

Duel in the sun!
Duel in the sun!
Duel in the sun!

Duel in the sun!
Duel in the sun!
Duel in the sun!

Duel in the sun!
Duel in the sun!
Duel in the sun!

Duel in the sun!
Duel in the sun!
Duel in the sun!

Duel in the sun!
Duel in the sun!
Duel in the sun!

Duel in the sun!
Duel in the sun!
Duel in the sun!

Duel in the sun!
Duel in the sun!
Duel in the sun!

Duel in the sun!
Duel in the sun!
Duel in the sun!

Duel in the sun!
Duel in the sun!
Duel in the sun!

Duel in the sun!
Duel in the sun!
Everyone! Everyone!
Duel in the sun!
Duel in the sun!
Pick your sides!
Duel in the sun!
Duel in the sun!
But in the end no one wins and everyone dies!

Duel in the sun!
Duel in the sun!
Duel in the sun!
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on May 14, 2006, 08:18:14 PM
heres a song i wrote here at work, basically i was laughing my ass off as i was writing this, cause this is basically my song about my ex...enjoy it as much as i did writing it.

Bittersweet Love

When she kicks you to the curb,
And she says she wants you out,
But an hour later,
You two are busy making out,

Cause its bittersweet love,
keep them with you,
you're never gonna be,
with someone else,
oh that bittersweet love,

Well she tells you shes pregnant,
And you messed her up,
But you still wanna love her,
Even though she made it up,

Cause its bittersweet love,
keep them with you,
you're never gonna be,
with someone else,
oh that bittersweet love,

Oh she starts to cheat on you,
Even though you both know,
She dumps you for him,
And she'll come back for you more,

Cause its bittersweet love,
keep them with you,
you're never gonna be,
with someone else,
oh that bittersweet love,

Will you finally grow a pair?
And tell her you want out,
Or will you continue to sleep with her,
And forget about your doubts?

Cause its bittersweet love,
keep them with you,
you're never gonna be,
with someone else,
oh that bittersweet love,

bittersweet love,
yes, bittersweet love,
bittersweet love, (that aint for me)
bittersweet love, (i'd rather be in a tree)
bittersweet love, (f*** that i'm going home)
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on May 14, 2006, 10:43:30 PM
i've been listening to too much ray charles lately, so here's a blues song im working on

Are you my savior?
Or are you my friend?
Will you help me,
Try and reach the end?

I don
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: on May 17, 2006, 09:29:32 PM
Wrote this in about twenty minuets this morning. It came out of nowhere and is about your friend and mine, this is called 'Oh Lordy':

I know we feel disgrace
It's our life to waste
And that look on your face
Can tell an ugly story

It's about a man
Who they don't understand
Yet his ideal plan
It could lead to glory

You don't know
(What you playing at?)
You can't see
(What you looknig at?)

It's he, he came and went
Just to ease the pain
Just to play the game

It's he, he came to see
How your life was going
If our love was growing

Better loose your disguises
Better rise the prices
There'll be no surprises
Only one big crisis
When the water rises

You don't know
(What you playing at?)
You can't see
(What you looking at?)

It's he, he came and went
Just to ease the pain
Just to play the game

It's he, he came to see
How your life was going
If our love was growing

I know we feel distaste
About what we face
In this human race
Only us in the jury

We got to make a stand
Go hand in hand
To the promised land
As I sing oh lordy, lordy mama, hahahahahahaha!!!!!!!!!
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on May 18, 2006, 12:37:20 AM
Quote from: andersonCouncill
DUEL IN THE SUN

Prepare for yet another duel in the sun
All these bigwigs trying to decide who is number one!
Goodbye to decency
Goodbye to fun
Its ours!
For its time for the duel in the sun
No one can understand why the two,
The two counterparts can't look at eachother and see they are
One and the same!
Its insane! This game!
Its the game of a fool
And I wish I knew!
Why we had to fight tonight!
But I know no more then everyone!
Why they must duel within the sun!

Duel in the sun!
Duel in the sun!
Duel in the sun!

Duel in the sun!
Duel in the sun!
Duel in the sun!

Duel in the sun!
Duel in the sun!
Duel in the sun!

Come one!
Come all!
And place your bets now!
Come all!
Come one!
Comes to bloodshed and tears tonight!
Everyone falls out and about themselves and forgets where they are!
Screaming and drooling and raving and ruling all that they give and none which they are!

Duel in the sun!
Duel in the sun!
Duel in the sun!

Duel in the sun!
Duel in the sun!
Duel in the sun!

Duel in the sun!
Duel in the sun!
Duel in the sun!

And the two brothers die
And the inevitable cry
And all is forgotten now
And the war is also forgotten somehow
It matters not anymore
No one remebers the brother's war
But still the bigwigs fight on
Albeit its a different battle
But still it helps no one

Duel in the sun!
Duel in the sun!
Duel in the sun!

Duel in the sun!
Duel in the sun!
Duel in the sun!

Duel in the sun!
Duel in the sun!
Duel in the sun!

Duel in the sun!
Duel in the sun!
Duel in the sun!

Duel in the sun!
Duel in the sun!
Duel in the sun!

Duel in the sun!
Duel in the sun!
Duel in the sun!

Duel in the sun!
Duel in the sun!
Duel in the sun!

Duel in the sun!
Duel in the sun!
Duel in the sun!

Duel in the sun!
Duel in the sun!
Duel in the sun!

Duel in the sun!
Duel in the sun!
Everyone! Everyone!
Duel in the sun!
Duel in the sun!
Pick your sides!
Duel in the sun!
Duel in the sun!
But in the end no one wins and everyone dies!

Duel in the sun!
Duel in the sun!
Duel in the sun!

Review please.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: on May 18, 2006, 02:38:41 AM
That's a wonderful song.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on May 18, 2006, 08:06:13 PM
Quote from: somedude210
i've been listening to too much ray charles lately, so here's a blues song im working on

Are you my savior?
Or are you my friend?
Will you help me,
Try and reach the end?

I don
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on May 20, 2006, 07:48:42 PM
and now this thread has died for another 2 months
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: on May 21, 2006, 06:04:58 AM
Why do I get the impression I know you from somewhere?
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Indica on May 21, 2006, 12:09:34 PM
Not lyrics as much - but a poem I had to write for University ...
It's an early attempt at writing an an unrhymed villanelle.

---


Fading flowers tied to a passing bridge
Stop me in my tracks with mournful haste
A life lost and a tragedy that stings

Scent withers and washes with the deep
A last stand of beauty set free
Fading flowers tied to a passing bridge

Meanings change as night descends
Alone they travel to a place unknown
A life lost and tragedy that stings

The vitality of fresh hope sits wrinkled and old
The bony hand waits with baited breath to snatch
Fading flowers tied to a passing bridge

Pale tarnish clots and petals fall
As tears drop from a family unseen
A life lost and tragedy that stings

Through sadness comes acceptance and grace
Now understood, I walk and admire
Looking across to a place of silent prayer
Fading flowers tied to a passing bridge
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: on May 22, 2006, 06:51:05 AM
Quote from: somedude210
review please

That is a great song.

Here be mine written with the forum in mind...

(Chant #1) Love, Peace and Understanding

What is it with all our fighting
Misunderstandings
It's just frightening
Lets remind ourselves of why we're here
To spread goodwill, hope and cheer

I don't intend to offend

I want to see

Love, Peace and Understanding
Let us get on
Let us be trying


Repeat chorus ad infinitum...

Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Mairi on May 22, 2006, 03:16:44 PM
This is a song I wrote (hasn't got a title yet) that is supposed to be just a sunny, teenage love song. Sort of insprired by My Girl.

You're the cutest thing that I've ever seen
On a scale of one to ten I would rate you seventeen
I used to be addicted to advil and coke
But now I'm just addicted to your stupid jokes
You can call me crazy, you can call me a dork
You can call me weird 'cause I eat ice cream with a fork

(Chorus)
Baby
I like you
Do you like me too?
We can meet at the chocklit shoppe
Maybe after school
If you like me like I like you
I know you do

You have a knowledge of stuff like Mary Tyler Moore
Anytime I talk to you I don't know what's in store
You can make me laugh or you can make me cry
Other times your happiness just makes me wanna die
I'd like to be your baby and I don't know what to do
No matter what I try I can't measure up to you

(Chorus)

You never fail to pick me up when I'm feeling down
There's never been a time when you've pushed me around
If you weren't such a boy, I'd say you were a girl
'Cause there's no one else like you in the world
Don't think of me as a groupie or just another of your dolls
I'm the only one who'll catch you when you fall
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: on May 23, 2006, 09:49:51 AM
 :K)
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on May 24, 2006, 08:58:52 PM
Quote from: Mairi
This is a song I wrote (hasn't got a title yet) that is supposed to be just a sunny, teenage love song. Sort of insprired by My Girl.

You're the cutest thing that I've ever seen
On a scale of one to ten I would rate you seventeen
I used to be addicted to advil and coke
But now I'm just addicted to your stupid jokes
You can call me crazy, you can call me a dork
You can call me weird 'cause I eat ice cream with a fork

(Chorus)
Baby
I like you
Do you like me too?
We can meet at the chocklit shoppe
Maybe after school
If you like me like I like you
I know you do

You have a knowledge of stuff like Mary Tyler Moore
Anytime I talk to you I don't know what's in store
You can make me laugh or you can make me cry
Other times your happiness just makes me wanna die
I'd like to be your baby and I don't know what to do
No matter what I try I can't measure up to you

(Chorus)

You never fail to pick me up when I'm feeling down
There's never been a time when you've pushed me around
If you weren't such a boy, I'd say you were a girl
'Cause there's no one else like you in the world
Don't think of me as a groupie or just another of your dolls
I'm the only one who'll catch you when you fall


Kind of Barretian, you know?
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on May 24, 2006, 10:46:29 PM
Quote from: somedude210
heres a song i wrote here at work, basically i was laughing my ass off as i was writing this, cause this is basically my song about my ex...enjoy it as much as i did writing it.

Bittersweet Love

When she kicks you to the curb,
And she says she wants you out,
But an hour later,
You two are busy making out,

Cause its bittersweet love,
keep them with you,
you're never gonna be,
with someone else,
oh that bittersweet love,

Well she tells you shes pregnant,
And you messed her up,
But you still wanna love her,
Even though she made it up,

Cause its bittersweet love,
keep them with you,
you're never gonna be,
with someone else,
oh that bittersweet love,

Oh she starts to cheat on you,
Even though you both know,
She dumps you for him,
And she'll come back for you more,

Cause its bittersweet love,
keep them with you,
you're never gonna be,
with someone else,
oh that bittersweet love,

Will you finally grow a pair?
And tell her you want out,
Or will you continue to sleep with her,
And forget about your doubts?

Cause its bittersweet love,
keep them with you,
you're never gonna be,
with someone else,
oh that bittersweet love,

bittersweet love,
yes, bittersweet love,
bittersweet love, (that aint for me)
bittersweet love, (i'd rather be in a tree)
bittersweet love, (f*** that i'm going home)

review please, much appreciated from us not as real as we like musicians ;D
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on May 25, 2006, 12:37:41 AM
DEADBRAINED

Deadbrained f***faced ugly ass whore
Get the f*** outta my door
f***ing commercial f** douchebag
Shut the f*** up or I'll suffocate you with a plastic bag

Conformity is down the tube
Lets all be punk, let's all be cool
You disgust me, Blink 182
Hypocritical bastard brained doucheheaded fool!
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: on May 25, 2006, 04:30:01 AM
Quote from: andersonCouncill
DEADBRAINED

Deadbrained f***faced ugly ass whore
Get the f*** outta my door
f***ing commercial f** douchebag
Shut the f*** up or I'll suffocate you with a plastic bag

Conformity is down the tube
Lets all be punk, let's all be cool
You disgust me, Blink 182
Hypocritical bastard brained doucheheaded fool!

That is good. I know a few people that song applies to, they wouldn't understand it mind you, but it still applies to them.

Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Mairi on May 25, 2006, 02:56:15 PM
Quote from: somedude210

review please, much appreciated from us not as real as we like musicians ;D

I like that one, you have some good rhymes and it could be a hit.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on May 25, 2006, 07:19:24 PM
thanks very much mairi
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on May 26, 2006, 01:57:14 AM
Quote from: somedude210
wrote this about 1230 last night. came to me as i was trying to get to sleep and thought "well what happens if i suddenly died. i'm on top of the world, so would they think of it as a suicide or find it suspicious?" so i went with a "i committed suicide but everyone is thinking that someone killed me, well i am having the best time at my life...makes sense if you think of it"

One day, you'll find me,
Lying in the grass,
Wondering who killed,
That f***ing smartass,

I'll tell you, my friend,
Of my horrible fate,
Dying alone,
In a nice quiet lake,
The pain I felt,
Making love to the past,
Hoping someday,
That pain won't last.

But how could it be,
Such a successful boy,
Killing himself,
And finding such joy,
It may not happen,
but some say it might,
Finding him there,
After a cold, wintery night,

Laying there,
With a smile on his face,
Knowing the drama,
Of living in such a place,
And despite all his wickedness,
Failures and lack of proof,
He will still be remembered,
As a soldier of truth,

I'll touch the hearts,
and souls of the present,
and f*** those that think,
I'm some sort of preasant,

And one day you'll find me,
Lying in the wood,
And wonder who killed,
That person of good,

not much of a cheery song but i liked the premise of it, so would you mind "reviewing" it for me. and thanks to those that have taken time to read my crap

Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on May 26, 2006, 07:11:24 PM
Quote from: somedude210

not much of a cheery song but i liked the premise of it, so would you mind "reviewing" it for me. and thanks to those that have taken time to read my crap


I love the sense of foreboding that entrails it. I have trouble reviewing just lyrics. Perhaps if you could record me a demo of some of your songs you want reviewed I could give a fuller review.

SUICIDE SMILE

Oh, we hold our time and try and keep the rhyme,
From becominjg to repetitive
And we shine like the sun
Be my number one
And I'll give you all a girl could want
If I'm too ugly I'll get plastic surgery
And if I'm to poor I'll try to make some more
And if I'm to mean I'll get therapy
To help me learn to behave
And if thats not enough you can cheat on me,
Steal from me,
And beat on me
I'll just hold my time
And wait for you
To start to come around
And maybe you will see that you and me, girl
We were meant to be, girl
Your my whole world
Alright
We were meant to be
I need you,
You need me
Trust me on this one thing
Take my hand across this foreign land and we'll wash
The pain away
So c'mon
I love you girl
Don't you know
I love you
I love you so
And I'll be who you want and do what you say
If you'll be mine
Alright
Its time for you suicide smile!

I would laugh for you when your not funny
I would cry for you when you are sad
I would die for you when your in trouble
I would tell you the truth when I knew you had been had
Just tell me
Just tell me
Just tell me why not?
And you can have it all
Always
Always
Always
Summer, Winter, Spring, and Fall
Tell me why
Why do you hate me
Tell me why
Why don't you love me
Tell me why
You won't be mine.
I would kill myself for you!
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on May 27, 2006, 09:40:22 PM
i was bored so i just started writing all this crap out as it came to me, wrote it in about 10 mins hence the shortness

when the world just turns and stops,
unknown to what is right,
every plan of ours just flops,
and we're forced to fight,

is nothing left?
are we stuck to eternal mess?
when nothing seems to go right?
are we locked into the night?

let the world go on and on,
can't we all just go on strong,
living life as we wish to lead,
or stuck making eachother bleed?

is there nothing left?
are we the only ones?
are we the last ones?
are we...
are we...
are we the last ones?
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Mairi on May 27, 2006, 09:57:06 PM
AndersonCouncill, if you replaced "girl" with "boy" in your song it would be my theme song. *sighs*
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on May 27, 2006, 11:22:53 PM
aww, come on mairi, lift your head up. youve got pleanty of friends on her
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on May 30, 2006, 10:15:25 PM
Quote from: Mairi
AndersonCouncill, if you replaced "girl" with "boy" in your song it would be my theme song. *sighs*

It is my theme song. I was writing in first person.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Mairi on May 31, 2006, 02:55:52 PM
Oh, I know. But I can relate to it.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on May 31, 2006, 07:46:01 PM
Quote from: somedude210
i was bored so i just started writing all this crap out as it came to me, wrote it in about 10 mins hence the shortness

when the world just turns and stops,
unknown to what is right,
every plan of ours just flops,
and we're forced to fight,

is nothing left?
are we stuck to eternal mess?
when nothing seems to go right?
are we locked into the night?

let the world go on and on,
can't we all just go on strong,
living life as we wish to lead,
or stuck making eachother bleed?

is there nothing left?
are we the only ones?
are we the last ones?
are we...
are we...
are we the last ones?

reviewy please, even though its crap, its reviewable crap ;D
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on June 15, 2006, 01:38:23 AM
another one i made at work about my ex

You wake one morning,
To find that she has gone,
It’s been two months now,
Still you miss her how,
You thought she didn’t mean much,
But she’s still in your mind,

Deep down she’s still in your heart,
Even though you called her a tart,
But how long,
How long will she stay?

As time goes on,
She’s still there,
Like a bad dream,
That won’t go away,

How long has it been,
Since your last kiss goodnight?
Since your very last fight?

You try to change,
Try to rearrange,
Your life for the better,
Just to try to forget her,

Long ago, so long,
She pulled you out,
Out from that rut you were in,
You needed help,
She lifted your cross,
And kicked you in the crotch,
And made you carry it all alone,

But still, deep down,
In you heart,
She lingers on,
After you called her a tart,
Still, its time to move on…


edit: ive made a recording of it if you really care to hear it, pm me if you do.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on June 19, 2006, 10:17:44 PM
Quote from: Mairi
Oh, I know. But I can relate to it.

You are way to much like me. It depresses me.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on July 05, 2006, 02:00:42 PM
Quote from: somedude210
another one i made at work about my ex

You wake one morning,
To find that she has gone,
It’s been two months now,
Still you miss her how,
You thought she didn’t mean much,
But she’s still in your mind,

Deep down she’s still in your heart,
Even though you called her a tart,
But how long,
How long will she stay?

As time goes on,
She’s still there,
Like a bad dream,
That won’t go away,

How long has it been,
Since your last kiss goodnight?
Since your very last fight?

You try to change,
Try to rearrange,
Your life for the better,
Just to try to forget her,

Long ago, so long,
She pulled you out,
Out from that rut you were in,
You needed help,
She lifted your cross,
And kicked you in the crotch,
And made you carry it all alone,

But still, deep down,
In you heart,
She lingers on,
After you called her a tart,
Still, its time to move on…


edit: ive made a recording of it if you really care to hear it, pm me if you do.

That's kind of depressing. I like your other work much more. That one just bored me a little and at times  hits a mark.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Mairi on July 06, 2006, 02:09:30 AM
Two songs I wrote about being in love with my best friend, who is also, I'm pretty sure, gay.

Jewel Collector

I wrote you a million songs
But you never wrote me one
You once shared my laughter
But that was just for fun
And I held back my innocence
So I could catch my breath
But you were never quite like that
You loved the liar's death

(chrous)
Don't let the melody screw you up
'Cause the lyrics ring true
I was a lonesome jewel-collector
And I fell for you

You just put you head back
And laughed into the sky
I wondered what you meant by that
But I chose not to cry
I let the evening drfit into me
And vanished for a while
And when I cam back down to earth
You began to smile

(chrous)

You and your friends commerced
Around your meeting spot
You told them I was crazy
Is that what you really thought?
Or did that concrete pillow
Finally hit you in the head
Never again to let you know
Just what the prophet said

(chorus)

I'll admit I was a bit hung up
On what you thought of me
But my own personal demons
Thought that you should plainly see
Just what I tried to sacrifice
When I ws on the run
I was just like Icarus
I flew too close to the sun

(chorus)

And now you're in your matchstick box
Wondering where I've been
I was through the Looking Glass
I saw things I'd never seen
Don't let the children come too close
Or else they'll make you say
Let's try to avoid the mystery
C'mon, let's run away

When I Look At You

I'd rather be your lover than your friend
And if your arm you would extend
To take me to that place you go
Where you laugh and play and no one knows
I'd sell my soul if it'd make you smile
So let's go away for a while

(chrous)
I wish I could ell you what I mean
I wish I could be your peasant queen
I wish I could hold you and never let you go
I wish you were aware but you'll never know
Where I go when I look at you

If you're driving alone with nowhere to be
And you need somebody, call on me
I'lll be waiting outside the door
I'm asking for your love and nothing more
I can't do everything you want me to
So blow me a kiss if you're passing through

(chrous)

I won't get jealous, angry, or mad
If you break my heart I won't be sad
I'll be there to fix your life
I'll be there to be your wife
But being friends isn't enough for me
Isn't there something you'd rather be?

(Chorus)
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on July 17, 2006, 05:50:45 AM
Quote from: Mairi
Two songs I wrote about being in love with my best friend, who is also, I'm pretty sure, gay.

Jewel Collector

I wrote you a million songs
But you never wrote me one
You once shared my laughter
But that was just for fun
And I held back my innocence
So I could catch my breath
But you were never quite like that
You loved the liar's death

(chrous)
Don't let the melody screw you up
'Cause the lyrics ring true
I was a lonesome jewel-collector
And I fell for you

You just put you head back
And laughed into the sky
I wondered what you meant by that
But I chose not to cry
I let the evening drfit into me
And vanished for a while
And when I cam back down to earth
You began to smile

(chrous)

You and your friends commerced
Around your meeting spot
You told them I was crazy
Is that what you really thought?
Or did that concrete pillow
Finally hit you in the head
Never again to let you know
Just what the prophet said

(chorus)

I'll admit I was a bit hung up
On what you thought of me
But my own personal demons
Thought that you should plainly see
Just what I tried to sacrifice
When I ws on the run
I was just like Icarus
I flew too close to the sun

(chorus)

And now you're in your matchstick box
Wondering where I've been
I was through the Looking Glass
I saw things I'd never seen
Don't let the children come too close
Or else they'll make you say
Let's try to avoid the mystery
C'mon, let's run away

When I Look At You

I'd rather be your lover than your friend
And if your arm you would extend
To take me to that place you go
Where you laugh and play and no one knows
I'd sell my soul if it'd make you smile
So let's go away for a while

(chrous)
I wish I could ell you what I mean
I wish I could be your peasant queen
I wish I could hold you and never let you go
I wish you were aware but you'll never know
Where I go when I look at you

If you're driving alone with nowhere to be
And you need somebody, call on me
I'lll be waiting outside the door
I'm asking for your love and nothing more
I can't do everything you want me to
So blow me a kiss if you're passing through

(chrous)

I won't get jealous, angry, or mad
If you break my heart I won't be sad
I'll be there to fix your life
I'll be there to be your wife
But being friends isn't enough for me
Isn't there something you'd rather be?

(Chorus)

I thought they were beautiful, Mairi.

A LONELY STRETCH OF NEVADA HIGHWAY

On a lonely stretch of Nevada highway
Longer than Hell itself
Someone gon go and die today
When the sun explodes
They gon melt

A lonely stretch of Nevada highway
Used to seein' abuse
Pain and time is comin' and they sick o' bein' used

On a lonely stretch of Neveda highway
A biker passes through
A waitress in a cocktail bar f***s up his order
What's he to do?
Well, he pulls out that gun and he shoots her in the face
It says great service on the door right when you walk into the place

A lonely stretch of Nevada highway
Used to seein' abuse
Pain and time is comin' and they sick o' bein' used

On a lonely stretch of Nevada highway
A trailer sits alone
Boy with babysitter
Kid can't understand why ma' a'int comin' home
Works minimum wage all week long
Hopin' for better days for her son
And now that she's gone what's he gonna do
By the time he's twelve puts a shell through his gums
His days are through

A lonely stretch of Nevada highway
Used to seein' abuse
Pain and time is comin' and they sick o' bein' used

On a lonely stretch of Nevada highway
A woman's raped body lays
Out in the fields well to cops keep on havin' there way
They know it'll be alright
People are used to this for a biker's wife
Blame it on the hubby and there you go
The cops are off to the rodeo
Can't get their own honey
Their just a bit too chubby

A lonely stretch of Nevada highway
Used to seein' abuse
Pain and time is comin' and they sick o' bein' used

On a lonely stretch of Nevada highway
A biker goes fast as he can
Just wants so coffee to calm his nervous
And maybe some slices of bacon
He just saw his best gal defiled by two pigs and tried to close his eyes
Now he's runnin' away for he goes to court and meets his demise
He's stressed out enough when a girl brings him his plate
Got to much sugar in the coffee and he's already quite irate

A lonely stretch of Nevada highway
Used to seein' abuse
Pain and time is comin' and they sick o' bein' used

On a lonely stretch of Nevada highway
In a diner someplace
A biker see's who he just shot an' is heart begins to race
High school sweetheart
And this is the mean part...
He went an' knocked her up
Ran out when he was jus' a kid
Never knew his son
Always felt bad never could get over what he did...

A lonely stretch of Nevada highway
Used to seein' abuse
Pain and time is comin' and they sick o' bein' used

On a lonely stretch of Nevada highway
A SWAT team corners a diner
With sun beatin' down
Nothin' could be finer to the misinformed,
Then shootin' this biker clown,
He walks out,
Filled with tears
And they wrestle him to the ground
After what he done he got no fears only regret and the gun's resounding sound
He's thrown into a car and brought back to where the rape happened,
Back in Texas
Where he's sentenced to deeath by a lethal injection.

A lonely stretch of Nevada highway
Used to seein' abuse
Pain and time is comin' and they sick o' bein' used
Sick o' bein used
<Repeated fade out on final phrase>

review please
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on July 17, 2006, 05:56:26 AM
FREAK LIKE ME

I love you
I don't care who you are
I love you
Could you love me too?

Are you a freak?
Are you like me?
Are you afraid to even speak sometimes?
Do they call you ugly?
Are you a freak?
Do you love me?
Are you a freak?
Will you be mine?
You're the most beautiful thing I've ever seen,
I don't care what they say
You're the most beautiful thing I've ever seen,
I don't care what they say

Are you a freak?
Are you a freak?
Are you a freak?
Are you a freak like me?

Are you a freak?
Are you like me?
Are you afraid to even speak sometimes?
Do they call you ugly?
Are you a freak?
Do you love me?
Are you a freak?
Will you be mine?
You're the most beautiful thing I've ever seen,
I don't care what they say
You're the most beautiful thing I've ever seen,
I don't care what they say

Are you a freak?
Are you a freak?
Are you a freak?
Are you a freak like me?

I don't care who you are...
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on July 21, 2006, 08:02:48 PM
I was lookin' out the window
And I saw you
You were staring blankely
Didn't know what to do
You were out there in the rain
And I smiled thinly
But I didn't know if I was ready to let you back in

She has pale white legs
Like a China Doll
And deep dark eyes
Like the colors of fall
I want to hold you
I want to kiss you
I know I was the one who sinned
And I was the one who left
But I'm not sure I'm quite ready to let you back in

This pain you give me
With you're pale white cheeks
And you're beautiful complexion
Shines a reflection
Through my soul
I know
That it's time to forget what there was
And give you what there is

She has pale white legs
Like a China Doll
And deep dark eyes
Like the colors of fall
I want to hold you
I want to kiss you
I know I was the one who sinned
And I was the one who left
But I'm not sure I'm quite ready to let you back in

I feel you in my soul
And I know you have no reason to take me back
But allow me this one more chance
And I will make you mine
And I'll never close you out again this time

She has pale white legs
Like a China Doll
And deep dark eyes
Like the colors of fall
I want to hold you
I want to kiss you
I know I was the one who sinned
And I was the one who left
But I'm not sure I'm quite ready to let you back in

Take the dream as it is given
The dream that is you
You have no idea how beautiful you really are, do you?

Me and this girl got into a long talk about this poem when I asked her to review it. We started talking about how neither members of the relationship are innocent. The narrator is the man in the relationship, and his chorus seems fixated on her physical features, but not because he is shallow, but because he is unable to express love in any other way but sex. It also came out that it gets eerie and seems to allude to some sort of sexual tension--a threat--which suggests sexual violence on one or both members of the party's part. However, it came up that it does not evoke rape, oddly enough. And that what I had acquired was a feeling that evokes sexual violation of a physical manner that is not painful. Like many writers, I do not understand the complexitites of my lyrics until after I am done and can peer into my subconcious mind. I thought it was worth pointing out to this woman, who particularly disliked the man, that the woman was no less to blame. I envisioned the female in this relationship as emotionally unstable, probably destructive of herself and others. When he says he's not sure whether or not to let her in he doesn't just mean into his heart. He means into his house. He is afraid for his life and so he locks her outside, and her coldness shows in her blank stare when she seems not to care. They are afraid for their lives to stay togethor, but afraid for their souls to leave eachother, because they are all the other has, and the only one the other can identify with, hence the line about reflecting his soul.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: on July 24, 2006, 06:44:59 AM
Quote from: andersonCouncill

That's kind of depressing. I like your other work much more. That one just bored me a little and at times  hits a mark.

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Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: on July 24, 2006, 06:48:20 AM
Quote from: andersonCouncill
FREAK LIKE ME

I love you
I don't care who you are
I love you
Could you love me too?

Are you a freak?
Are you like me?
Are you afraid to even speak sometimes?
Do they call you ugly?
Are you a freak?
Do you love me?
Are you a freak?
Will you be mine?
You're the most beautiful thing I've ever seen,
I don't care what they say
You're the most beautiful thing I've ever seen,
I don't care what they say

Are you a freak?
Are you a freak?
Are you a freak?
Are you a freak like me?

Are you a freak?
Are you like me?
Are you afraid to even speak sometimes?
Do they call you ugly?
Are you a freak?
Do you love me?
Are you a freak?
Will you be mine?
You're the most beautiful thing I've ever seen,
I don't care what they say
You're the most beautiful thing I've ever seen,
I don't care what they say

Are you a freak?
Are you a freak?
Are you a freak?
Are you a freak like me?

I don't care who you are...

Think you've been listening to too much Enuff Z'nuff. Ripoff complete

Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Bobber on July 24, 2006, 07:43:53 AM
Quote from: dwarf_mcdougal

And you want to be Syd Barrett you ********************. Remember- conformity is down the tube...


Welcome to the forums dwarf. Remember I'm a moderator on the edge right now. So behave or leave.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Kevin on July 24, 2006, 08:08:19 AM
Quote from: dwarf_mcdougal

And you want to be Syd Barrett you hypocritical brained douchebag fool. Remember- conformity is down the tube...


That has a depressingly familiar ring to it.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Bobber on July 24, 2006, 08:25:48 AM
Quote from: kevin_b

That has a depressingly familiar ring to it.

Hmm. Noticed that too.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on July 24, 2006, 02:00:19 PM
Quote from: dwarf_mcdougal

And you want to be Syd Barrett you hypocritical brained douchebag fool. Remember- conformity is down the tube...


Heh. Funny, but I could've sworn I had heard this somewhere before...

Anyways, is it a crime to have varied taste in music? To exclude oneself to a single genre is total foolishness, and I hope you have fun making a complete ass of yourself.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on July 24, 2006, 02:01:59 PM
Quote from: dwarf_mcdougal

Think you've been listening to too much Enuff Z'nuff. Ripoff complete


Really, not familiar.

Has it been noticed by anyone he currently has THREE posts, two of which it would appear are directed at attacking me? That is truly pathetic. I can't what to see what pearls of wisdom his one other post contains.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on July 24, 2006, 02:04:08 PM
Quote from: dwarf_mcdougal

.

As I'm not sure what the purpose of that was, I won't even bring it up, as it would appear you are trying to give some form of constructive criticism?

Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on July 24, 2006, 10:14:03 PM
the first one and the last one of the three i liked. freak like me, eh, didnt do it to me. yes its a little catchy but not really your best work. the story behind the third one is pretty interesting though.

ive decided to take a sebatical on songwriting for the moment. im getting into floyd at the moment so im sure the next ones will probably be floydian.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on July 25, 2006, 12:28:43 AM
staring at the screen,
when your window pops up,
you think of yourself as keen,
6 months since we broke up,
this is sad,
pathetic and tiring,
you thrive on a fad,
when we just want to load you and start firing,
please shut up,
i dont like you,
no one likes you,
(speaking) so just shut the bloody hell up!

long ago, i mightve felt something,
but this is wrong,
that you only understand through song,
let your mind wander and think,
you're pushing me to the brink,
we run from you en masse,
so dont let that door hit your ass,

leave me alone,
let me be,
leave it all,
just leave me alone,

get the hell out!
leave me alone,
leave me be,
leave me alone,
just...just...just leave me alone
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on July 25, 2006, 07:13:37 AM
Quote from: somedude210
the first one and the last one of the three i liked. freak like me, eh, didnt do it to me. yes its a little catchy but not really your best work. the story behind the third one is pretty interesting though.

ive decided to take a sebatical on songwriting for the moment. im getting into floyd at the moment so im sure the next ones will probably be floydian.

It is, I suppose. That discussion morphed into a conversation about her ex, and I think I may have inadvertantely dragged up some pretty painful memories for her. She said he told her she was "too depressed to be around" and I said "That's a lie. You've made me feel nothing but euphoric in our discussions. Maybe the problem was that he was too depressing for you to be around."
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: on July 26, 2006, 11:05:17 AM
I would go to see you
On Sundays with cheap wine
we would talk and dance
on carpet, cheap twine

Loved your every move,
Loved your hum to those songs
To Frank, and Dean and Tony
Now when I hear them, I rage and I long

Sometimes you come to me
The bond that we made
I smell you, I feel you,
But you're like a shadow in the shade.

It's been 5 years
since we said goodbye
give Dad and Grandpa
a kiss, for all of you, I cry--------------

To be continued....
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on July 26, 2006, 04:21:55 PM
Quote from: dwarf_mcdougal
I would go to see you
On Sundays with cheap wine
we would talk and dance
on carpet, cheap twine

Loved your every move,
Loved your hum to those songs
To Frank, and Dean and Tony
Now when I hear them, I rage and I long

Sometimes you come to me
The bond that we made
I smell you, I feel you,
But you're like a shadow in the shade.

It's been 5 years
since we said goodbye
give Dad and Grandpa
a kiss, for all of you, I cry--------------

To be continued....


That was very emotional. I liked it very much. It cuts deep. It would appear to be autobiographical?
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: on July 26, 2006, 05:27:29 PM
Quote from: andersonCouncill


That was very emotional. I liked it very much. It cuts deep. It would appear to be autobiographical?

You are very kind. I certainly don't fancy myself a poet, I usually have an idea and some words, but by the time I start writing, its all gobbeldegook. The  5 year anniversary of my Grandmother's passing comes in a few weeks. Most people give barely a nod to the elderly and when visiting, always looking at their watch or the clock. My Grandmother was my Soulmate, we always knew what the other was thinking, and I could go on and on. She died in my arms, and I miss her horribly. Sorry. I'm taking the road to being melodramatic, but it's all true, and you are kind to give me a nod. I'm not as erudite as some on this site, but it came from the heart, for good or for bad. Thank you Mr. Anderson.

Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on July 26, 2006, 06:05:41 PM
Melodrama is a good thing when it's true, as this is.

I know they probably don't have many fans here, but the Progressive Rock band Tool have a song on their new album called Wings For Marie (10,000 Days), which it kind of reminds me of.

Thank you for bringing this thread back up, Dwarf. Its nice to see fellow writer's work and get opinions.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on July 26, 2006, 08:25:39 PM
Quote from: andersonCouncill


That was very emotional. I liked it very much. It cuts deep.

mm, i agree with AC on this one. its very good and if this is one of your first then i would enjoy reading more from you. it sounds like a good song, but i gotta ask what type of music would go with this? i was thinking like a Cash-ish country or something off Plastic Ono Band. reminds me of Wish You Were Here by pink floyd, but that may also be because i'm listening to it now.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: on July 26, 2006, 08:49:48 PM
Quote from: somedude210

mm, i agree with AC on this one. its very good and if this is one of your first then i would enjoy reading more from you. it sounds like a good song, but i gotta ask what type of music would go with this? i was thinking like a Cash-ish country or something off Plastic Ono Band. reminds me of Wish You Were Here by pink floyd, but that may also be because i'm listening to it now.

Y'know, I never thought about the music. It was just musing. Something dirge-like I suppose, I can't put up the overdrive to that. Granted, there are sad songs that you can rage to, I've got a ton. This was just reflective of someone I miss horribly, and there may be no music to it, God knows the lyrics aren't anything out of the ordinary, I just posted it, but thanks alot, I appreciate the compliments.

Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on July 27, 2006, 02:31:25 AM
Quote from: somedude210
staring at the screen,
when your window pops up,
you think of yourself as keen,
6 months since we broke up,
this is sad,
pathetic and tiring,
you thrive on a fad,
when we just want to load you and start firing,
please shut up,
i dont like you,
no one likes you,
(speaking) so just shut the bloody hell up!

long ago, i mightve felt something,
but this is wrong,
that you only understand through song,
let your mind wander and think,
you're pushing me to the brink,
we run from you en masse,
so dont let that door hit your ass,

leave me alone,
let me be,
leave it all,
just leave me alone,

get the hell out!
leave me alone,
leave me be,
leave me alone,
just...just...just leave me alone

Is this still autobiographical? I like how it's accusatory. I can definintley see a Watersian influence. You've heard The Wall, yes? Because I hear that influence a lot.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on July 27, 2006, 02:50:00 AM
haha, yes it is autobiographical. happened to me last night. um, you know i was thinking that the next few id make would be floyd influenced but i dont see it as maybe pink floyd influenced. but if i tried i could make it one. hmm, have to ponder it more in my evil lair...
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on July 27, 2006, 03:19:32 AM
Quote from: somedude210
haha, yes it is autobiographical. happened to me last night. um, you know i was thinking that the next few id make would be floyd influenced but i dont see it as maybe pink floyd influenced. but if i tried i could make it one. hmm, have to ponder it more in my evil lair...

I almost brought up Pros And Cons Of Hitchhiking, but I figured you had never heard it.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: on July 27, 2006, 04:12:43 PM
As you go out looking
for life's meaning you muse and you search
Dragging along your memories and fears
And a distant granite perch.

No one sees you bleeding
as you stumble fighting your pain
so flop on the couch with patchoulie and Floyd
as the cold needle finds the vein...

-Gilmour solo-

* Bad intentional "Thin Ice" ripoff

Okay, I know it's hokey, but it just came out of my head in a second and there seems to be a number of Pink fans out there, so please don't take this as trivializing your work, I was just f***ing about with rhyme and meter. The Wall was my bible for many a year. I even did a Google search to try to find Pink floating and ripping at his chest.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on July 27, 2006, 05:02:13 PM
Ahh, Roger wouldn't mind. He is quite the narcissist (and simultaneously bi-polar oddly enough), so he'd probably be quite flattered.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Mairi on August 01, 2006, 12:01:05 AM
I don't have time to review all these songs, but may I say that AndersonCouncill is sounding more and more like Leonard Cohen. (THis is a good thing)

The Object of My Objectification

He's devastatingly handsome
And incredibly groovy
It feels like I'm trapped
In a Molly Ringwald movie
I know it sounds stupid
I know it sounds insane
I know this type of love song
Is really rather lame
But 3 million tigers
Couldn't drag me away
I messed up once again
That's not what I meant to say
And now I am stumbling
Over every stupid word
I bet I must sound
Like some kind of stupid turd
But it really doesn't matter
I haven't got the choice
I've got cotton candy poems
And a Dusty Springfield voice

(Chorus)
Blue eyes brown hair
he doesn't seem to care
I can go anywhere
And I can always stare
At the object of my objectification

We're just high school friends
And it only goes to show
If we ever got together
the universe would implode
Like a turtle in a washing machine
What made me think of that?
It must have been his leather jacket
Or his old detective's hat
I'm sure it would'nt be too bad
If I could only speak my mind
But if I open up that can of worms
Who know's what I'll find
So I'll read celebrity rags
And see what's on TV
I'll make up conversations
And pretend he's talking to me
See you when I'll see you
Is what we always said
And I see him seeing me
Inside my empty head

(chorus)

This stupid apparatus
Make me screw up all the time
What is that thing called again?
Oh yeah, it's called a mind
Too bad I'm too chicken
To say what I wanna say
Maybe I'll tell him, maybe
Maybe I will someday

(chorus X2)
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on August 01, 2006, 02:42:32 AM
Quote from: Mairi
I don't have time to review all these songs, but may I say that AndersonCouncill is sounding more and more like Leonard Cohen. (THis is a good thing)

The Object of My Objectification

He's devastatingly handsome
And incredibly groovy
It feels like I'm trapped
In a Molly Ringwald movie
I know it sounds stupid
I know it sounds insane
I know this type of love song
Is really rather lame
But 3 million tigers
Couldn't drag me away
I messed up once again
That's not what I meant to say
And now I am stumbling
Over every stupid word
I bet I must sound
Like some kind of stupid turd
But it really doesn't matter
I haven't got the choice
I've got cotton candy poems
And a Dusty Springfield voice

(Chorus)
Blue eyes brown hair
he doesn't seem to care
I can go anywhere
And I can always stare
At the object of my objectification

We're just high school friends
And it only goes to show
If we ever got together
the universe would implode
Like a turtle in a washing machine
What made me think of that?
It must have been his leather jacket
Or his old detective's hat
I'm sure it would'nt be too bad
If I could only speak my mind
But if I open up that can of worms
Who know's what I'll find
So I'll read celebrity rags
And see what's on TV
I'll make up conversations
And pretend he's talking to me
See you when I'll see you
Is what we always said
And I see him seeing me
Inside my empty head

(chorus)

This stupid apparatus
Make me screw up all the time
What is that thing called again?
Oh yeah, it's called a mind
Too bad I'm too chicken
To say what I wanna say
Maybe I'll tell him, maybe
Maybe I will someday

(chorus X2)

I think we should make a habit of not reading eachother's love songs anymore. There to interchangeable. It's a little depressing.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on August 08, 2006, 08:04:32 PM
I was bored so i dug up this parody that i did of Piano Man about a stripper, a few years back.  i will warn you now that this is about a stripper and talks about bras and lapdances. if you find this offensive, dont read and dont give me crap for this because you didnt have to read if you didnt want to. if you dont mind teenage humor than read on, its actually a little amusing.


It's nine o'clock on a Saturday
The regular crowd shuffles in
There's an old man sitting next to me
Making love to the barmaid next to him

He says, "Girl, can you give me a lapdance
I'm not really sure how it goes
But it's kinky and hot
And I knew it complete
When I wore a younger man's clothes"

Play with us, you're the stripper, man
Play with us tonight
Well we're all in the mood for a lapdance
And you've got us feeling, alright

Now John at the bar is a friend of mine
He gets me my drinks for free
And he's quick with a joke or to light up your smoke
But there's someplace that he'd rather be

He says, "Jill, I believe this is killing me"
As a smile ran away from his face
"Well, I'm sure that I could be a porno star
If I could get out of these pants"

Now Paul is a real estate novelist
Who never had time for a wife
And he's talking with Davy, who's still in the Navy
They're probably married for life

And the waitress is practicing poledance
As the businessmen slowly get stoned
Yes they're sharing a drink they call loneliness
But it's better than feeling alone

Play with us, you're the stripper, man
Play with us tonight
Well we're all in the mood for a lapdance
And you've got us feeling, alright

It's a pretty good crowd for a Saturday
And the manager gives me a smile
'Cause he knows that it's me they've been coming to see
To forget about their wife for a while

And the techno sounds like a carnival
And the thong smells like a beer
And they sit at the bar and put cash in my bra
And say "Man why do you have a beard?"

Play with us, you're the stripper, man
Play with us tonight
Well we're all in the mood for a lapdance
And you've got us feeling, alright
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on August 28, 2006, 01:29:17 PM
some Johnny Cash-esque songs, but they're not complete.

Well I'm along way from home
And I don't wanna go
Cause if I'm goning on home
I'll get there someday soon

Now mamma, don't you cry
I know I'm not gonna die
I'm going, a long way from here,
and I know
I'll get there someday soon

Oh baby, I'll Find my way
even if it takes all day
I'll find my calling
cause baby, I ain't goin home

Now mamma, don't you cry
I know I'm not gonna die
I'm going, a long way from here,
and I know
I'll get there someday soon
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on August 28, 2006, 01:33:10 PM
Angel of mercy,
She's an angel of mercy,
She picked me up,
when i was down,
helped me turn,
my life around,
shes an angel of mercy,
go and pluck her wings

I've been around the world,
seen many things and heard,
the prejudice and pain i've felt,
when all is said and done,
i've found the only one,
that can't relieve my shame,

Angel of mercy,
She's an angel of mercy,
She picked me up,
when i was down,
helped me turn,
my life around,
shes an angel of mercy,
go and pluck her wings
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on August 29, 2006, 08:19:20 AM
Quote from: 218
I don't have time to review all these songs, but may I say that AndersonCouncill is sounding more and more like Leonard Cohen. (THis is a good thing)

The Object of My Objectification

He's devastatingly handsome
And incredibly groovy
It feels like I'm trapped
In a Molly Ringwald movie
I know it sounds stupid
I know it sounds insane
I know this type of love song
Is really rather lame
But 3 million tigers
Couldn't drag me away
I messed up once again
That's not what I meant to say
And now I am stumbling
Over every stupid word
I bet I must sound
Like some kind of stupid turd
But it really doesn't matter
I haven't got the choice
I've got cotton candy poems
And a Dusty Springfield voice

(Chorus)
Blue eyes brown hair
he doesn't seem to care
I can go anywhere
And I can always stare
At the object of my objectification

We're just high school friends
And it only goes to show
If we ever got together
the universe would implode
Like a turtle in a washing machine
What made me think of that?
It must have been his leather jacket
Or his old detective's hat
I'm sure it would'nt be too bad
If I could only speak my mind
But if I open up that can of worms
Who know's what I'll find
So I'll read celebrity rags
And see what's on TV
I'll make up conversations
And pretend he's talking to me
See you when I'll see you
Is what we always said
And I see him seeing me
Inside my empty head

(chorus)

This stupid apparatus
Make me screw up all the time
What is that thing called again?
Oh yeah, it's called a mind
Too bad I'm too chicken
To say what I wanna say
Maybe I'll tell him, maybe
Maybe I will someday

(chorus X2)

Somethin weird: about a week before you posted that someone sent me Famous Blue Raincoat when I said I had never heard Leonard Cohen. Then a week after you posted that I got Death Of A Lady's Man and Leonard Cohen's Greatest Hits for 50 cents at a garage sale. I see what you mean.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on August 29, 2006, 06:43:15 PM
hey AC, mind reviewing mine please
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on August 29, 2006, 06:46:56 PM
Quote from: 343
some Johnny Cash-esque songs, but they're not complete.

Well I'm along way from home
And I don't wanna go
Cause if I'm goning on home
I'll get there someday soon

Now mamma, don't you cry
I know I'm not gonna die
I'm going, a long way from here,
and I know
I'll get there someday soon

Oh baby, I'll Find my way
even if it takes all day
I'll find my calling
cause baby, I ain't goin home

Now mamma, don't you cry
I know I'm not gonna die
I'm going, a long way from here,
and I know
I'll get there someday soon

I like it a lot. Seems something more is going on below the surface, to me at least. I mean, it's like the narrator is in denial.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on August 29, 2006, 06:48:45 PM
Quote from: 343
Angel of mercy,
She's an angel of mercy,
She picked me up,
when i was down,
helped me turn,
my life around,
shes an angel of mercy,
go and pluck her wings

I've been around the world,
seen many things and heard,
the prejudice and pain i've felt,
when all is said and done,
i've found the only one,
that can't relieve my shame,

Angel of mercy,
She's an angel of mercy,
She picked me up,
when i was down,
helped me turn,
my life around,
shes an angel of mercy,
go and pluck her wings

Very A Perfect Circle. I like the last line. It seems the narrator in this song is convinced he will be her downfall, turning her into an archangel, so to speak.

Sorry I'm not very in depth right now.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on August 29, 2006, 08:38:42 PM
interesting, didnt think of that. hmm...*bad german accent* dis is vedy vedy intevesting....
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on August 30, 2006, 01:24:49 AM
the next 3 were written back to back to back in less than an hour at work tonight. since they are so connected to eachother, i think ill combine it all into one long ass song.

Night after night,
As the time just slips right by,
Feeling the wind,
As I stand around and lie

The power to heal
The passion to feel,
Dying as I lost my mind,

Four plain walls,
Crumble and fall,
Still I sit and cry,
falling still falling,
Until the life stops,
And Champagne pops,

Turn life around
and still I wander
around the room
finding a way out

Help me
Save me
From myself
Take me away
Set me free
Stuck inside these four walls
Can anyone hear me?
I'm going insane...
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on August 30, 2006, 01:28:33 AM
I don't wanna go back,
I don't wanna return,
To the land of lunatics
They say I'm smart enough,
They say I'm tough enough,
To beat it all,

Far from home,
chained to the bed,
Free to walk,
long days,
longer thoughts,
To reach a level,
Of Slow Decay,
Where my mind,
forever wanders,
my soul forever suffers

Long ago,
when time stood still,
and I feel lost,
missing something,
nothing makes sense,
the shame haunts me,
The pain flows through me,
How long can I keep my sanity alive?
How long can I possibly survive?

In the hellhole of my mind,
Awake from my slumber
Awake from my life,
Can anyone hear me?
Can anyone help me out?
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on August 30, 2006, 01:33:54 AM
My head is hot,
Getting better by the second
Can you feel it?

My mind is racing,
As it slowly drifts away,
Can you beat it?

My train is off its tracks,
The world is slowing down,
Nothing is going right,
My plans tumble to the ground

My eyes are spinning,
From around the world to another,
Can you see it?

My pain is still there,
My world is falling,
The ones I love are calling,
But there's no one around,
Am I blind to it all,
Do I threaten it all?
Do I trust myself?
to cover it all,
Do I think I'm insane,
Am I losing my mind,

Someone help me,
Please help me,
I can't stand it all,
Let me out from these walls...
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on September 06, 2006, 01:25:54 AM
if anyone could review these at some point, i would be mightily grateful
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on September 07, 2006, 10:34:56 PM
Pornography Pfaff/Dunk

I just hate pornography. I don't think it's attractive at all. It's slutty, passionless, and it preys on the poor. When I did still look at porn (very young, just starting puberty, got over it shortly) I actually recall seeing one in which a girl was clearly trying not to cry. A very young pretty girl. And not porn pretty, but really a beautiful, young girl who probably could've gone far. Honestly, even the spelling of Sindee comes from a porn title I saw lying around my brother's house ("Spreading Sindee", isn't that the most disgusting, misogynistic thing you've ever heard of?). Then towards the end I wanted to make clear that I wasn't calling for censorship, because censorship is the bane of my existence, merely trying to educate the public about the porn industry. That statistic is accurate, by the way. Eighty million a year, all by men. Imagine if that money could be put to use elsewhere? How much money do you think the Christian Children's Fund makes yearly? Probably not eighty million (then again, the church takes in a lot tax free, it appears, so that money might not be all going where it belongs).

Beautiful girls turn themselves to slaves
Because it's the only way they can make a wage
It feeds on the poor and I guarantee you this
All pornographers are capitalists
Do you know what the industry makes?
80 Billion a year
You know how much it would take
To save a small country or
Or rebuild a city
Or put a stop to the fear?
Oh, how I pity
Those once beautiful girls
This passionless type of sex rules the world

Sindee was a pretty girl
Coulda had all the world
Graduated from high school with flying colors
Went to Detroit so she could see
What it's like in the big city
When she got off the Greyhound
First thing she'd seen
A charming guy smiling
Seemed nice enough
Asked her out on a date
Got her flowers and diamonds and stuff
And when living got tough
Told her he could help her make some money
In love with him, within a month
She was in a hotel showing her Barclay Hunt
To a camera well men with moustaches supervise
Turned out to the streets when they're done with her
In nothing but her underwear
Walked down the streets to get another film
In a year she's a legend
Must be great,
She's adored by men
Though not the type you'd like at first glance
Most don't recognize her face
But when she turns around they see her ass
And they know right away who she is
She's walking down the street
Guys in trench coats beatin' their meat
By now she doesn't give it a second thought
One in a coat walks up to her
Asks what she's doing Friday
She says, nervous, "sorry, but I can't"
"I understand" he says with shy eyes
As she walks away she cries
And begins to realize what her life has become
And that man in the trenchcoat a'int gone
He's in the bushes following her home
Waits til she's fast asleep
Into her bedroom window he creeps
Betraying the sanctity of her house
He climbes in bed
She wakes, filled with dread
And before she can scream or wonder if it's just a dream
He clasps shut her mouth
What do you think of porno now?

solo

Now, I'm not calling for censorship
Lord knows I hate a hypocrite
But just know, guys, next time you're in line
At one point that "star" was just an innocent little girl
And I bet the first time she was on camera she cried
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on September 07, 2006, 11:04:12 PM
wow, not bad lyrics. interesting backstory (you seem to top the backstory thing)

and AC, review my latest three, been waiting for someone to review them
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on September 09, 2006, 05:47:56 PM
hey cool, the three people that keep this thread alive are all online at the same time...groovy
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Mairi on September 11, 2006, 07:03:48 PM
Wow, that sound is really sad AC. I think it's good. It's nice to see a guy who think that pornograpy degrades women. Most of the teenage guys I know LOVE it. ::) I once tried to write a song about internet porn, but it was crap. Anyways, here's another song I wrote when I was in a Cole Porter-ish mood.

There's a place in this world for you and me
Let's go to New York and stalk Lou Reed
WE'll drink RC Cola by candlenight
And go to the cinema every night
We'll watch Pulp Fiction and Evil Dead
Then go back home and fall into bed
And while we're sleeping seperately
I'll dream of you and you'll dream of me

(chorus)
You're crazy, and I like it
'Cause I'm kinda crazy too
They say I'm a weirdo
But I'm just a fool for you
Someday they'll lock me up
Inside the looney bin
But I'll just smile and say
'I did it all for him'

Turn on the radio and listen to the Byrds
It doesn't really matter if you don't know the words
We'll just sit and listen together
Moments like this could go on forever
The sun will make your eyes shine bright
But you'll look even better under the moonlight
I'm mad about you as we both know well
What'll happen next, who can tell

(chorus)

I know it must be love this time
I act so odd and I even rhyme
I know we're both just a little bit strange
But I like being crazy and don't wanna change
WE don't need any fancy kinda shrink
We don't need Dr. Phil to tell us what to think
Some people never have any fun
In the world of psychotics, you're my number one

(chorus X2)

You're crazy
You're crazy
You're crazy
But so am I
I'm acting really nuts
And you're the reason why
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on September 11, 2006, 11:04:48 PM
Mairi, good song. interesting premise. would this be the "A Day In The Life of Mairi"?

anyway, when you get a chance, i have three that i wrote up a week or so and i have been waiting patiently for someone to tell me what they think, and for those that will (i will be forever grateful) try to review it as a whole, cause i think that they are all connected, but then again, you may not.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on September 13, 2006, 10:48:47 PM
Quote from: 218
Wow, that sound is really sad AC. I think it's good. It's nice to see a guy who think that pornograpy degrades women. Most of the teenage guys I know LOVE it.
Isn't that disgusting? I mean, it's just, I don't understand it. Women are being raped in essence, on screen. And they are being told from the guy in the camera, whom usually seduced them and whom they are madly in love with, "Smile. Love it." It's basically, "Let's turn women into objects. Let's make them these unfeeling things that we can do whatever the f*** we want to. No! Wait! Let's do that on CAMERA and then SELL it to every man in the world! No! Wait! Let's do that, only then, let's make women who won't be objectified feel like they're not good enough, and then they'll do whatever we want!" I don't understand it. I try to explain to my friends (who are for the most part, good guys), that pornography is like taking a pretty young girl and doing the most vile, disgusting thing imaginable. And they say, "Well, it's just sex". Well, not really. The reason men love porn is because it shows them that they have a power over women physically, which they do. That power: That no matter WHAT, if a girl is getting f***ed. They are getting f***ed. No matter how uncomfortable they are made by it. It's phychological. And they say "Well, it's not like I love the girl, so what's the problem?" too which I reply "Exactly. If you loved a girl would you really want to think about her degrading herself and sucking cock and doing everything imaginable? I would hope not. I would hope if you loved a girl you would want your sex life to reflect that." My punk band's very name EVW (Electric girl privatel Wound) is, in itself, a statement on pornography.

Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on September 13, 2006, 10:53:44 PM
Quote from: 343
the next 3 were written back to back to back in less than an hour at work tonight. since they are so connected to eachother, i think ill combine it all into one long ass song.

part 1:
Night after night,
As the time just slips right by,
Feeling the wind,
As I stand around and lie

The power to heal
The passion to feel,
Dying as I lost my mind,

Four plain walls,
Crumble and fall,
Still I sit and cry,
falling still falling,
Until the life stops,
And Champagne pops,

Turn life around
and still I wander
around the room
finding a way out

Help me
Save me
From myself
Take me away
Set me free
Stuck inside these four walls
Can anyone hear me?
I'm going insane...

part 2:
I don't wanna go back,
I don't wanna return,
To the land of lunatics
They say I'm smart enough,
They say I'm tough enough,
To beat it all,

Far from home,
chained to the bed,
Free to walk,
long days,
longer thoughts,
To reach a level,
Of Slow Decay,
Where my mind,
forever wanders,
my soul forever suffers

Long ago,
when time stood still,
and I feel lost,
missing something,
nothing makes sense,
the shame haunts me,
The pain flows through me,
How long can I keep my sanity alive?
How long can I possibly survive?

In the hellhole of my mind,
Awake from my slumber
Awake from my life,
Can anyone hear me?
Can anyone help me out?

part 3:
My head is hot,
Getting better by the second
Can you feel it?

My mind is racing,
As it slowly drifts away,
Can you beat it?

My train is off its tracks,
The world is slowing down,
Nothing is going right,
My plans tumble to the ground

My eyes are spinning,
From around the world to another,
Can you see it?

My pain is still there,
My world is falling,
The ones I love are calling,
But there's no one around,
Am I blind to it all,
Do I threaten it all?
Do I trust myself?
to cover it all,
Do I think I'm insane,
Am I losing my mind,

Someone help me,
Please help me,
I can't stand it all,
Let me out from these walls...
review please, pretty please.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on September 13, 2006, 10:59:58 PM
Very Watersian. Very good.

MY NAME IS CAPITALISM

I went to high school
Didn't do a thing
Graduated with honors
For "valley something"
I went to college
'Cause my daddy's got powers
Beyond my comprehension
Just like addition

My name is capitalism
And my life is good
My name is capitalism
Don't care, don't know why I should
My name is capitalism
Was born with a silver spoon in my mouth
My name is capitalism
What are the poor whining about?

I got a pretty wife
Who don't think for herself
And pretty little kids
Who know everyone else is going to hell
And I assume socialism
Means a fascist state
And I gotta ditch my wife
'Cause tonight I got a hot, 16 year old date!

My name is capitalism
And life is fine
My name is capitalism
And all I want is mine
My name is capitalsim
All you need is love?
My name is capitalism
And that a'int enough!

My name is capitalism
And life is great
My name is capitalism
This was my fate
My name is capitalism
And you're a failure
My name is capitalism
Who cares about talent? Rot in your trailer!

solo

My name is capitalism!
For Marx!
My name is capitalism!
For Lenin!
My name is capitalism!
For Castro!
My name is capitalsim!
One more time!

My name is capitalism!
With feeling!
My name is capitalism!
For all the Republicans!
My name is capitalsim!
I thrive on sin!
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Mairi on September 14, 2006, 11:51:18 AM
Quote from: 18
Isn't that disgusting? I mean, it's just, I don't understand it. Women are being raped in essence, on screen. And they are being told from the guy in the camera, whom usually seduced them and whom they are madly in love with, "Smile. Love it." It's basically, "Let's turn women into objects. Let's make them these unfeeling things that we can do whatever the f*** we want to. No! Wait! Let's do that on CAMERA and then SELL it to every man in the world! No! Wait! Let's do that, only then, let's make women who won't be objectified feel like they're not good enough, and then they'll do whatever we want!" I don't understand it. I try to explain to my friends (who are for the most part, good guys), that pornography is like taking a pretty young girl and doing the most vile, disgusting thing imaginable. And they say, "Well, it's just sex". Well, not really. The reason men love porn is because it shows them that they have a power over women physically, which they do. That power: That no matter WHAT, if a girl is getting f***ed. They are getting f***ed. No matter how uncomfortable they are made by it. It's phychological. And they say "Well, it's not like I love the girl, so what's the problem?" too which I reply "Exactly. If you loved a girl would you really want to think about her degrading herself and sucking cock and doing everything imaginable? I would hope not. I would hope if you loved a girl you would want your sex life to reflect that." My punk band's very name EVW (Electric girl privatel Wound) is, in itself, a statement on pornography.


Have youe ever heard of Linda Lovelace? She was the woman who starred in the infamous porn movie, Deep Throat. Yeras later she became a crusader against pornography. And that is exactly what she said, "Every time someone watches that film they are watching me beig raped."
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on September 14, 2006, 09:06:52 PM
Quote from: 218

Have youe ever heard of Linda Lovelace? She was the woman who starred in the infamous porn movie, Deep Throat. Yeras later she became a crusader against pornography. And that is exactly what she said, "Every time someone watches that film they are watching me beig raped."

I have read a lot on Lovelace, and honestly, I don't know how much I trust her. She wrote four autobiographies. Film critic Joe Bob Briggs (very liberal) said that well there is little doubt pornography is wrong, Lovelace was kind of a liar all round. You don't really know how much of what she was saying was true because, even after her and Chuck Traynor seperated she claimed in her first two books she LOVED being involved in pornography, so it's doubtful she was being intimidated. Briggs, in his book Profoundly Disturbing: Shocking Movies That Changed History, "In the end, neither story holds up. In the end, she was just a scared little girl who needed the attention of men." I have much more respect for Marilyn Chambers, as she seems more legitimate in her crusades.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Mairi on September 15, 2006, 11:57:28 AM
Interesting, I have never heard this before. You obviously know a lot more about this than me. Though I can't see why anyone would love being involved with pornography.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on September 16, 2006, 04:10:11 PM
Quote from: 218
Interesting, I have never heard this before. You obviously know a lot more about this than me. Though I can't see why anyone would love being involved with pornography.

Well, her first two autobiographies take kind of a "free love" hippie thing to them, whereas her last two are filled with horror stories. Personal, I think she was being manipulated when she wrote all of them. The first two by men who convinced her they loved her and what she was doing was right, the last two by self-important feminazis looking to destroy any form of expression they don't agree with. You could never (and should never) censor pornography. Many pornographers fancy themselves artists, and art is in the eye of the beholder.
My attempt at an early style Beatles song.

(I WON'T LET) YOU (LET GO OF ME)

I know you want to leave
You think he really needs you
I know I can be mean
But, baby, you know my love is true
I know he's a smooth talker
And he looks might fine
But you know he wants you for tonight
I want you to be forever mine

I won't let you let go of me
At least not 'til you can see
You may find a better looker
But I could show you where he took 'er
And told her what he'll tell you tonight
That he'd always be true
That he'll make everything in your life alright
Baby, you know it's the truth
You're the one for me
I'm the one for you

You say I'm a bit arrogant
But on this Bible I swear it
I never would do anything
To hurt you
And you know I know his game
He says you make him insane
Looks into your eyes
Tells you he'll be forever yours
And all those pretty boy lies
I won't let you let go of me
At least not 'til you can see
You may find a better looker
But I could show you where he took 'er
And told her what he'll tell you tonight
That he'll always be true
That he'll make everything in your life alright
Baby, you know it's the truth
You're the one for me
I'm the one for you

I won't let you let go of me
No, I won't let you let go of me
Oh, I won't let you let go of me
No, I won't!

I won't let you let go of me
I won't let you let go of me
I know what he really wants to do
And you know I'll always let you be true
And I guess if you really want to leave
There's nothing I can do

I won't let you let go of me
At least not 'til you can see
You may find a better looker
But I could show you where he took 'er
And told her what he'll tell you tonight
That he'll always be true
That he'll make everything in your life alright
Baby, you know it's the truth
You're the one for me
I'm the one for you

Review please

Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Mairi on September 16, 2006, 04:49:28 PM
Aw, that's sweet. You have some good rhymes. It really does remind me of an early Beatles song, how does the musical arrangement go? It should be 3  minutes with 3 chords. :)
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on September 16, 2006, 06:05:34 PM
Quote from: 218
Aw, that's sweet. You have some good rhymes. It really does remind me of an early Beatles song, how does the musical arrangement go? It should be 3  minutes with 3 chords. :)

It is, actually.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Mairi on September 16, 2006, 10:08:42 PM
Hah! AWESOME!

This a dumb song of mine, which I call "Sorry"

Sorry for being a virgin
Sorry I'm not a slut
Sorry for never being right about anything
Sorry I don't give a f***
Sorry for having an opinion
Sorry for speaking my mind
Sorry for not being the kind of girl
That you'd want to 69
Sorry I'm not a princess
Sorry I'm not a queen
Sorry I'm not as pretty as the girls
In your glossy magazines
Sorry for being a b****
Sorry for telling the truth
Sorry for giving the kind of advice
That I know you'd never use
Sorry for being a "hippie"
Sorry for not smoking weed
Sorry for being so clueless
As to what you really need
Sorry for not making any sense,
Sorry for being confusing
Sorry for being strange and annoying
Sorry for always losing
Sorry for writing this stupid song,
Sorry for making it rhyme
Sorry it isn't longer
But I didn't have the time
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on September 17, 2006, 01:22:08 AM
not bad, if you have the right tune and sound, it should be good.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on September 17, 2006, 01:40:12 AM
Quote from: 218
Hah! AWESOME!

This a dumb song of mine, which I call "Sorry"

Sorry for being a virgin
Sorry I'm not a slut
Sorry for never being right about anything
Sorry I don't give a f***
Sorry for having an opinion
Sorry for speaking my mind
Sorry for not being the kind of girl
That you'd want to 69
Sorry I'm not a princess
Sorry I'm not a queen
Sorry I'm not as pretty as the girls
In your glossy magazines
Sorry for being a b****
Sorry for telling the truth
Sorry for giving the kind of advice
That I know you'd never use
Sorry for being a "hippie"
Sorry for not smoking weed
Sorry for being so clueless
As to what you really need
Sorry for not making any sense,
Sorry for being confusing
Sorry for being strange and annoying
Sorry for always losing
Sorry for writing this stupid song,
Sorry for making it rhyme
Sorry it isn't longer
But I didn't have the time
I know this probably isn't your bag, but that would make a good punk song. Lot's of great all-girl punk bands if you learn to look.

Hey, all the poets are online! Let's put flowers in our hair and get our guitars and gather around and sing Blowing In The Wind!
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on September 17, 2006, 01:44:37 AM
STONE

The raindrop drips around the stone
Entering into the unknown
You hold the paper thin slice of a mind high
Entering into the sky
Down below
Do you know,
What is false
What is real?
Why you feel,
The way you do,
And why you do,
The things you do?
The answer is, frankly,
No
You do them because it's all you know
But when your mind is changed by a simple stone
Memories will be forgotten
The future will be irrelevant
Your mind's past knowledge will be shot and
A greater power will pull you in

The raindrop drips around the stone
And you cry
Your life's a lie
And you still cannot admit
What you once knew you now know is bullsh*t
And you hold the dream
Though you know it's not true
Lying to yourself once more
Keeping yourself from opening the door
Have the courage to see for yourself
There's more to afterlife than Heaven, Hell
Pain is alternate,
Passion is sweet
You are awakened from your skull to your feet
You feel the thunder crashing
Pulling down your mind
The lies of the past flashing
You leave them behind

The raindrop drips around the stone
Just one final time
The raindrop drips around the stone
Wondering will you be mine
And the sun and the moon and the sky and the pain
That you feel make you feel so insane
And orgasm comes at the thought of truth
Because in the past a lie is all you ever knew
And death rides a silver horse
And all of life rides on a wave of lies
And all the human's are much smaller by the universe
Then our own flies
And you scurry back beneath the shadows
Where the lies of the past comfort you
And you lie to yourself saying they are true
Until you believe it once again
And I have lost you
But perhaps it is for the best
As you are happiest in bliss

Review please.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Mairi on September 17, 2006, 01:47:44 AM
That's a very lyrically strong song. I'm heavily into metaphors in my writing, so I like yours, especially these lines...

Pain is alternate,
Passion is sweet
You are awakened from your skull to your feet
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Mairi on September 17, 2006, 02:16:39 AM
Who Are You Fighting For?

Who are you fighting for?
Is it your leader?
The one best known
As a liar and a cheater?
Who are you fighting for?
Is it your land?
The one overtaken
By the military man?
Who are you fighting for?
Is it a child?
The one left in the streets
While you're out running wild?
Who are you fighting for?
Answer me this
Without using guns or weapons or fists
Tell it to me straight
And look me in the eye
I knw you're not sorry
So please don't lie
Who are you fighting for?
Would they fight for you
Do you really believe
In the things that you do?
Who are you fighting for?
And who are you against?
Are they still the enemy
If you never see their face?
Is it only a tragedy
If it happens to your kind?
Your rose coloured glasses
Are making you blind
But answer me one question
That these people you're fighting
Aren't like me and you?
What are you fighting for?
What drives you to kill?
Do you do it from obligation
Or your own free will?
Will you berate and ostracize me
Because I'm not on your side?
Do you really think it's normal
that a mother has to hide
Her children from the killing
Right outside her door?
Or do you think it's perfect
And that there should be more?
Who are you fighting for?
Who are you fighting for?
Who are you fighting for?
(repeat and fade out)
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on September 17, 2006, 02:59:15 AM
Quote from: 218
That's a very lyrically strong song. I'm heavily into metaphors in my writing, so I like yours, especially these lines...

Pain is alternate,
Passion is sweet
You are awakened from your skull to your feet

I never liked that line. To self-indulgent (my band is named Painful Passion), but thank you.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Mairi on September 17, 2006, 03:20:49 AM
I always wanted to write a sultry song, like, "The Look of Love" or something, but I just can't do it. Every time I try it just ends up sounding wrong.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on September 17, 2006, 03:33:19 AM
She slid across the wall
A ghostly appirition of beauty
Though she'll never see
And she was content to wear the crown of flowers I made for her
And I was content in what I deserved, to wear the crown of thorns
She fashioned for me
Though she will claim they were not for me,
And that she does not think I deserve them
We both know I am the villain inside
And sometimes when she asks me I can't decide
And sometimes you remember
And sometimes I forget
But I don't want to wake up just yet
'Cause this dream that we're living
It's so much more forgiving
Than the reality you crave
And when I touch your skin
I feel racked with sin
And you laugh
And I laugh on the surface but inside I cry
'Cause I know I ruined you
And I want just to die
But you seem to think that you gave yourself to me
And you think I deserve you,
And it makes me frantic
That you can't realize that I took advantage of you
And she gazes at me through those deep yellow eyes
And near in the distance a raven cries
And she's sure she's not as beautiful as she is
And why is it she can't see
The same thing that I see
And why is it she thinks I lie
When I say I'm sorry
And when will she realize
Just what is happening
Between her and me
And all that I see in our future
And all she doesn't know of our past
And all I can never confess to
Because I don't want to cause you distress
Please rest your eyes and float up to the skies Lennon sang of
Where rocking horse people eat marshmallow pies and you can love
And you can live the lie
And I'll let you live it
And I'll sit by
And you will forgive
Never knowing the truth
'Cause I'll never tell you
And the more I keep it a secret
The happier you are
And the happier you are
The more you desrerve the truth
And the more you deserve it
The more you crave it
And the more you crave it the ruder you get
And the ruder you get the cuter you get
And the cuter you get then the more we have sex
And the more we have sex
You lose my respect
And it gets easier to lie every time.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Mairi on September 18, 2006, 09:43:18 PM
That is a very sad song. What inspired you to write this?
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on September 18, 2006, 11:08:55 PM
Quote from: 218
That is a very sad song. What inspired you to write this?

The first three lines from Thunder Road by Springsteen, the next two from all those pretty girls in the 60s with flowers in their hair, the rest just came there.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on September 25, 2006, 01:38:01 AM
Long ago,
when we were young
I joked around,
fooled around,
Its been so very long,

I travel around my mind,
searching for my answer,
I can't seem to find it,
I can't seem to help it,
I'm consumed by my desire,

1000 degrees,
my fire burned,
Waned only by a glimpse,
of reality,

long after,
I held your picture,
Your hand held mine,
and as I stared into those eyes,
my spine went cold,
from the fire within,

you showed me the light,
you asked my name,
from then on I know I was f***ed,
the black widow had spun her web,
the black widow crept into my head,

and I fought,
I fought to stay away,
but I found myself,
next to you in bed,

you tormentted me,
you kicked me around,
I was ashamed of myself,
I was ashamed of you,

long after,
I tore you picture,
you tore mine,
and as I realized what I had done,
The fire was out, I was numb

you broke my sense of reality,
you became a drain on me,
on society,
from then on I was lost,
I had fallen for your trap,
I had fallen from my perch,

and I ran,
I ran to get away,
But I found you everywhere,
And I couldn't get away,

you were there in my mind,
You were there in front of me,
I wanted you,
I wanted you to stay away,

long after,
I walked away from you,
you walked away from me,
a sense of relief came over me,
a sense of grief fell over me,

The fire was out, and I was numb...
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Mairi on September 27, 2006, 07:56:08 PM
A little something I whipped up. I don't know if it constitues as a parody. You be the judge.

You're So Lame

You walked into the classroom
Like you were walking into a zoo
Your shoes were the finest that money could buy
Your jeans were designer, too
You had one eye out the window
And you think that you're so cool
But I think that you're just an a**hole, you're just an a**hole
And...

You're so lame
You probably think this song is about you
You're so lame
I'll bet you think this song is about you,
Don't you? Don't you?

Well I met you several years ago
I believe it was in grade five
And after having known you all of these years
I don't know how I'm still alive
You're selfish, rude and boorish and
I leave when you arrive
So why don't you go f*** off? Why don't you go f*** off?

You're so lame
You probably think this song is about you
You're so lame
I'll bet you think this song is about you,
Don't you? Don't you?

You're such an a**hole
So why don't you go f*** off? Why don't you go f*** off?

You're so lame
You probably think this song is about you
You're so lame
I'll bet you think this song is about you,
Don't you? Don't you?

Well I here you went to the office again
Cause you were shooting your mouth off in class
I have to say I'm not really surprised
Seeing as how you're an ass
Well you're always getting stoned and drunk
And I wish that you'd just crash
Because you need a lesson, you need a lesson and...

You're so lame
You probably think this song is about you
You're so lame
I'll bet you think this song is about you,
Don't you? Don't you?


Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: on September 27, 2006, 08:10:28 PM
haha love it mairi, reminds me of Frank Zappa's 'bobby brown', if you know it.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Mairi on September 27, 2006, 08:16:23 PM
btw somedude, I think your song would be better if it was shorter. It's nice, but just a little too long.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on September 29, 2006, 10:42:14 PM
Quote from: 218
That is a very sad song. What inspired you to write this?

You didn't think it was autobiographical, did you? I'm not nearly good enough to get "an apparition of beauty".
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Indica on October 05, 2006, 11:43:06 PM
Quote from: 218
Who Are You Fighting For?

Who are you fighting for?
Is it your leader?
The one best known
As a liar and a cheater?
Who are you fighting for?
Is it your land?
The one overtaken
By the military man?
Who are you fighting for?
Is it a child?
The one left in the streets
While you're out running wild?
Who are you fighting for?
Answer me this
Without using guns or weapons or fists
Tell it to me straight
And look me in the eye
I knw you're not sorry
So please don't lie
Who are you fighting for?
Would they fight for you
Do you really believe
In the things that you do?
Who are you fighting for?
And who are you against?
Are they still the enemy
If you never see their face?
Is it only a tragedy
If it happens to your kind?
Your rose coloured glasses
Are making you blind
But answer me one question
That these people you're fighting
Aren't like me and you?
What are you fighting for?
What drives you to kill?
Do you do it from obligation
Or your own free will?
Will you berate and ostracize me
Because I'm not on your side?
Do you really think it's normal
that a mother has to hide
Her children from the killing
Right outside her door?
Or do you think it's perfect
And that there should be more?
Who are you fighting for?
Who are you fighting for?
Who are you fighting for?
(repeat and fade out)


I liked the simplicty of the description yet contrasted with the overall message. To me it could signify a number of things; goverment, terrorism, organised religion etc.

Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Mairi on October 06, 2006, 12:52:01 PM
Wow, thank you! I usually don't write social commentary songs because I find my writing style is too literal, but that makes me feel better...
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on November 21, 2006, 11:16:12 PM
Quote from: 158


I liked the simplicty of the description yet contrasted with the overall message. To me it could signify a number of things; goverment, terrorism, organised religion etc.


I agree. As a hardcore punk performer and writer, I have this kind of obsession with political music..

GIVE IT A TRY
Another name for you to forsake
Another way for you to pass the blame
Another lie revealed in your eye
Cheered on by those about to die

Give it a try!
Take a stand for what is right!
Fight and die for the rights of your brother man tonight!
It's not too late to rectify your mistake!
This doesn't have to be our fate!

Don't even bother asking
"Why must we live in fear?"
Because all you ever did was cry!
The answer is quite clear!
Fire falls like hail from the sky
And all you can do is hang your head down and sigh!

Give it a try!
Take a stand for what is right!
Fight and die for the rights of your brother man tonight!
It's not too late to rectify your mistake!
This doesn't have to be our fate!

Take your children and go to the mall
Get some toys for the girls and boys
Teach them how they should be
A GI Joe and a Barbie doll
So they know what to do
When the country sounds the next battle call

Give it a try!
Take a stand for what is right!
Fight and die for the rights of your brother man tonight!
It's not too late to rectify your mistake!
This doesn't have to be our fate!
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on November 22, 2006, 07:45:47 PM
Review please.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: on November 22, 2006, 08:09:34 PM
Very nice!! sounds like a cross between Bob Marley's lyrics (like get up stand up, if you know what i mean), and rage against the machine...from the lyrics anyway. Would go well with some Ska beats, loud bass ect. Would do well at a political event, especially for something like a global warming one! 8) well done, to everyone. I love your first verse especially, reminds me of bush like.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on November 22, 2006, 09:38:03 PM
Quote from: 197
Very nice!! sounds like a cross between Bob Marley's lyrics (like get up stand up, if you know what i mean), and rage against the machine...from the lyrics anyway. Would go well with some Ska beats, loud bass ect. Would do well at a political event, especially for something like a global warming one! 8) well done, to everyone. I love your first verse especially, reminds me of bush like.

Well, I was thinking of Bush when I wrote it, but the listener can percieve it however he or she chooses. Most of my punk songs are much more direct. Musically, I suppose it's comparable to The Circle Jerks or Black Flag. As soon as we record the demo I'll post it.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on November 25, 2006, 09:41:13 PM
I AM THE AMERICAN

We are the great America
With our great weapons
We are the great America
And I am the American

Come over here little Iraqi girl...
Let me show you 'round
This is the prison, and this is the bed, and you'll do what I say or end up dead

See this thing right here?
Put it in your mouth.
See these things right here
Well, forget about 'em
There mine now

See those people over there?
Not too hard to see.
Remember when you begged and pleaded
For me not to take your family?
Well you're dead with your mommie and everyone else
After I have my fun
You weren't the first and you won't be the last one

You're just a sandmonkey and I'm an American
You will be missed by no one...
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on November 26, 2006, 01:19:11 AM
Review please.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: pc31 on November 26, 2006, 04:28:28 AM
i think you're an idiot!!!and you are not just writing a protest song but condemning a whole nation....i think you have crossed a serious line here and i hope you die violently and needlessly...
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on November 26, 2006, 05:19:34 AM
Quote from: 284
i think you're an idiot!!!and you are not just writing a protest song but condemning a whole nation....i think you have crossed a serious line here and i hope you die violently and needlessly...

No, that wasn't what it meant at all. It was a protest on the specific phenomenon of military personnel doing harm upon civilians. It wasn't saying that all Americans or all soldiers were like that at all, I was just talking about the mentally which makes actions come about, that many Americans seem to have, though certainly rarely to that extreme, that mentality being We're American and therefore more important then others who are not.

I think you'r taking it a bit to literally.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: pc31 on November 26, 2006, 05:48:39 AM
american describes a nation not a select few.......how do you think these kids parents feel that their kids are needlessly dying in a war that noone understands nor supports???they are soldiers who were brought up believing that defending your country is an honor....but somewhere some how they were duped...if this war  doesn't kill enlistment numbers i'll be surprised....this war is a tragic blow to our unity and will ultimately be bushs' worst nightmare...a soldiers first duty is to follow orders...but these are kids who are scared and shabbily trained and have no idea who the enemy are...
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on November 26, 2006, 05:59:46 AM
Quote from: 284
american describes a nation not a select few.......how do you think these kids parents feel that their kids are needlessly dying in a war that noone understands nor supports???they are soldiers who were brought up believing that defending your country is an honor....but somewhere some how they were duped...if this war  doesn't kill enlistment numbers i'll be surprised....this war is a tragic blow to our unity and will ultimately be bushs' worst nightmare...a soldiers first duty is to follow orders...but these are kids who are scared and shabbily trained and have no idea who the enemy are...

Yes, so what are we disagreeing on? I mean, the training process is a dehumanization, and it is what confuses a soldier, and leads to the type of violence I'm protesting in the song.

So for what to I deserve to die?
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on November 26, 2006, 08:33:31 PM
Oh, and just for the record, I wrote that song after hearing about a news report about that very thing, and then going on the internet to study it more thoroughly. I'm not just making sh*t up, nor am I attacking soldiers in general. Don't tell me it doesn't happen.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Mairi on November 26, 2006, 08:49:14 PM
Mmm, I liked your first song better. I like this different POV in songwriting but I didn't like the lyrics in the second one. Not the subject matter, but the words you chose. Anyway that's just me.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Joost on November 27, 2006, 10:20:04 AM
It still amazes me how much I suck at writing lyrics. One good verse is not much of a problem, but usually that's where it ends. I somehow always end up throwing in dozens of metaphores even though I hate lyrics with metaphores. There are actually just two kinds of lyrics that I like - the really direct ones that you can take literally and the type of lyrics Van Dyke Parks writes (very abstract, don't mean anything whatsoever, just meant to create an athmosphere). But unfortionately I just can't write those types of lyrics... I've got like 30-40 instrumental songs lying around and just 2 or 3 lyrics that are halfway decent... Very frustrating.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Mairi on November 27, 2006, 02:25:20 PM
Why don't you like metaphors? I love them. I hate any of my songs that are too obvious or don't use metaphors.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: BlueMeanie on November 27, 2006, 08:20:52 PM
Quote from: 18

No, that wasn't what it meant at all. It was a protest on the specific phenomenon of military personnel doing harm upon civilians. It wasn't saying that all Americans or all soldiers were like that at all, I was just talking about the mentally which makes actions come about, that many Americans seem to have, though certainly rarely to that extreme, that mentality being We're American and therefore more important then others who are not.

I think you'r taking it a bit to literally.

But the song isn't clever enough to put that point across is it?

The trouble with lyrics that contain a serious message is that you have to make sure that they're not missinterpreted.

Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on November 27, 2006, 10:40:44 PM
Quote from: 483

But the song isn't clever enough to put that point across is it?

The trouble with lyrics that contain a serious message is that you have to make sure that they're not missinterpreted.


I agree completely.

The thing is, when lyrics are misinterpreted, people have a tendency to want to blame the writer.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: BlueMeanie on November 28, 2006, 02:10:28 PM
Quote from: 18

I agree completely.

The thing is, when lyrics are misinterpreted, people have a tendency to want to blame the writer.

Fair point, but you have to remember that the average listener/reader is probably going to missinterpret to at least some degree, even the simplest of lyrics. With a serious message I think it's important to make sure the message can be understood.

Could get you into big sh*t otherwise.

Just my opinion.

Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: on November 30, 2006, 07:24:59 PM
i think wayne needs to get his ass on this thread :D
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on November 30, 2006, 08:15:34 PM
wow, man did i miss a sh*tload

"I used to be a commie"

Oh I used to be a commie,
Back in 1952,
When McCarthy was the man,
That turned the place into a zoo,

Oh I never read a book,
Or heard of Mr. Marx,
And still I told Congress,
To shove it up their arse,

Oh I wish I was a commie,
Joining the pink or yellow horde,
And ride around town as they say,
"Well ain't just that absurd,"

Oh Mary Lou and Joey Peel,
Got arrested late that night,
Cause someone said they're commies
They didn't put up a fight

Oh I never read a book,
Or heard of Mr. Marx,
And still I told Congress,
To shove it up their arse
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on November 30, 2006, 08:18:40 PM
"no real title"

One of my generation
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Post by: somedude210 on November 30, 2006, 08:20:18 PM
"broken mind"

As I look upon your weary eyes,
So soft and brittle,
It comes to me as no surprise,
To see your fragile life cut short,
You still act like normal,
But I know its not you,

Others still think you
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on November 30, 2006, 08:22:42 PM
"Say Goodbye Deadman"

I can't believe the words I heard today,
Try as they might, it just wouldn't go away,
She broke up with me without a care,
I guess this is the cross that I bear,

Well it's Goodbye,
Say goodbye, deadman,
She's got other plans,
So say goodbye, deadman,
Say goodbye, Say goodbye,

I can't understand what happened today,
If only it happened some other day,
Why did this happen to me?
I may be blind, but at least I can see,

Well it's Goodbye,
Say goodbye, deadman,
She's got other plans,
So say goodbye, deadman,
Say goodbye, Say goodbye,

Democracy and communism unite,
Band together for the individual right,
Remember what you came here for,
Don't write crap songs that makes your life a bore.

Well it's Goodbye,
Say goodbye, deadman,
She's got other plans,
So say goodbye, deadman,
Say goodbye, Say goodbye,

What the hell is wrong in the world?
Can't people find mess like this absurd?
You really want to be a tool?
Think this song is good and drop out of school,

Well it's Goodbye,
Say goodbye, deadman,
She's got other plans,
So say goodbye, deadman,
Say goodbye,
Say goodbye,
Deaaaaaaaadman...
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on November 30, 2006, 10:39:20 PM
Quote from: 343
wow, man did i miss a sh*tload

"I used to be a commie"

Oh I used to be a commie,
Back in 1952,
When McCarthy was the man,
That turned the place into a zoo,

Oh I never read a book,
Or heard of Mr. Marx,
And still I told Congress,
To shove it up their arse,

Oh I wish I was a commie,
Joining the pink or yellow horde,
And ride around town as they say,
"Well ain't just that absurd,"

Oh Mary Lou and Joey Peel,
Got arrested late that night,
Cause someone said they're commies
They didn't put up a fight

Oh I never read a book,
Or heard of Mr. Marx,
And still I told Congress,
To shove it up their arse

It's about John Lydon, isn't it? I love me some Karl, by the way!
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on December 01, 2006, 01:27:07 AM
hahaha, no we were studying McCarthyism last year when i came up with this. happy little tune ;D
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on December 02, 2006, 01:50:24 AM
Quote from: 343
hahaha, no we were studying McCarthyism last year when i came up with this. happy little tune ;D

Just curious, what's your personal stance on Communism? I actually have SEVERAL songs about it (punk band, dontchya know), one of which I posted.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on December 02, 2006, 01:53:46 AM
Here's one of em...

Retro McCarthyism

Commie hunting is so pre-1990
But it appears it's coming back in style
To condemn people for how they think
They love him in Grande Chute
I been there they a'int got much else
Bullsh*t town, nothing to do
59 years behind the rest of us all

Senator,
Senator,
We're so proud of you back home in Wisconsin
'Cause we have so little to be proud of
There's you and the hamburger and that's about it

It's a brand new Red Scare
Enough bullsh*t propaganda to make you sh*t your underwear

When a Communist government implants itself in a new country it's a "takeover"
But when it's Capitalists that do it it's a "liberation"

You retro-Mycarthyists can all suck my cock!
Now good night, and good luck!
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on December 02, 2006, 02:16:27 AM
I dont mind communism as a theory but since its never worked in practice. i dont like most communist countries. but then again, im not really fond of our government.

not a bad song, definately want to hear yours and mine to music...i sense album project! ;D

how are my others? besides being a commie bastard :P
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Mairi on December 02, 2006, 03:11:08 AM
I really like both of the Communism songs! I can see them being hits! :)
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on December 04, 2006, 03:45:46 AM
I've got plenty of songs about Communism, including one on paper I'll type up sometime called "Commie Princess", though it occurred to me well writing it that's not possible, because Communism and monarchy clash.

American Nightmare

Your American dream never died
Because it never really lived
Except, that is, within the minds of you Republicans
The Color's of the USA
Are red, white, and blue you say
But in reality it's many shades of grey

The American Nightmare
Where all are right and all is fair
You wanna fight it? How dare you!
You must be a terrorist!
Speak no more!
Or we'll grind you into soup and serve you to the poor!

You say it died with Kennedys
Between Lee Harvey's eyes
But just like Kennedys from the beginning it was just a disguise
So I guess the real question is this
How can something die that never lived?
Is there something I fail to see in this?
Wait! I understand!
The American dream is a fetus, right?!

The American Nightmare
Where all are right and all is fair
You wanna fight it? How dare you!
You must be a terrorist!
Speak no more!
Or we'll grind you into soup and serve you to the poor!

Don't you find it rather odd
You live your life by a long dead facade
The real tragedy, you see
Is not that it never lived
But that there are things you could do
To make it a reality if you really wanted to!

The American Nightmare
Where all are right and all is fair
You wanna fight it? How dare you!
You must be a terrorist!
Speak no more!
Or we'll grind you into soup and serve you to the poor!
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on December 04, 2006, 03:47:32 AM
Quote from: 343
I dont mind communism as a theory but since its never worked in practice. i dont like most communist countries. but then again, im not really fond of our government.

not a bad song, definately want to hear yours and mine to music...i sense album project! ;D

how are my others? besides being a commie bastard :P

Imagine being a Commie and living where I am--Wisconsin? They LOVE McCarthy here! It's sickening!
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Kevin on December 04, 2006, 11:12:29 AM
Don't people write love songs anymore?
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on December 04, 2006, 07:30:18 PM
hahaha, tried it once and fell outta love. ;D
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on December 04, 2006, 07:33:24 PM
heres a love song for kevin...which i think i posted before, oh well, i lost track


If there
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: BlueMeanie on December 04, 2006, 08:58:30 PM
Quote from: 185
Don't people write love songs anymore?

All of mine were confiscated by the KGB.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on December 04, 2006, 10:29:30 PM
Quote from: 185
Don't people write love songs anymore?

Used to. I imagine when I fall in love they'll come back.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Mairi on December 05, 2006, 02:14:45 AM
I write unrequited love songs. But at the moment, I'm working on a tribute to Ronnie Spector. You can write a tribute to someone who's not dead, can't you?
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on December 05, 2006, 02:20:06 AM
dont know any rules against it....so of course its wrong!! ;D
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: BlueMeanie on December 06, 2006, 08:50:27 PM
Quote from: 218
I write unrequited love songs. But at the moment, I'm working on a tribute to Ronnie Spector. You can write a tribute to someone who's not dead, can't you?

I suppose so. But if someone wrote one for me I'd start getting worried!
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Mairi on December 06, 2006, 10:56:27 PM
Okay, so here's that Ronnie Spector tribute song!

Veronica Bennett

(starts off with 'Be My Baby' drum intro)

Her name is Veronica Bennett
But that's really not her name
She says she's the Bad Girl
But it's really just the same
But I know what she means
She's not hard to understand
I hope Ronnie Spector realizes
I'm her biggest fan

(chorus)
Hey there Veronica Bennett
Sing us another song
Sing it to us and then it
Will prove to us we weren't wrong

The patron saint of rock and roll
Everyone knows it's true
Johnny Thunders and Joey Ramone'
Brian Wilson knows it too
That voice will redeem us all
It will bring us to our knees
So please perform another number
"Be My Baby" if you please

(chorus)

Oh you know she's everyone's favorite
'Cause she likes walking in the rain
Too bad someone out there
Had to cause her so much pain
But Ronnie the Rocker can cure us all
With that voice of hers, oh
I find everything's just a ball!

(chorus)

I tried to send her a letter
But I couldn't find her address
I tried to crash her Christmas party
You see, I wasn't a guest
I guess I'll never get to tell her
Face to face, just how cool she is
When I listen to that bad angel sing
It's absolutely perfect bliss

(chorus X2)

Whoa, whoa, whoa, whoa
So come on and...
Whoa, whoa, whoa, whoa
So come on and...
Whoa, whoa, whoa,
So some on and
(cymbal crash)
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on December 14, 2006, 12:06:15 AM
Out of boredom, I made a list of all the songs I've written which directly relate to Communism (anti-Capitalism or small references to socialism in songs don't count).

RIP Cuba--First song I ever wrote specifically for EVW. I was expecting Castro to die around the time I wrote it. The resilent old bastard pulled through, though (for now, at least), throwing a monkey wrench in the whole program.

Marxism Or Maximum?--Directed at the fools who immediately associate "Communism" with "Wicked Evil Mass Murders". Yes, the majority of Communist rulers have been corrupted, but that is not Communism.

Retro-McCarthyism--I posted it. You guys know what it's about.

Communism Bouncy Ball--I see a lot of wannabe punks wearing sickle and hammer badges or red stars, not having ever read a book by Karl. I also saw a similiar item at Hot Topic. What's more Capitalist then that?

Commie Princess--A humorous song about being in love with a girl who is a Communist, the joke being that Communists oppose monarchy, therefore a "Communist princess" cannot exist, nor does such a woman as I describe.

Red Scare 2012--It's about revolution. Made to terrify die hard Capitalists.

Welfare Rising--Same as the above.

I Must Break You--Kind of a joke. Also about revolution, I quote The Russian from Rocky IV andm as a joke, the main hook is a punk version of the Rocky theme.

Ollie's A Pink-O--It's about comicbook superhero (ally to Batman), Green Arrow, who you can currently see on the TV show Smallville if you don't read comics.

Have You Heard Of Rosenberg?--About the Rosenberg trial.

Murder Mr. Monopoly!--Basically about the poor workers attacking their rich Capitalist bosses, in a humorous way.

You Are An Oppressed Proletariat--About how the working class in Capitalist countries are told they are free when they really are not, but since it's all they are taught from birth, they believe it and will not realize it until it is already too late to fight back.

Grannie Was A Socialist--My grandmother really is a Socialist, even though neither of my parents are.

The Betrayal--About Communist leaders who abuse the powers given to them by the rules of Communism, and actually take advantage of the working class rather then help them. Directed at Kim Jong-Il, referencing how Stalin betrayed the ideals of Lenin,

Punk's Not Dead (Punk Is Red)--An attack on the "Rock Against Communism" scene, made up of mainly neo-Nazi groups.

I realize most of you guys will disagree with this issue, I just thought it was interesting.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Joost on December 14, 2006, 01:07:53 PM
Quote from: 18
I realize most of you guys will disagree with this issue

I certainly do. Communism was nice in theory but is a disaster in practice. Communism doesn't work and never will.

Ever been to Cuba? Great place to visit, but trust me, you don't want to live there.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Joost on December 14, 2006, 01:09:45 PM
And who ever told you that 'punk is red'?
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Kevin on December 14, 2006, 02:21:18 PM
Quote from: 18

You Are An Oppressed Proletariat--About how the working class in Capitalist countries are told they are free when they really are not, but since it's all they are taught from birth, they believe it and will not realize it until it is already too late to fight back.


And  change your anti-capitalist titles to anti-communist, then try posting them on a website in a communist state, or hand out leaflets on a street corner and see how "free" you are.
Noone is totally free, but some are definately freer than others.
And at least us pro-capitalists need not rely on vague political theory or wishful thinking to back our case - we have the hard cold facts of history. I struggle to think of a functioning capitalist democracy that has had to build walls to keep its people in, or to deny their citizens the freedom of travel, or had them fleeing by the hundreds of thousands in stinking hulks from their workers paradise.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Joost on December 14, 2006, 02:50:03 PM
Quote from: 185

And  change your anti-capitalist titles to anti-communist, then try posting them on a website in a communist state, or hand out leaflets on a street corner and see how "free" you are.
Noone is totally free, but some are definately freer than others.

Exaxtly. I've been to Cuba last summer and asked a few Cubans that I met what they thought of Fidel or what they though would happen after his death. The reaction was pretty much the same every time: they'd look around if anyone could hear them, mumble something about not knowing what would happen after That Guy's death, and quickly change the subject.
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Post by: Joost on December 14, 2006, 02:51:32 PM
I liked the anti-Bush billboards there though.  :)
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Post by: GreenApple on December 14, 2006, 06:57:13 PM
I saw a BBC News report whiched showed that Cuba has an excellent health care system. It can't be all bad there. The system as it is actually requires it to look after their people's health needs after all. Hasn't the USA got sanctions on Cuba? If they were lifted, Cuba could do better. The very existence of Communist Cuba poses no threat to the USA. Don't get me wrong, I do believe in democracy.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: on December 14, 2006, 07:49:32 PM
i just wrote one called russian capatalist.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on December 14, 2006, 10:01:45 PM
Quote from: 185

And  change your anti-capitalist titles to anti-communist, then try posting them on a website in a communist state, or hand out leaflets on a street corner and see how "free" you are.
Noone is totally free, but some are definately freer than others.
And at least us pro-capitalists need not rely on vague political theory or wishful thinking to back our case - we have the hard cold facts of history. I struggle to think of a functioning capitalist democracy that has had to build walls to keep its people in, or to deny their citizens the freedom of travel, or had them fleeing by the hundreds of thousands in stinking hulks from their workers paradise.

It's all intended in a more exaggerated sense, not to be taken literally at all.

Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on December 14, 2006, 10:04:09 PM
Quote from: 56

Communism was nice in theory but is a disaster in practice. Communism doesn't work and never will.

I am fully aware of this. The thing is, it's more a way to try and change the pre-associations given to it, you know? I mean, Communism surely will not work, that's not what I'm trying to get to so much as to state that the theory, in it's approach, is something that is worth fighting for, even if futile.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on December 14, 2006, 10:05:45 PM
Quote from: 56
And who ever told you that 'punk is red'?

It's a joke. When the Adverts appropriated the term "Punk's Not Dead", it was later modified by neo-Nazi punk groups as "Punk's Not Red", and it's my attack more on that group then it is a pro-Communist piece.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on December 14, 2006, 10:13:25 PM
Quote from: 139
I saw a BBC News report whiched showed that Cuba has an excellent health care system. It can't be all bad there. The system as it is actually requires it to look after their people's health needs after all. Hasn't the USA got sanctions on Cuba? If they were lifted, Cuba could do better. The very existence of Communist Cuba poses no threat to the USA. Don't get me wrong, I do believe in democracy.

You are aware that there are Communist groups who have fought to implement Democracy into Communism from the beginning?

Okay, here we go on Cuba...

Pre-Stalinist Russia, run by Vladimaar Lenin, well quite aggressive against it's enemies, did have many benefits. It was with the entering of Joseph Stalin that the priveliges given to the government were abused. It was under this Soviet Union that the Cold War started.

When Fidel Castro led the rebels it was to overthrow an oppressive and violent dictator far worse then himself (though I'm not claiming modern Cuba as some sort of utopian fantasy by any means). The Soviet Union put launch pads onto Cuba. When asked about this, it was explained as a defense measure against a possible US attack, as in the Cold War the other side was as scared as we are. When bullied and intimidated, Castro felt even more-so that Capitalist governments were planning to do harm to Cuba, and upon the appearance of US spy plans over Cuba, opened fire, which is precisely what the US would do if a threatening craft was investigating us. As a retaliation to Castro's refusal to cooperate, there was the blockade, which contributed majorly (though admittedly far from entirely) to the stae of Cuba.

Communism isn't perfect, and I'm not going to pretend it is, but nor would I believe it is an entirely evil, wicked ideology which, at it's very core, is a slimey, disgusting group.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Joost on December 15, 2006, 12:08:59 AM
Quote from: 139
I saw a BBC News report whiched showed that Cuba has an excellent health care system. It can't be all bad there.

You're partially right. Every Cuban gets all the basic needs for free. Education (even the universities are free), health care (very good for South American standards), a fridge and enough food to live. But on the other hand: that's pretty much all you can ever get. Most people earn just 40 dollars a month. Even the doctors and scientists. You can't own a house cause the government owns the houses. You can't start your own business cause everything's owned by the government. And there's no freedom of speech. You can still get locked up or even killed for being against Fidel. You're not allowed to have internet or a DVD player at home. People are officially not even allowed to talk to tourists unless they work in the tourist industry. And the young Cubans are frustrated as hell. As long as Fidel's still alive they can't have any goals or ambitions.

Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Joost on December 15, 2006, 12:12:44 AM
Quote from: 18

It's all intended in a more exaggerated sense, not to be taken literally at all.


Problem is that most people won't understand that and think that you're seriously a radical. And if they think you're a radical they'll never even try to see your point or listen to your theories. You have to try to meet them somewhere in the middle. If you want to create a debate, you have to be more accessible.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on December 15, 2006, 12:59:16 AM
Well, I do sympathize with Marxism. I tend to explain it to people like this;

On an idealistic level, I call myself a Communist, or Authoritarian Socialist, as it is less commonly called. On a realistic level, I call myself a Socialist, in a less extreme sense.

If I ever felt there was a true possibility for a real Communist revolution as Karl Marx intended it, I would support it. But I realize that will (probably) never happen and even if it did, it would (definintley) eventually become corrupt.

Have I cleared myself up to your liking?
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: GreenApple on December 15, 2006, 02:23:21 PM
Quote from: 56

You're partially right. Every Cuban gets all the basic needs for free. Education (even the universities are free), health care (very good for South American standards), a fridge and enough food to live. But on the other hand: that's pretty much all you can ever get. Most people earn just 40 dollars a month. Even the doctors and scientists. You can't own a house cause the government owns the houses. You can't start your own business cause everything's owned by the government. And there's no freedom of speech. You can still get locked up or even killed for being against Fidel. You're not allowed to have internet or a DVD player at home. People are officially not even allowed to talk to tourists unless they work in the tourist industry. And the young Cubans are frustrated as hell. As long as Fidel's still alive they can't have any goals or ambitions.



I agree with everything you say. I'm just saying that socialism sets objectives for governments so they can at least claim that it is 'real' socialism. After saying that, education is not free in China. I don't believe in socialism any more. But, if the sanctions the USA have on Cuba were lifted, the people could have better lives. Why punish the people for the way the government is?
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Kevin on December 15, 2006, 02:29:27 PM
Quote from: 18

. As a retaliation to Castro's refusal to cooperate, there was the blockade, which contributed majorly (though admittedly far from entirely) to the stae of Cuba.


Just to balance the score sheet, let's not forget the Soviet invasions of Czechoslovakia and Hungary, both in order to crush fledging democratic movements.
Makes a little old blockade seem relatively harmless.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Kevin on December 15, 2006, 02:40:43 PM
Quote from: 139


 Why punish the people for the way the government is?

Aren't communist governments nothing but the people?  I thought that was the whole point of communism.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: GreenApple on December 15, 2006, 04:26:06 PM
Quote from: 185

Aren't communist governments nothing but the people?  I thought that was the whole point of communism.

Not true. Because it's a dictatorship, the Establishment there will look out for their selves even more than in a democracy. At least we can vote to sway what the powermongers do. The irony of Communism is that it can't work wholly for the people because it is always dictatorial. And, even if it were a democracy as we know it, the communists could be voted out of power and it wouldn't be Communism! This is why we in democracy are freer than them! I only said that in Communist countries it's not all bad.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: GreenApple on December 15, 2006, 04:28:22 PM
Quote from: 185

Just to balance the score sheet, let's not forget the Soviet invasions of Czechoslovakia and Hungary, both in order to crush fledging democratic movements.
Makes a little old blockade seem relatively harmless.

But two wrongs never make a right, and sanctions on Cuba are hurting the ordinary people while no doubt the people at the top are doing better because they monopolize the privileges as elites always do.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Kevin on December 15, 2006, 04:31:15 PM
Quote from: 139

But two wrongs never make a right,  

Agree totally. As I said, merely tryibg to balance the score sheet.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: GreenApple on December 15, 2006, 06:17:24 PM
Quote from: 185

Agree totally. As I said, merely tryibg to balance the score sheet.

Agreed. Stalin just perverted the whole Communist dream.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on December 15, 2006, 07:14:21 PM
Quote from: 185

Just to balance the score sheet, let's not forget the Soviet invasions of Czechoslovakia and Hungary, both in order to crush fledging democratic movements.
Makes a little old blockade seem relatively harmless.

I'm agreeing with you on this. As I stated, I recognize the fact that Communism has not worked, as well as that it is unlikely to ever. What I'm saying is, Communism in theory is what I believe in, and I support those who desire to start a government as it was intended, but I realize that such a utopia is not going to ever work. At least not unless a modern Communist philosopher is willing to update it. And therein lies the true problem, modern Communists do not wish to evolve past Leninism, even though Leninism was succeeded by Stalinism and thus rendered irrelevant.

Are we at a peace now? I didn't mean to start a fight or offend anyone. Sorry if I upset anyone.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: GreenApple on December 15, 2006, 07:56:03 PM
The question of whether Leninism led inevitably to Stalinist style dictatorship is a big issue for political theory. I think it was always a possibility that it would, considering that Lenin did advocate one-party rule, after all.

I think maybe what you're advocating, Council, is a kind of wishful thinking Communism, seperate from whether you can have a perfect society where in fact there is no democracy because of one-party rule. Where or when or has ever been a one-party state synonymous with freedom? Maybe what you believe in is on the same level as what I try to profess - Love & Peace (Check out my avatar). Practical only insofar as people really want it in their hearts. In a way, you could have true Communism if people believed in Love & Peace. But, the Marxists have always rejected such sentiments as 'bourgeois'. I think they're wrong, and such sentiments are human, not bourgeois as such.

And, of course, the Beatles were hardly bourgeois, but...All You Need Is Love, Imagine, Within You, Without You, Pipes Of Peace, etc.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on December 15, 2006, 08:50:03 PM
I'm not sure wheter I think Leninism lead to Stalinism inevitably or not. Certainly, Lenin set up many of the things that would later allow Stalin to do what he did, but I think that has more to do with the specific person (that person being Stalin). I believe my history teacher put it best, "For every one Lenin, there are 200 Stalins. What was the likelihood of Lenin being succeeded by another Lenin-type?"

Yes, it is wishful thinking, but I don't think that makes it completely worthless. The idea is, is a free Communism, as intended, worth fighting for, even if true victory as intended is unlikely? I think so, though I realize on a practical level it won't happen any time soon.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: BlueMeanie on December 16, 2006, 08:12:14 AM
Quote from: 18

It's all intended in a more exaggerated sense, not to be taken literally at all.


Why so obsessed then?
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: BlueMeanie on December 16, 2006, 08:13:43 AM
Quote from: 18

I am fully aware of this. The thing is, it's more a way to try and change the pre-associations given to it, you know? I mean, Communism surely will not work, that's not what I'm trying to get to so much as to state that the theory, in it's approach, is something that is worth fighting for, even if futile.

Why fight for something that's futile?

Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Kevin on December 16, 2006, 10:17:57 AM
Quote from: 18


Are we at a peace now? I didn't mean to start a fight or offend anyone. Sorry if I upset anyone.

Hey man I love these poltical discussions. as long as we all keep a level head it's all good fun. I'd be really bored if everyone agreed with me. I'd rather chat to someone with a different opinion to mine than someone with no opinion at all. So keep on with your pointless futile dreams. :)
As a youth I was an ardent socialist, but I've changed dramaticly (sp) with age. As I see it socialist/communist societies by nature require a high degree of government control over the the actions of its peoples. And the nature of the beast (governments, not communism) means that that control soon seeps into every aspect of your life. It's happening here in Britain, government trying to tell you what to eat, what to wear, when to shop, when the news should be on the telly. (also a long time ago I stopped expecting the world to be fair. And found that with this realisation it became a lot easier to handle (both on a personal and "bigger picture" level. I don't want to spend my life being angry. I roll with the punches now :))
I think I'm what's called a Libertarian. (small government, maximum rights to the individual)
I'm too old to howl at the moon anymore. Now I just try and bask in its glow.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Joost on December 16, 2006, 11:22:11 AM
Quote from: 185
(small government, maximum rights to the individual)

In a perfect world that would be great. But (and this might sound overtly pessimistic) unfortionately, humanity needs guidance because we simply have too many so called rotten apples among us.

Only problem is that the rottest apples usually end up being in charge...
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Kevin on December 16, 2006, 11:53:33 AM
Quote from: 56

In a perfect world that would be great. But (and this might sound overtly pessimistic) unfortionately, humanity needs guidance because we simply have too many so called rotten apples among us.

Only problem is that the rottest apples usually end up being in charge...

I'm not an anarchist. But I do believe that most people at the end of the day are decent folk who just want to get on. The good outnumber the bad. Most of us can be left to our own devices and be relied upon to do the right thing. And the law should come down hard on those who don't. I'm not one of these people that despair for the human race.
Laws are neccesary, but I'm very anti punishing victimless crime.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Joost on December 16, 2006, 02:15:12 PM
Quote from: 185
But I do believe that most people at the end of the day are decent folk who just want to get on. The good outnumber the bad. Most of us can be left to our own devices and be relied upon to do the right thing.

Couldn't agree more, but unfortionately there will always be rotten apples that ruin it for the decent people.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: GreenApple on December 16, 2006, 03:57:05 PM
What society needs is a set of moral codes and principles that are broad enough for anyone to agree with, and also so that they are not dogmatic. And, public profile champions such as music stars to publically espouse them to encourage other people to follow. That's possibly a way to reduce future numbers of bad apples and inculcate a better sense of community in society.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Mairi on December 16, 2006, 04:26:14 PM
At least with capitalism, people are free to make their own mistakes. True, many of us have disadvantages in life because of the class system and our social standing, but with democracy you have the power to change that. Not so with Communism.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on December 17, 2006, 07:58:54 PM
Quote from: 483

Why fight for something that's futile?


Because it's worth a try.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: GreenApple on December 18, 2006, 05:33:53 PM
Councill, here's something I found on the net about a Marxist theoretician that might interest you. Habermas has tried to update Marxism so that Communism could still be pursued. Here is an extract, with bold added for emphasis:

http://filer.case.edu/~ngb2/Authors/Habermas.html

Habermas almost completely eliminated the notions of revolution and class struggle from the theory. Instead of these, he introduces the concept of crisis. The crisis is that modern society is not meeting individual needs and that institutions in society are manipulating individuals. People interact to respond to this crisis and Habermas calls this interaction Communicative Action. Habermas adapted Horkheimer
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Kevin on December 18, 2006, 05:50:37 PM
It's over guys. You lost. You are now the preserve of dictators and nutters. Every free society has rejected you. Change the words all you want, use as much hyprerbole as you can muster, it ain't gonna happen. Anyways, I'm off to indulge in some Communicative Action with the girlfriend.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: GreenApple on December 18, 2006, 06:09:02 PM
Quote from: 185
It's over guys. You lost. You are now the preserve of dictators and nutters. Every free society has rejected you. Change the words all you want, use as much hyprerbole as you can muster, it ain't gonna happen. Anyways, I'm off to indulge in some Communicative Action with the girlfriend.

Nice one! Made me smile!  :) But who really knows what the future holds with technology advancing so quickly. Things could get better for the whole world and a more just society faster than we might think. Technology develops much faster than ideas. But technology might one day make fine ideals practical. I'm still optimistic.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on December 19, 2006, 04:51:14 AM
Quote from: 139
Councill, here's something I found on the net about a Marxist theoretician that might interest you. Habermas has tried to update Marxism so that Communism could still be pursued. Here is an extract, with bold added for emphasis:

http://filer.case.edu/~ngb2/Authors/Habermas.html

Habermas almost completely eliminated the notions of revolution and class struggle from the theory. Instead of these, he introduces the concept of crisis. The crisis is that modern society is not meeting individual needs and that institutions in society are manipulating individuals. People interact to respond to this crisis and Habermas calls this interaction Communicative Action. Habermas adapted Horkheimer
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Bobber on December 19, 2006, 09:09:17 AM
Quote from: 139

Nice one! Made me smile!  :) But who really knows what the future holds with technology advancing so quickly. Things could get better for the whole world and a more just society faster than we might think. Technology develops much faster than ideas. But technology might one day make fine ideals practical. I'm still optimistic.

Technology better hurries up. This world still depends on oil and a growing economy. And that's how we are ruining the whole place. In 2040 there will be no ice left on the north pole during the summer. Scary thought, especially when you're living under sealevel, as half of this country does. Global warming is no matter of the future, it's been going on for decades already. Technology might provide an answer to that, but again, it'll better hurry up.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on December 19, 2006, 10:14:03 PM
Back on topic, this is one of the first songs I ever wrote, in fact I may have posted it here. It's a love song, by the way.

I'm In Love

I'm in love,
Like a dove,
From the sky,
She flew to my,
Soul,

I can't feel myself breathing,
I'm sick of moving around her,
Creeping,
I'm sick of stepping to the side for the sake of a friend,
Time to stop it all,
Time for it to end,

I'm gonna walk up,
And I'm gonna start,
A conversation,
I'm ready for the pain,
If I can get that sensation,
Time for me to tell her,
How I feel,
I always thought I had,
A heart of steel,

I can't feel myself breathing,
I'm sick of moving around her,
Creeping,
I'm sick of stepping to the side for the sake of a friend,
Time to stop it all,
Time for it to end,

She rejected me,
Which is fine,
I would have hurt her anyways,
What do I have to do,
To please her every whim,
I swear I will try my best not to drag her into sin,
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: GreenApple on December 20, 2006, 12:42:22 PM
Quote from: 63

Technology better hurries up. This world still depends on oil and a growing economy. And that's how we are ruining the whole place. In 2040 there will be no ice left on the north pole during the summer. Scary thought, especially when you're living under sealevel, as half of this country does. Global warming is no matter of the future, it's been going on for decades already. Technology might provide an answer to that, but again, it'll better hurry up.

Yes, and I feel very aware of how true it is. And I suggested we put more faith in technology than ideas to make the world better. But I feel we will be very lucky if technology reduces or stops global warming in time for the world. Politicians are not doing enough, but neither are ordinary people in reducing their own energy consumption. But, why don't politicians do more to encourage people to reduce their energy use? Where is the mass public education campaign to encourage people to use less energy? We don't have it in the UK for sure.

But the stupidity of politicians is this - at some point when things get really bad, they're going to have to take massive steps to do something about global warming, when it all looks really scary. SO, WHY DON'T THEY DO IT NOW! The future needs to be brought forward. As I suggested before, politicians need imagination and will to really make things happen.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Kevin on December 20, 2006, 12:58:09 PM
At the end of the day people don't care. Global warming is in our face on the telly, the papers, you can't escape it. But EVERYONE I know is being newer bigger cars, flying Easyjet three/four times a year, buying holiday homes in Spain etc.  I work for the council and we pick up 5 or 6 fridges A DAY just dumped in the street. Everyone knows that's wrong. It's always someone else's problem. Politicians won't touch it with anything beyond rhetoric because it won't win them votes. That's not politicians fault, that's the downside of democracy. Best just to blame it on the Chinese and Indians.
If we reap the whirlwind, so be it.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: GreenApple on December 20, 2006, 01:04:21 PM
Quote from: 185
At the end of the day people don't care. Global warming is in our face on the telly, the papers, you can't escape it. But EVERYONE I know is being newer bigger cars, flying Easyjet three/four times a year, buying holiday homes in Spain etc.  I work for the coucil and we pick up 5 or 6 fridges A DAY just dumped in the streeyt. Everyone knows that's wrong. It's always someone else's problem. Politicians won't touch it with anything beyond rhetotic because it won't win them votes. That's not politicians fault, that's the downside of democracy. Best just to blame it on the Chinese and Indians.
If we reap the whirlwind, so be it.

Sadly, I feel as pessimistic as you. But, I still feel a kind of optimism too. It was getting me down a lot this year as I found out a lot on the internet. It's not healthy to dwell on pessimism too much. It's possible to be both optimistic as well as pessimistic, if optimism is injected in to prevent too much dangerous negativity. If you know what I mean.

Don't forget to blame it on the Americans (administration) too. They are the biggest culprits!
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: The End on December 21, 2006, 01:34:02 AM
Back on topic!!!

STEP OUT OF THE HAZE

VERSE 1
There's a tree outside my window,
I sit and listen as the wind blows.
I hope she hurries home
Before the storm's begun.
The sky is torn
The rain starts to fall.

CHORUS
Feels so good to have you home,
You know I hate to be alone.
Time to turn another page,
Step out of the haze.

VERSE 2
Now the river's flowing faster.
Swept away the children's laughter.
Face the autumn sky
And cast my fears aside.
The cloud is gone
A rainbow starts to form

CHORUS

MIDDLE 8
The weekend's over way too soon,
And Mondays just creep up on you.

VERSE 3
The sun beats down upon the meadow,
Sitting here I watch the grass grow
Soon the night will come
Another day is done.
A brand new dawn
Though the storm was long

CHORUS

Listen here:
http://www.geocities.com/the_end_gb/haze.htm
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on December 21, 2006, 03:30:14 AM
I liked that. It kind of seemed like Leonard Cohen.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: The End on December 21, 2006, 12:29:29 PM
Ta! ;D

I thought LC had a deep singing voice.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: on December 21, 2006, 04:40:42 PM
I really like that 1.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: on December 21, 2006, 04:40:53 PM
Is that you singing al?
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on December 21, 2006, 10:59:08 PM
Quote from: 360
Ta! ;D

I thought LC had a deep singing voice.

I meant lyrically, I didn't have time to listen to it.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: raxo on December 22, 2006, 01:30:29 AM
Quote from: 18
I meant lyrically, I didn't have time to listen to it.


Don't waste time then ... there's a lot of good (some great) songs here:
http://www.geocities.com/the_end_gb/music.htm
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on December 22, 2006, 06:16:47 AM


I certainly will check it out when I get the chance. I didn't mean for that to sound as mean as it did.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: raxo on December 22, 2006, 12:41:37 PM
Quote from: 18

I certainly will check it out when I get the chance. I didn't mean for that to sound as mean as it did.

Oh, don't worry, you hadn't ... I was just letting you know about all the songs available there  ;D
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on December 27, 2006, 05:28:15 AM
It's Still Rape

You can consent and it's still rape
You can be overage and it's still rape
Johnnys the school quarterback
He's so great
He's going to go to state
Now he's got you in the back seat
You don't wanna but you gotta
'Cause he could decide your fate

I'm sick of this bullsh*t
I'm sick of this sexism
I'm sick of this image
That our women are made to uphold
I wish I could get an operation
To get my hormones decreated
To make me less sexist
And this terrible position
Our daughters, our sisters, our mothers are in
To believe they've been liberated
Well they're told anything but one thing is a sin

You can consent and it's still rape
You can be overage and it's still rape
Johnnys got into politics
He's so great
He's the head of state
Now he's got you in oval office
You don't wanna but you gotta
'Cause if you don't he'll send an assasin.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: ohyea on January 14, 2007, 02:21:18 AM
Since listening to them I have caught on to writing my own songs over some beatles songs such as Here Comes The Sun. Actually using the songs as practice to hone my writing skills and am wondering if anyone else has been inspired to do the same. In the future I want to start a band inspired by the fab four aswell.

I was wondering if any of you would respond to my songs so you could give me feedback on whether I should pursue this sort of dream! thx!

here are a few songs that I will post 1 by 1, enjoy!


Here is probably my first song I ever really finished because I write alot but never get around to a final draft that I believe to be a song. But remember these are inspired by Beatle songs so I may use some of the same words and focus on where the song is heading!

Here I used my favorite solo track from John, "Grow Old With Me" and renamed my song "Bless Us All". I hope you enjoy and please give me your honest opinion, thank you.

"Bless Us All"

grow strong along with me
our hope is all we need
let our worlds be one
let them know we love

God bless us all
God bless us all

grow strong along with me
our love is all we need
spending time with you
let it all come true

God bless us all
God bless us all

lending our love for each other
realize we are brothers

what would life be
if we weren't free?
how would we see?
how would we be?

grow strong along with me
our trust is all we need
between me and you
I hope we keep it true

love with no end
love with no end

so God bless us all
God bless us all...
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: ohyea on January 14, 2007, 02:25:12 AM
Here is another lyric inspired by a George song. "Here Comes The Sun" re-written as "Another Bright Day", enjoy.

there's something bright in the sky
there's something bright that I see
oh my-i

every morning I awake to see the lovely weather
when I'm yawning, I imagine how great it will feel

everyday is another day that I will love, that I love
oh my-i

every morning the children laugh & play together
every morning I wish they were all still here with me

Another Bright Day, another - bright day
it's all here

.....


hear them calling, the spirits that I knew once before
every morning I hear them louder than before

Another Bright Day, another - bright day
it's all here
Another Bright Day, another - bright day
it's all here, it's all here







here hope you enjoy this song. The song "Because" rewritten as "The Boy". The lyrics are very much so about me and my feelings if your wondering. This song is probably the first song I ever finished about a couple weeks before "Bless Us All", actually not really sure lol. well enjoy.


"The Boy"

the boy who never knew which way to turn
the boy who never knew
ohh....
he was the one who tried
but left behind
because his life had passed...ohh

he wanted more, but never knew
there was more, they never knew

because he was so scared
it made him cry inside
the boy who never knew
ohhh....




i had already posted these in another topic but didn't get much feedback so I tried them here.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Mairi on January 14, 2007, 03:07:11 AM
I really like "Another Bright Day" it's so upbeat and happy :)
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Mairi on January 14, 2007, 06:11:42 PM
I'd Like to Go to Cuba

Well I've never been to Cuba
But I'd like to go there someday
So I can buy me some cigars
And get my hair done in a million tiny braids
I'll converse with all the locals
And then compete in dance contests
Watch dark handsome strangers
And make fun of all the pale tourists

(chorus)
Yes, I'd like to go to Cuba
But I am not a Communist
So please don't send me death threats
Please?

I'd buy souveniers for my friends
Keychains, maybe, and sandals
I'd have to bring back some liquor
But enough that those boozehounds could handle
Ooh, wouldn't that be great
Oh yes I think it would be swell
But people are not happy about it, I can tell...

(repeat chorus)

(spoken): "How many times do I have to tell you, I AM NOT A COMMUNIST!!!"
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on January 14, 2007, 07:40:13 PM
That was really cute.

Send Me An Angel

Love and death entwined
For love is suicide
And the last thing I would want to do
Would be for to murder you
But you must be a willing sacrifice
So that I may know paradise

So if you leave may you leave
With happiness in your eye
And when you leave may you
Never ever cry
And may you be better off when I am gone
And never once wonder why
And may you never forget
You're the only angel up in the sky
And here down on Earth as well
And so it is if you are down in Hell
Though I cannot imagine you will ever be
Unless you are drag down by me

I watch the fingers on the clock
Tick away the time
I watch the thoughts evaporate
From inside my mind
I watch your smile far away
Though still close inside
I wonder will you miss me
When it soon is I die?

The sun rises
The river flows on
But it's irrelevant to you
The wheat grows
The mountain crumbles
But it doesn't matter to you
You and your bleeding heart
You bled me damn near dry
But I know it's not what you would want
That I crawl in a corner and cry

And when the carcasses are slowly eaten away by the worms
Will the things today I've told you be worthwhile lessons to learn?

So if you may
And if I might be so bold as to ask
What is it you would like of me
I'll perform any task
For free,
No bargains, no deals
Just to make you happy
Please don't run away frightened
Please do not start laughing
But I beg of you, please darling hear my call,
It would hurt the worst
If you did not answer at all

A thousand reasons I should hate you
Don't outweigh the one
That unknown reason I love you,
That one reason being that same love
I know it may not make sense
Not at first glance
But think for a minute
Not in my actions,
Certainly not in my past,
But look inside yourself,
Perhaps you'll see a bit of me
It's only when you are around
That I may be set free

So maybe we could fake a pact
And flea away to Paris
Just the two of us

Love and death entwined
For love is suicide
And the last thing I would want to do
Would be for to murder you
But you must be a willing sacrifice
So that I may know paradise
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Mairi on January 14, 2007, 07:56:29 PM
Your songs are getting more and more depressing. Still good lyrically, though.

"So if you leave may you leave
With happiness in your eye
And when you leave may you
Never ever cry
And may you be better off when I am gone
And never once wonder why
And may you never forget
You're the only angel up in the sky
And here down on Earth as well
And so it is if you are down in Hell
Though I cannot imagine you will ever be
Unless you are drag down by me"

this part kind of reminds me of a mature version of the song "Angel of the Morning". good job.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on January 14, 2007, 08:19:23 PM
It's about a girl I know, a good friend of mine who is moving away at the end of the year. I like her, she likes me, but I don't want to ask her out because she's very emotional and I'm afraid if she grows attached to me and then has to move, it'll hurt her more then help her.

Here's one I wrote, a poor attempt at humor on my part:

f*** The Mimes!

I hate mimes!
Want them to die!
So annoying
I hate everything that they do!
I hate mimes
Always on my case
Wanna punch 'em in the face
Always quiet
Nothing to say
But you can tell they're makn' fun of you, you can see!

I hate mimes!
Don't you hate mimes?
I hate mimes!
I think the art of miming should be a crime!

Sheilds and Yarneld
Can both go to Hell!
For all I care
Gonna get shot
Smokin' my pot
And wearing all my underwear!
It's not fair!
They take jobs away
From hard working clowns
And they don't even have anything to say!

I hate mimes!
Don't you hate mimes?
I hate mimes!
I think the art of miming should be a crime!

I hate every mime I see,
The only cool one is Bowie!

I hate mimes!
Don't you hate mimes?
I hate mimes!
I think the art of miming should be a crime!
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on January 14, 2007, 08:20:44 PM
Quote from: 18
It's Still Rape

You can consent and it's still rape
You can be overage and it's still rape
Johnnys the school quarterback
He's so great
He's going to go to state
Now he's got you in the back seat
You don't wanna but you gotta
'Cause he could decide your fate

I'm sick of this bullsh*t
I'm sick of this sexism
I'm sick of this image
That our women are made to uphold
I wish I could get an operation
To get my hormones decreated
To make me less sexist
And this terrible position
Our daughters, our sisters, our mothers are in
To believe they've been liberated
Well they're told anything but one thing is a sin

You can consent and it's still rape
You can be overage and it's still rape
Johnnys got into politics
He's so great
He's the head of state
Now he's got you in oval office
You don't wanna but you gotta
'Cause if you don't he'll send an assasin.


Could I get a review?
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Mairi on January 14, 2007, 08:26:49 PM
OMG WHY DO YOU HATE MIMES??? I love mimes!

Anyway, I'm not sure what to think of this other song. It's very contorversial, isn't it? I think I'd have to hear it set to music to form a good opinion.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on January 14, 2007, 08:40:57 PM
Quote from: 218
OMG WHY DO YOU HATE MIMES??? I love mimes!

Anyway, I'm not sure what to think of this other song. It's very contorversial, isn't it? I think I'd have to hear it set to music to form a good opinion.

I don't really hate mimes, it was a joke.

I didn't intend it to be controversial, not like some of my other material. Perhaps you could explain to me what you found controversy in?
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on January 16, 2007, 03:35:21 PM
Oh lord,
Sweet lord,

Do you hear me?
Can you help me?
If I ask for you,
Will it ever come?

Oh love,
Sweet love,

Come rest your head,
And your weary bones,
I hope to help you,
from feeling alone,

Oh hope,
Sweet hope,

Give me the tools,
I'll rebuild the land,
and replace poverty,
with something grand,

Oh brother,
Sweet sister,

Together, we are one,
Tomorrow, you are gone,
Stand united,
Fall divided,

Oh come all,
sweet people,

shake off the shakles,
rid us of the pain,
Together we can heal,
Together we can feel,

Oh lord,
Sweet lord,

Reach out your hand,
and touch my soul,
sacred I am,
from my mind's black hole
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Kevin on January 16, 2007, 03:51:09 PM
^I liked you more when you were a godless motherf*cker.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on January 16, 2007, 08:42:50 PM
hahaha, well im sorry but im not truely godless nor do i worship god, im somewhere in between
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Mairi on January 16, 2007, 09:17:20 PM
Agnostic?
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on January 16, 2007, 09:20:23 PM
dont know really. maybe, maybe not. i just wanted lyrics reviewed
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on January 17, 2007, 03:45:47 AM
The stress and the pain,
Has broken my dream,
The feel of it all has killed me inside,
I follow the road, leadin
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on January 17, 2007, 08:36:08 PM
not really a song but a poem, still if i tried, i could put a tune to it


I am the worker,
Trying to keep my life sustained,

I am the statue in front of you,
Tough and imposing,

I am the lover you once had,
Now just a distant memory and unknown smile,

I am you brother,
Loyal to you until the end of time,

I am the autumn tree,
As I lose a piece of myself and drift past your face,

I am the loser,
Forced to hide in the glory of others,

I am the shrink,
Keeping your sanity while leaking mine,

I am the lost,
Blinded by the darkness,

I am the disapproved,
Forever finding those that have long since forgotten me,

I am the creator,
Building from the junk you leave me,

I am a bird,
Free
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Mairi on January 17, 2007, 10:16:17 PM
the first one reads like an old country song.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on January 17, 2007, 10:36:27 PM
i guess thats good, johnny cash phase.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on January 21, 2007, 01:22:01 AM
Close your eyes,
Let your mind fly,
Let your spirit soar,
To the pearly white doors,

Lose yourself,
Let your mind know it
And your heart opens,
The door
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on January 21, 2007, 03:56:55 AM
That reminds me a bit of Tomorrow Never Knows.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on January 21, 2007, 05:18:49 AM
actually, it was a line from "Love and Peace or Else"
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on January 21, 2007, 05:19:54 AM
again with the religious tie-ends

The man lost his temper,
threw his creation into the fire,
Disgusted with what he allowed,
what he created was dire,

And the people of the land
Ran down to the river,
and they asked the man,
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on January 23, 2007, 05:26:20 AM
Poems Lie

When I was a child
I was happy
You called me naive
Said I was living blind
Then I opened my eyes
And saw the true way
Got depressed
Now you call me insane

Blood of poison
Multiple fears
I wasn't chosen
I fell into these tears
Now you deny me
The simple pleasure
Of company,
Not with which to share,
But to rob me of my misery

When I was a child
I was happy
You called me naive
Said I was living blind
Then I opened my eyes
And saw the true way
Got depressed
Now you call me insane

Poems lie
One way or the other
They say life is vile and black
Or they say life is whimsical and that
It is beautiful
Things are never that simple
I have no interest in pursuing
Your dogma searching for the truth
I'm perfectly happy believe in my own
Oh, I just want to leave home
But I don't want to be on my own
Any more

When I was a child
I was happy
You called me naive
Said I was living blind
Then I opened my eyes
And saw the true way
Got depressed
Now you call me insane

Anymore
Poems lie
Anymore
Innocents cry
Anymore
Angels fly
Anymore
Beauty dies
Anymore
Nevermore
Will I believe
In such cynical things
Nevermore
Will I believe
In such optimistic things
That either side will say
I'm happy in a moral gray
I don't want to confine myself to one way
Anymore

When I was a child
I was happy
You called me naive
Said I was living blind
Then I opened my eyes
And saw the true way
Got depressed
Now you call me insane
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on January 27, 2007, 11:23:55 PM
Quote from: 343
again with the religious tie-ends

The man lost his temper,
threw his creation into the fire,
Disgusted with what he allowed,
what he created was dire,

And the people of the land
Ran down to the river,
and they asked the man,
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on January 28, 2007, 03:35:32 AM
I'm interested in hearing it set to music
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on February 05, 2007, 06:23:13 PM
I just wrote this, it's about a girl who is a friend of mine who's moving away at the end of the year. It's very emo, I hate it for that. It's called "All Along".

This whole time
I hurt you
Intentionally just to get through
To make it unclear how I felt
I wasn't secure until your eyes would welt
And if I let you see inside
Would you leave or would you melt

'Cause all along
The obnoxious comments
The defense mechanisms
The bullsh*t
Now that your gone
I can admit the truth
I was just protecting myself from you

I know I said
I thought I was superior
But since the beginning
I lived in fear
That you would see
Inside of me
Where I would be vulnerable
To give you what you need

'Cause all along
This whole time
All I wanted was to make you mine
And when you leave maybe you'll understand
It needed to be this way
I hurt you to help you stand

I kicked myself
In the mouth
For you and your own health
'Cause that is how
It had to be
I had to protect myself from you to protect you from me

So now you're gone
And better off
And I'm here alone
With my fingers crossed
Would you return
Part of me prays "Please"
But it's best for you
That you did leave

And all I wanted all along
Is for you to be better off
And even if it makes you less then happy
Trust me, girl, it's what you need
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Mairi on February 05, 2007, 08:15:18 PM
Awww. It's so grade nine. In a nice way, I mean. Very sweet.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: andersonCouncill on February 11, 2007, 12:01:12 AM
Quote from: 218
It's so grade nine.

Well, I am in ninth grade, you know.

Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on February 11, 2007, 04:11:54 AM
Kinda based on a true story about me and this good friend of mine almost having something happen tonight, it really wasnt as bad tonight

There were times tonight,
That I wanted you,
That this would be the night
We'd see this through,

I didn't want to hurt you,
I didn't mean for it happen,
It went so fast,
Our minds went spinning,

You are such a wonderful girl,
You are someone so special to me,
You helped me, you loved me,
But I didn't mean for this

I didn't want to hurt you,
I didn't mean for it to happen,
It went so fast,
The secret won't last,
And still we're together,

Oh God, can you help me!
I need some guidence now!
I need some help here now!
Oh girl...
Can we still be friends?

I'm sorry for this,
I'm sorry I hurt you,
I hope you can forgive me
I hope he can forgive me

When you tell him,
I want you to know,
You two were great together,
You two should've stayed together,
I hope he knows too,

I loved you,
But this is not what is right,
This is not what I wanted,
I'm sure this wasn't what you wanted too,
But we can do it,
We can work though it,
Together you two can live as one,
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Mairi on February 12, 2007, 08:21:34 PM
It's really more of a poem than a song isn't it? Still good though.

Anyway, to get in the mood for Valentines' I've been making a creepy stalker mix. All the great songs have inspired me to write one of my own, so here it is!

If I Can't Have You

I watch you all the time
I like to stare
You say you have a girlfriend
I don't care
I'm going to own you
No matter what
You're gonna be mine
No ifs ands, or buts

(chorus)
If I can't have you
That's too bad
If I can't have you
No one can
If I can't have you
There's no doubt
If I can't have you
Just watch out

I look in your window
To see you at night
I watch when you're sleeping
You look all right
I follow you to parties
I see where you go
And if you do something
I will know

(Repeat chorus)

Now you say I'm crazy
That's not true
Why can't you just see
That I love you?
You're the only one i think about
You're on my mind
I steal every thing of yours
That I can find

(Repeat chorus)

Your girlfriend tried to reach me
Said "leave him alone"
But I've got things on my mind
I've tapped your phone
I can hear your conversations
I know what you say
I know where you are going
Every single day

(Repeat chorus)

And now I'm inside your house
I've got a gun
I see the look on your face
Don't try to run
Now I'm pulling the trigger
Oh it's so sad
Now you're falling to the floor
That's too bad

(repeat chorus)

Oh how I tried to warn you
You wouldn't see
You loved somebody
But not me
I'm sorry it ended up this way
What could I do?
You weren't in love with me
But I loved you

(repeat chorus)
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on February 22, 2007, 09:23:03 PM
If we found eachother,
Many years ago,
Who's to think,
That we wouldn't grow?

When you broke up with him
Though very brief in its time,
Made me think of something,
Made me think of what we could've been,

But my thoughts betray me,
My feelings are delusional,
My mind Is unclear,

Is it so wrong for me to like you,
Or for you to like me,
For who we are,
But I can't accept that,
I refuse to allow that as something I want,

What I want, is for you to be happy,
Forget all that could've been,
You're happy with him,
Thats all I could ask,

You are something others dream of,
Something others wished they could have,
If only i knew that all those years ago,

My mind and heart wished it could be true,
But nothing will happen, that I am sure,
You know how I feel,
I am grateful for your forgiveness,

But I am still drawn towards you,
I am still there for you
I am still looking for you,
I am still searching my mind,

You are still someone I find enjoyable,
Someone worth hanging on to,
Someone worth having by my side,

Even if I wanted to, I wouldn't
Even if you asked me, I couldn't,
Even though I long for it, I shouldn't

You are worth more than I can give,
You are someone that many will never find,
But I am lucky to have you,
As I hope you are lucky to have me,
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: tangerine on February 23, 2007, 11:53:12 AM
I wrote poems quite a bit when I was younger and it only recently dawned on me that I could have a go at songwriting. So heres a few of my poor efforts- Im really determined to get better at it all though!

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SONG ONE: This one is incomplete and bad structure which i gotta sort out some point!

Look into those eyes
see through the disguise
just a person
one soul
I saw beyond the lies

I looked at a world
drowning in tears
bombs and destruction
passing the years

look beyond the skin
makeup and a grin
just vanity
just ego
try to see within

I looked at a world
heard a warning call
unity is change
but we're only small

I felt it in my heart
not much but it's a start
hand in hand
learnt to stand
and felt I had a part

I felt the world's pain
desperation
you're only as great
as your imagination

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SONG TWO

We all got a little heart
Some say we don't need 'em
Knew a man
With a heart of steel
Let his heart turn molten
It kept it's shape
let it radiate
and led his mind to freedom
oh-oh-oh
oh-oh-oh
freedom

let yourself love
show me your love
learn from your love
let me love you
set your heart free
love has no fee
you and me
can show the world how it's done

We all got a little time
Makes us feel safer
Knew a clock
With hands of gold
Let himself get older
Slowed down
But Lived On
Lead himself to freedom
oh-oh-oh
oh-oh-oh
freedom

let yourself love
show me your love
learn from your love
let me love you
set your heart free
love has no fee
you and me
can show the world how it's done

And anytime you're all alone
and all around it dark
use your emotion
let light shine from your heart
you can find your path again
you have found your sight
you're the brightest star I can see tonight

We all want a little money
It's all about the pay
Knew a man
With heavy wallet
Let it all away
Watched it go
To a grateful soul
Led someone to freedom
oh-oh-oh
oh-oh-oh
freedom

you and me
can show the world how it's done

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SONG THREE- a random verse I wan't to stick somewhere or add to...

Some call me cynical
It isn't a crime
Fighting for peace
Is like dying for life
Can't find a reason
To smile this season

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right sorry I'll stop now!


Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: tangerine on February 23, 2007, 11:59:40 AM
wow, andersoncouncill - I absolutely loved your lyrics for 'poems lie' - kind of sounded lennonish but not hmm I dunno but basically I love it
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on February 24, 2007, 04:28:39 AM
this and my last one are both about a friend of mine. i hope you enjoy them as much as i enjoyed screwing myself writing them:

You two are back together,
Ain't that sweet,
You two are nice together,
It's lovely and grand,

So why do I miss you so much,
Why do I care about you so much,
Why can't I shake you from my mind...

Even though I love others,
I can't help falling for you,
I live like Caligula,
But it just covers what I feel is true,

Should I trust whats in my mind?
Should I trust what my heart tells me?
Should I care about it all?

I can't have you,
I never will,
We may love each other,
But never be together,

Oh lord, why do I think like this?
Oh lord, is it so wrong,
Oh God, please guide me through,
Oh girl, do you feel this way too?

If you love me,
Will I feel love too?
If I'm happy for you,
Why am I depressed?
If you hear this,
Will you still feel the same?

I know what you're like,
I'm like it too,
I know who you love,
But you don't love me too,

I've lost myself in you,
And I can't dig myself out,
I've lost my mind to you,
But I don't want it to,

I want you to be happy,
I really do,
But are you really happy with him?
Are you happy with you?

Should I trust whats in my mind?
Should I trust what my heart tells me?
Should I care about it all?
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on February 25, 2007, 06:03:20 AM
Wake up,
Wake your mind up,
Open your mind to what you see,
Tell me what you see,

Wake up,
And open up your soul,
Let the world around you fall,
Into the abyss of space,

Wake up,
And show your heart,
Fight for those long forgotten,
Only then will you feel guilt,

Wake up,
And awaken your mind,
Show me whats inside,
And rinse your hands of his blood,

Wake up,
Wake to the torment inside,
Wake to the pain you cause,
Wake to the guilt you feel,
Wake to the lives you lost,

Wake up,
Show the world what you know,
Let them all feel in control,
Only then, can you soul grow,

Wake up,
Can you feel the hurt inside you?
Those that you have killed,
And fried the minds you lost,

Wake up,
Wake up to the suffering of man,
Wake up to the minds of children
Wake up to the souls of the damned,
Wake up to the people you have crushed,

Wake up,
And realize what you've done,
Wake up,
And correct what you have wronged
Wake up,
And you shall be free,
Wake up,
You're really part of me...
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on February 25, 2007, 11:40:18 PM
See, this is what happens when you start writing while listening to Bob Dylan and watching Malcom X

How many people must we let suffer,
Before we change who we are?
How can we let the government rule,
When their views are so far?
How can we leave their power unchecked,
While we fight their battles?
How can we stand by while our buddies die,
And accept their orders like cattle?

Confess your sins to the poor,
Open your arms to those below you,
Fight with those who you believe in,
Welcome those that you once shunned

Why must we lose ourselves in power,
When we are no better than those below,
Why can't we fight our oppression,
But let our own power flow,
Why should we accept life as it is,
When there are things we never thought possible,
Why let those in charge,
Ruin us with power?

Fight the peaceful fight against those who corrupt,
Flee the idiots that drag us in reverse,
Pursue the idea of happiness if you choose to live,
Welcome the change and the push to move forward,

Are we no better,
Than the common thief?
Are we so backwards,
Religion is the sole belief?
Are we so blind,
That we allow leaders to steal?
Are we so deaf,
That we can't listen to how we feel?

Work for what you believe in,
Change those that only hate,
Discover what's inside your heart
Believe in changing your fate

If we look deep inside our minds,
We can find what makes up our power
But we need to work together,
For we are all one nation, one people and one color,
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Mairi on February 26, 2007, 12:10:52 AM
I liked the last one a lot. Bit of a BITW rip-off, however.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on February 26, 2007, 12:30:31 AM
really? hmm, i never looked at the lyrics of BITW, i just thought he was mumbling about wind

what about the others? like or hate any of them?
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on March 01, 2007, 02:21:10 AM
kinda like John and George together, kinda like a cross between Isn't It A Pity and Power to the People:

How shameful it is,
when we can't stand up,
and fight the man,

How sad have we become,
forced to accept the actions of others,
while never having our own,

How pitiful we are,
We are upset about one thing,
But refuse to fight it,

How do we have any dignity?
How do we stand ourselves?
Why accept this?
Why let this go?

It takes one man,
To admit he was wrong,
How many does it take,
To show him he's wrong?

Young or old,
We have all dealt with this,
But as we get closer to it
The more we refuse to stop it,

It takes one man,
To get the problem out,
But it takes one group,
To get the problem fixed,

One person makes the difference,
One person will turn the tide,
But if no one wants to stand up,
How can we ever survive?
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Post by: somedude210 on March 06, 2007, 12:30:18 AM
*southern minister voice* i say...i say, can i get a review here! hallelujah! praise the lord!
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on March 10, 2007, 02:30:37 AM
We're living in a dark world now,
We're living in a dark world,
I only hope you see the light
And tear down the wall,

Reelection is a dangerous game,
Some will help you while others complain,
Do they do it out of fear or desire?
And burn the bridges with a dangerous fire,
As you try and build your throne higher and higher,
Are they right when they call you a liar?

We're living in a dark world,
Possessed by the living damned,
We can only stop and reason,
Why do we listen to the man?

My head is heavy with a frightful ghosts,
As I listen to the fat heads lie,
They can only help if you make them money,
Would it kill them to at least try?
All this pain and suffering and fear,
Do they get that the message is unclear,
They use religion like a tainted flower,
Manipulate faith for unlimited power,

Heaven help us in our time of need,
And strike them down for misguided greed,
Fear the ones that'll screw with your minds,
And save the nation in a short time

We are living in a dark time,
We are living in fear,
We cannot run from the lies,
We cannot save ourselves in time,
We choose to believe what we are told,
We forget the ones we left long ago,
We fight for the insane,
We challenge those who are right,
We allow them to stalk the night,
We lose sight of the importance of life,
We cheat on our ever-loving wife,
We beat those who are different,
We embrace the hypocrite,
We welcome the
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Post by: somedude210 on March 10, 2007, 02:42:25 AM
Acrobat part II (listen to the first one on U2's Achtung Baby)

And you can lie,
And I can find,
Don't need to die,
Behind the wheel,
And I love you,
And you love him,
I don't know why,
I think I'll win,
And I can suffer,
And you can cry,
To screw me over,
The end is nigh,
But don't let me come running back,
And don't let those bastards drag me down,

I try to love,
I will not hate,
I look for you,
When it is late,
And when the time comes,
I'll still be there,
To lift your spirits,
And drown dispair,
But if I don't,
The dream's a lie,
I ask of you,
Please don't cry
And someday soon,
I'll find the words,
You'll help me out,
When I am spurned,
But don't think we'll ever be the same again,
And don't let my bastards drag you down again,

And I am hurt,
I will not lie,
I feel the pain,
Deep inside,
But I can hope,
That you are right,
That what we feel,
Is only tonight,
And I'll be hard,
And I'll be sad,
I'll think of you,
When times are bad,
And we can walk,
To the moon tonight,
But alas my friend,
This plan ain't right,
And you can dance,
And we will laugh,
To bad jokes,
And this or that,
But I can dream,
And dream aloud,
Now much you mean,
Out of the control,
But in the end,
I cannot lie,
I'd bring you down,
I cannot lie,
And you can love...
And you can love...
And you can love...
And you can love...
And don't let your feet touch the ground,
And don't let the bastards hold you down...
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Post by: somedude210 on March 11, 2007, 03:20:53 AM
Edit: please delete the previous post, this is the new version, added a beginning verse

Acrobat Part II, listen to the first one on U2's Achtung Baby

Don't believe what I say
Don't believe what I show
If you just close your eyes
You can feel the enemy
When I first met you girl
You had passion in your soul
What happened what we had
Of hanging without a care
Now it looks like this

And you can lie,
And I can find,
Don't need to die,
Behind the wheel,
And I love you,
And you love him,
I don't know why,
I think I'll win,
And I can suffer,
And you can cry,
To screw me over,
The end is nigh,
But don't let me come running back,
And don't let those bastards drag me down,

I try to love,
I will not hate,
I look for you,
When it is late,
And when the time comes,
I'll still be there,
To lift your spirits,
And drown dispair,
But if I don't,
The dream's a lie,
I ask of you,
Please don't cry
And someday soon,
I'll find the words,
You'll help me out,
When I am spurned,
But don't think we'll ever be the same again,
And don't let my bastards drag you down again,

And I am hurt,
I will not lie,
I feel the pain,
Deep inside,
But I can hope,
That you are right,
That what we feel,
Is only tonight,
And I'll be hard,
And I'll be sad,
I'll think of you,
When times are bad,
And we can walk,
To the moon tonight,
But alas my friend,
This plan ain't right,
And you can dance,
And we will laugh,
To bad jokes,
And this or that,
But I can dream,
And dream aloud,
Now much you mean,
Out of the control,
But in the end,
I cannot lie,
I'd bring you down,
I cannot lie,
And you can love...
And you can love...
And you can love...
And you can love...
And don't let your feet touch the ground,
And don't let the bastards hold you down...
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on March 17, 2007, 02:43:07 AM
no reviews anymore.

thats depressing
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: on March 17, 2007, 01:23:35 PM
There's only about 4 people who ever look on here. And I ain't one of them.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Kevin on March 17, 2007, 01:30:13 PM
Quote from: 366
There's only about 4 people who ever look on here. And I ain't one of them.

I'd forgotten what a friendly positive chap you are.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: on March 17, 2007, 02:17:28 PM
OK, some of them are good, some are bad. Can't say fairer than that. Here be one of mine, I'm writing something everyday these days, they usually fall apart towards the end like this one:

'Kill for Peace'

As I look across the world
I see many a thing
Many people come and go
Many live in sin
From west through to east
From north through to south
These are the parameters
To which we set ourselves

As I look back to history
Through all it's breadth and depth
I see many atrocoties
Many a pointless death
Many men pray to God
With their very last breath

Aids across Africa
War in the middle east
Many people saying
"You got to kill for peace"

As I look for freedom
In this crazy world
Freedom looks right back at me
On that I give my word

As I create illusion
With this here song
Tell me what you learnt
From this conclusion...
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: on March 18, 2007, 03:59:31 AM
Review:
Definitely the best writer on the forum.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on March 18, 2007, 11:17:09 PM
You search your mind
for a passage out
it doesn't exist
but you search about
looking for a purpose
looking for the sun

you crash and burn
all of your life
facing reality
like internal strife
turn around and you're gone
turn around and she's gone,

you're taking steps
to keep yourself sane
but you realize
its all a sham
sanity is a wonderful thing
sanity isn't a reality

you took the time
to get things right
but it all failed
and out went your light
is there a meaning
is there a God?

Look in your mind
and you will find your purpose
but in reality
its not there
you say you have no spirit
you say you have no soul

in the forests
you will find meaning
with your friends
you have refuge
but you have to go in alone
you have to be true to yourself
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Post by: somedude210 on March 18, 2007, 11:32:40 PM
Goodnight funnyman,
Your wold goes silent tonight,
The world that loved you,
The world you made smile,

Its taken so much,
To make us all laugh,
That it took you down,
A destructive path,
You gave us all,
A reason to smile,
How will we laugh,
When you walk the mile,

Goodnight funnyman,
Your wold goes silent tonight,
The world that loved you,
The world you made smile,

You took us to,
A road untraveled,
You made us all,
Feel better in the end,
Your strings came undone,
Your mind fell apart,
But you hid it well,
And covered with our laughs,

Goodnight funnyman,
Your wold goes silent tonight,
The world that loved you,
The world you made smile,

You wanted to spend,
Your life in the woods,
Sitting by the tree,
By a nearby stream,
You cared about everyone,
And helped the forgotten,
But your head felt heavy,
Your conscience full of guilt,

Goodnight funnyman,
Your wold goes silent tonight,
The world that loved you,
The world you made smile,

You took me to your world,
And made me feel alive,
If I knew this would happen,
Could I pass on your smile,
But you couldn't smile anymore,
You couldn't carry on anymore,
You thought you lost your purpose,
Oh how you were wrong,

Goodnight funnyman,
Your wold goes silent tonight,
The world that loved you,
The world you made smile,

In your forest, you have arrived,
In our world, you were lost,
You tried to find meaning,
But you gave us a smile,
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Mairi on March 19, 2007, 12:13:43 AM
Well no one reviewed my stalker song, so I'm not gonna review any songs until someone comments on it!
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on March 19, 2007, 12:52:31 AM
very creepy, and nice mindset of a stalker. based on personal experience?

kinda reminds me of the police song...forget what it was, but it was like the perfect stalker song, but i think you topped that
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Revolution on March 19, 2007, 02:44:59 AM
I'd Never post my songs and I've been a writer for 23 years!Sorry. Some of you have some good lyrics!  8)
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on March 20, 2007, 09:15:58 PM
thanks, but its always nice to see others than the same 3 people post (me included)
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Post by: somedude210 on March 24, 2007, 07:14:46 PM
thought of this last night on the train ride home

I'm on the midnight train,
Wishing you were here,
I'm on the midnight train,
Trying to get home to you,

Whistles tooting,
Darkness lingers,
As I fall asleep with you in mind,
Oh I'm coming home,

If you say you love me,
Can I look forward,
to my return,

I just keep chugging along,
Working through the ups and downs,
Like the midnight train,
I'm on my own,

Oh love,
Will you say you love me,
Can you miss me when I miss you,
Will I feel you in my arms,

Train goes on,
Oh how I wish you were here,
I feel so far from you,
Even when you're near,

I'm on the midnight train,
Rolling on tonight,
I'm on the midnight train,
Trying to get home to you,
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Mairi on March 25, 2007, 02:07:48 AM
I like that last one a lot. It really gives you a vivid image in your mind. A nice concrete subject, but with metaphorical undertones. It reads a lot like an old soul song. This is one of the best I've read from you.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on March 25, 2007, 02:52:56 AM
thank you kindly, miss. alot of thought went into that one. i really liked you're stalker one alot as well.

if you wouldn't mind, would you care to look at the last two as well?
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: on March 30, 2007, 12:33:52 AM
I don't write too much, most of it is crap and I only post songs that mean something to me, I don't like to write any old nonsense like "I'm sat on a bed, next to the cupboard, where my clothes are kept" that is bollocks and symptomatic of alot of this thread. IMO.

Here is my song:

My Beauty is Anonymous

There's only so many ways to tell you nothing
I don't care about what you're thinking
Yet now I care about if, you're feeling alright

One of these days you may see something
Maybe it's just my foolish hopeing
So tell me love, what are you doing tonight

There's no future, I remember
There's no past, I forget
I say I seen something
I ain't seen yet
My beauty is anonymous
I have no regrets

There's only so many ways to tell you nothing
I don't care about what you're thinking
Yet now I care about if, you're feeling alright

One of these days you may see something
Maybe it's just my foolish hopeing
Now tell me love, what are you doing tonight

Now I can't sing about what I'm saying
Your future's here it's for the taking
It's there to be, if your seeing your sight
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Kaleidoscope_Eyes on April 04, 2007, 10:05:16 AM
Mairi- I really like the stalker poem. I like the rhyming.
Somedude210- some great stuff man! Really nice. Are your poems based on personal experience, if i may ask?
TMoGF- I like the way you're thinking when you write.

I love writing poems, and i write quite a lot of them (my ones seem to be very short compare to the poems on this thread) but i never had the time to type them up. So since its the holidays tomorrow (oh yea!) - well, you'll be seeing quite a lot of me  ;)
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on April 04, 2007, 10:53:11 AM
thanks, and yea. alot of my stuff is personal experience


i look forward to seeing yours
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Kaleidoscope_Eyes on April 04, 2007, 11:52:31 AM
Quote from: 343
alot of my stuff is personal experience

Well, at least you have experience... I don't, unfortunatelly  :'(
Well, here's a poem i wrote on tuesday (i think). It was inspired by Paul McCartney's song "Maybe I'm amazed"

Here it goes

Maybe

Maybe you just need to leave me alone
Maybe you just need to just be gone
Maybe you just need to say that you are sorry
Maybe you just need, boy, to hurry.

Maybe I
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Post by: somedude210 on April 05, 2007, 01:27:25 AM
Where Did It All Go Wrong?

What happened to us?
Did we go too far?
Did we not go far enough?
If I say I'm sorry,
Will you know why?

I never wanted to feel this way,
about you,
I never wanted it to get this way,
Is it too much?
Am I too much?

I can't believe we've become this,
Strangers among friends,
You say that its no different than before,
But I know we're not all there,

You're a friend of friends,
I'm glad to be close to you,
But there's something missing,
Like I'm staring into the abyss,

We think alike on many levels,
and enjoy each other's company,
So when we talk to each other,
Why do I feel like no one's there,

What happened to us,
Where did it all go wrong?
I want to know,
I'm so sick of this,

I hate all this,
I hate what we've become,
I promised myself we'd be different,
So how did we end up like this?

You used to come to me with your problems,
Or wait for me in the hall,
You said you loved being near me,
So where did it all go wrong,

You motives elude me,
Your words confuse me,
Your actions sadden me,
You emotions depress me,

You say you're the same,
But you're not,
I feel like I'm losing you,
even when you're right in front of me,

I looked inside me for the answer,
But it kept leading me to you,
Where did I go wrong...
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on April 05, 2007, 05:48:25 PM
The Grim Reaper, based on a character from an episode from MASH who calculated how many casualties would come from a battle

You're the grim reaper,
Taking the loives of the young,
Fulfilling your quota,
Without a care for those who die,

You fill your ledger,
With equations of death,
Deciding how many die,
Until there's no one left,

Amazing you are,
The way you don't care,
How you reduce human life,
Is there even a cross you bear?

The boldness you show,
Pride in knowing you're right,
The insensitivity of it all,
The insanity of it all,

You're the bearer of death,
Able to calculate who gets shot,
Unable to care for the screaming,
The screams of those who fought,

If You miss your mark,
And you're off by twenty,
How do you cope?
Will you shoot the many?

You tell us how many bullets fly,
How many bodies must die,
And if it rains,
You have another fifty shot,

What if we get rid of you?
Will young men die?
What will we have without war?
What do we call it?
Peace....
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: on April 06, 2007, 03:31:08 PM
Quote from: 596

Well, at least you have experience... I don't, unfortunatelly  :'(
Well, here's a poem i wrote on tuesday (i think). It was inspired by Paul McCartney's song "Maybe I'm amazed"

Here it goes

Maybe

Maybe you just need to leave me alone
Maybe you just need to just be gone
Maybe you just need to say that you are sorry
Maybe you just need, boy, to hurry.

Maybe I
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Kaleidoscope_Eyes on April 06, 2007, 11:23:15 PM
Thank you Master. It's good to have feedback  :)

Here's another one

Yours No More

In the dead quite of night
A silly love poem I write
And I
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Kaleidoscope_Eyes on April 06, 2007, 11:30:02 PM
Quote from: 343

You fill your ledger,
With equations of death,
Deciding how many die,
Until there's no one left,

Amazing you are,
The way you don't care,
How you reduce human life,
Is there even a cross you bear?

[...]
The insensitivity of it all,
The insanity of it all,

[...]
If You miss your mark,
And you're off by twenty,
How do you cope?
Will you shoot the many?

[...]
What if we get rid of you?
Will young men die?
What will we have without war?
What do we call it?
Peace....

Great poem somedude210. I like especially the lines I quoted. About "Where did It All Go Wrong?"- a nice love poem but i think it will sound better with music...?
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on April 07, 2007, 02:05:39 AM
ya, well...since i lack a band, it will stay a poem for now.

but thanks. I liked yours alot as well. nice poem. its simple but at the same time gives off a nice meaning
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: on April 07, 2007, 01:14:09 PM
Just be a three-piece: you, your keyboard and your belly.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Kaleidoscope_Eyes on April 11, 2007, 03:57:39 AM
Quote from: 366
Just be a three-piece: you, your keyboard and your belly.

Great idea man, I'll have to try that!
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on April 12, 2007, 01:21:40 AM
wrote some more at work:


You came to me,
Crying and alone,
I took you in,
And comforted your soul,

You lost your mind,
Couldn't walk the line,
I brought you back,
From your mind of black,

I'm there for you,
Regardless of what goes wrong,
But sometimes I can't tell,
What I'm doing it for,

Can you help me,
When I feel blue,
When the world sucks,
Cause I'm always there for you,

You're lost and scared,
Stay calm, my friend,
I'll soon be there,
I'll be there for you,

Dry your tears, my dear,
You'll always have someone,
take your time, girl,
I'm always there for you,
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on April 12, 2007, 01:24:30 AM
I feel so guilty,
I feel so fake,
I care for you,
But is it too much?
I can't believe myself,
I can't contain myself,
I lost control,
I lost my sanity,
But I'm there for you,
I don't love you,
I don't care for you,
I don't miss you,
I don't know you,
I can't find you,
But I can't live without you,
I lied,
I cried,
I lost it,
I found myself,
I lied to myself,
I don't know myself,
I lied to you,
But it's all true
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Kaleidoscope_Eyes on April 12, 2007, 11:59:29 PM
Your poems are really good but sad...  Funny but i prefer the second one (even though its so sad)


Wrote this yesterday (its not hard to see what/who inspired me  )

The Ballad of Paul and Budgie (and my friend and me)

I have a little hamster
He
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Kaleidoscope_Eyes on April 13, 2007, 12:01:55 AM
Quote from: 343
wrote some more at work:


You came to me,
Crying and alone,
I took you in,
And comforted your soul,

You lost your mind,
Couldn't walk the line,
I brought you back,
From your mind of black,

I'm there for you,
Regardless of what goes wrong,
But sometimes I can't tell,
What I'm doing it for,

Can you help me,
When I feel blue,
When the world sucks,
Cause I'm always there for you,

You're lost and scared,
Stay calm, my friend,
I'll soon be there,
I'll be there for you,

Dry your tears, my dear,
You'll always have someone,
take your time, girl,
I'm always there for you,

Do you mind if I'll try to analyse your poem?
So why was she sad? And do you love her (even though "sometimes I can't tell,
What I'm doing it for")?
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on April 13, 2007, 12:57:41 AM
long story, but her boyfriend and her have been on the rocks for like the past 3 months (which, i admit, i think i have a hand in cause they started getting worse when she started hanging out with me during the weekends) and tuesday, i got a phone call from her around 6pm, which is unusual for her since calls arent free on her cell phone till after 9pm so she wont call till then, and she was clearly crying on the phone. so i tried to comfort her, it was like the worst fight they got into. most of the time they like break up and get back within 10 mins. this lasted a while and even though they are technically back together, i have never seen its so tense between them.

but she was incredibly sad and wanted me to comfort her (apperently im a caring soul...go figure) and i did a good job of cheering her up.

as for me having feelings for her, and shes asked me this too, i don't know, its complicated. we both love being together and both have admitted to wondering what it would be like to be in a relationship together, but...i dont know, we both kinda want to be beyond friends but we both dont. its weird
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Kaleidoscope_Eyes on April 13, 2007, 08:08:23 AM
Well its good of you to help her. And I suppose you can just be soul mates, y'know, like be really close... have a fling or something (a short one). Or tell her to go on a "break" with her current boyfriend.  
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on April 13, 2007, 12:42:29 PM
well i did kinda tell here that she might want to think about breaking up with him cause she had told me that shes worried it will end soon cause it keeps getting worse and worse. so i did suggest it, which is why i wrote the second one. i felt sooo guilty after telling her that. i just needed to think about what my motives were and whether i wasnt just hurting her and our friendship. i still feel guilty for saying it, its her decision, nothing i say should influence that
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Kaleidoscope_Eyes on April 15, 2007, 05:12:58 AM
But I think she values your advice very much and she is glad you helped her, so try not to feel guilty. All you are doing is being a friend who is helping another friend in need. She came to you- you didnt come between them as it were.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on April 15, 2007, 01:09:41 PM
true. i'd rather persue some other girl than her, and i probably will before this becomes too awkward
.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Kaleidoscope_Eyes on April 17, 2007, 04:33:08 AM
You deleted a post of yours didnt you?  ;)

Have you started persuing?
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on April 17, 2007, 06:33:46 PM
haha, it was weird yesterday. we were closer than we ever were but at the same time, it'll never go beyond friends. i dont even know if i would want it to go farther, yes we are wonderful together, but at the same time it would never happen so theres no sense in having faith that it could happen.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on April 17, 2007, 07:04:17 PM
Faith is what holds us,
Binds us as one,
Faith is what drives us,
Draws us when we're confused,
Opens to our minds,
Helps us when we're down,
What happens when it leaves us?

What happens to us if we lack faith?
What happens when we lose faith,
In ourselves? In eachother?
What will I do,
If I lose faith in you,
What will you do,
If I lose faith in me,

Faith is an amazing thing,
It can lead us to hope,
It can take us to another world,
It can draw us away,
From the ones we love,
It can screw with us,
And hurt those we love,

What happens to me if we lose faith?
What will I become without it?
In myself, I am lost,
In my mind, I am gone,
I've lost my faith in me,
I've lost my faith in you,

Without faith, I have no hope,
Without hope, I have no dreams,
Without dreams, I have no goals,
Without goals, I am nothing,
I am nothing to you,
I am nothing to myself,

Can I get my faith back?
Can you help me believe again?
Can you help me live again?
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Kaleidoscope_Eyes on April 18, 2007, 04:27:58 AM
I'm in accordance with your poem. I take it you wrote it after "the yesterday"?  ;)
Well, im glad it worked out as it did.  :) The story of you, your freind and her boyfriend somehow inspired me to write this...

Don
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Post by: Kaleidoscope_Eyes on April 18, 2007, 04:30:31 AM
Here's another one. I wrtoe it when my "comapny" was not doing anything, and we had so much to do be we couldnt do it- because we had to wait. And i got really REALLY annoyed by this fact. (I was also listening to the Beatle's Wait so i suppose the it inspired me too- but thats besides the point)

Wait

Wait- what a dull word
Nothing happens of its own accord
Am I waiting for a failure or a success?
In the meantime, there
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Post by: somedude210 on April 18, 2007, 05:51:32 PM
i like the first one, some nice words of advice there. if i didnt know better, i say you were the girl that ive been hanging out with :P

the second one is so bitter but its enjoyable because i can relate to that so well,
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Post by: Kaleidoscope_Eyes on April 19, 2007, 12:29:18 AM
I bet my sister (Octie) can relate to the second one...  :-/ Thanks for the comments ;D
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Post by: somedude210 on April 19, 2007, 01:12:20 AM
no problem, its nice to know my problems inspired others to write good lyrics about it :P

it really is good though, better than some of the crap i post up here
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Post by: Kaleidoscope_Eyes on April 19, 2007, 06:12:27 AM
aw, dont call it crap.... or are u just fishing for complements? ;)
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Post by: somedude210 on April 19, 2007, 07:02:22 PM
hahaha, me? fish for compliments? never.  ;D

but no, i dont like some of them
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Post by: Kaleidoscope_Eyes on April 19, 2007, 11:25:46 PM
Quote from: 343
hahaha, me? fish for compliments? never.  ;D

but no, i dont like some of them

I always write compliments wrong... too much economics :-/
I know what you mean, I sometimes look back at the stuff I write and yea, i suppose "crap" is the right word.

I dont think this is crap though. I wrote it back in february as an "answer" to George Harrison's The Art of Dying (I listened to it like 3 times in a day- just a tad bit unormal) ;)

The Art

We know that everything must pass away
Even memories will fade day by day
And it is then when you understand the art
You and your non functioning heart

You don
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Post by: somedude210 on April 20, 2007, 01:26:52 AM
ill post some more at some point. once i write some more.
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Post by: Kaleidoscope_Eyes on April 20, 2007, 04:55:34 AM
Rightie. Hope to read yours soon... "turn off your mind, relax and float downstream"  :P
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Post by: somedude210 on April 20, 2007, 07:17:24 PM
mm, been too busy with scholarship sh*t and writing a story on the side.

hope to read some of yours sometime.
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Post by: Kaleidoscope_Eyes on April 21, 2007, 01:55:38 AM
oh yea? which scholarship you doing? I always start writing stories but never finish them. And my stories are so lovey-dovey they are so crap. Well, here's a poem i wrote, again in feb. I like it apart from the last sentance (it doesnt seem to be grammatically correct)

Close your Eyes

Close your eyes and what do you see
A land of black and mystery
Close your eyes and what do you taste
Strawberries leap into your mouth with haste
Close your eyes and what do you hear
The river flowing is very near
Close your eyes and what do you feel
Soft white fur of a seal
Close your eyes and what do you smell
Something nice and exceptionally well
Close your eyes and what is your thought
Wake up, the sun the moon had caught.

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Post by: somedude210 on April 21, 2007, 03:29:38 AM
were caught instead of had caught, sounds better in english.

haha, your stories probably arent crap. well, no worse than mine. the one im working on now is about a group of friends that lead a rebellion after the USA experiences a successful civil war and then the resurrected Soviet Union invades. and dont worry bout the love story thing, i have one in almost all of my stories now.  :P
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Post by: on April 26, 2007, 11:28:19 PM
Just wrote this in 45 minuets. Formula, yes, but it has a good hook and alright verses. Being the only person who has ever heard it I should know:

'I Keep Falling'

Knowing that I'm right here
I never felt better than this
I feel it so sincere
As I try to get to it

I'm coming back to think
That must be what I missed
It pushed me to the brink
It's like I don't exist

I keep falling
I keep falling

I keep falling into place
Disappearing without a trace
I keep falling into place

I keep falling
I keep falling

Everytime I look around me
All I see is thee
Doing things that could be
All the things that could be

I keep falling
I keep falling

I keep falling into place
Disappearing without a trace
I keep falling into place

Knowing that I'm right here
I never felt better than this
I feel it so sincere
As I try to get to it

I'm coming back to think
That must be what I missed
It pushed me to the brink
It's like I don't exist

I keep falling
I keep falling

I keep falling into place
Disappearing without a trace
I keep falling into place



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Post by: Kaleidoscope_Eyes on April 27, 2007, 02:29:17 AM
^ I like it very much Master. Reminds of George Harrison  :) It's rreally light and easygoing like ( not that poems can be easy going... but u get my meaning?) Great!
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Post by: Kevin on April 27, 2007, 07:32:11 AM
Don't often get off on this stuff but credit where credit's due MF. They are the first set of lyrics I've read here that sound like they could actually belong to a song, rather than being tricky-dicky poetry. Not too wordy and not a word out of place. 10/10.
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Post by: somedude210 on May 09, 2007, 01:44:10 AM
Haven't posted in a few weeks, haven't written anything really. Got this done tonight at work, hope you enjoy


I've got a girl,
I'd give up anything for,
She'd got a heart so large,
It could fill up the world,

I've got a lover,
A lover like no other,
She's showed me what love is,
I wouldn't want it any other way,

She keeps me sane,
When I feel mad,
She holds my hand,
When we are near,

She opened my eyes,
When I was blind,
She helped me out,
When I was lost,

I've got a girl,
I'd give up anything for,
She's got a soul,
A soul we share,

I hold her close,
When she's down,
I warm her heart,
When the wind is sharp,
I'll always be there,
Whenever she feels alone,

I love this feeling,
I love the love,
I love her so,
For the first time
I know what love is...

I wouldn't want it any other way,
I wouldn't want her any other way,
For the first time,
I know what love is...
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Post by: harihead on May 09, 2007, 02:34:16 AM
That's so sweet, Somedude210.  Is somebody in love?  ;)
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Post by: Kaleidoscope_Eyes on May 09, 2007, 03:06:52 AM
Awww..... Damn somedude, these are so good lyrics. "For the first time
I know what love is... Awwwwwwwwwwww! Show it to her. So so very cute!

Quote from: 551
That's so sweet, Somedude210.  Is somebody in love?  ;)

Someone dude is....  ;)
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Post by: on May 09, 2007, 04:25:22 PM
See I've got nothing to say to you now
No poems, or any lines to sing
And for all yourself may bring
I'll give back to you

 There's no lines in the language to say
How it is, to be here this way
Why do I stay
Why do I stay

The difficulty is trying to say what you think
Think what you say, before it sinks away

 There's no lines in the language to say
How it is, to be here this way
Why do I stay
Why do I stay

See I got something to say to you now
It's written, in our minds well
And for all that it may bring
It gives back to you
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Post by: somedude210 on May 09, 2007, 07:43:59 PM
Quote from: 596
Awww..... Damn somedude, these are so good lyrics. "For the first time
I know what love is... Awwwwwwwwwwww! Show it to her. So so very cute!

Someone dude is....  ;)

hahaha, what can i say, im a romantic ;D but is it really that good? i thought i ripped off soo much from U2's The First Time

im not sure if i want to show it to her just yet....maybe after prom
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Post by: on May 10, 2007, 12:58:39 AM
Quote from: 343
Haven't posted in a few weeks, haven't written anything really. Got this done tonight at work, hope you enjoy


I've got a girl,
I'd give up anything for,
She'd got a heart so large,
It could fill up the world,

I've got a lover,
A lover like no other,
She's showed me what love is,
I wouldn't want it any other way,

She keeps me sane,
When I feel mad,
She holds my hand,
When we are near,

She opened my eyes,
When I was blind,
She helped me out,
When I was lost,

I've got a girl,
I'd give up anything for,
She's got a soul,
A soul we share,

I hold her close,
When she's down,
I warm her heart,
When the wind is sharp,
I'll always be there,
Whenever she feels alone,

I love this feeling,
I love the love,
I love her so,
For the first time
I know what love is...

I wouldn't want it any other way,
I wouldn't want her any other way,
For the first time,
I know what love is...

That's a nice tune Somedude. Do you find it's good to take a break from it occasionally? Unless you get something out of the blue of course?
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Post by: somedude210 on May 10, 2007, 02:14:33 AM
hahaha, i havent been in enough relationships to constitute taking a break. i take what i get and i couldnt have asked for more in her ;D
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Post by: somedude210 on May 13, 2007, 10:22:45 PM
After Prom thing i wrote

Sleep now,
So sweetly, rest,
As you lay your weary head,
Upon my chest,

Rest now,
This night has been so memorable,
But we are so tired,
Tonight, it was so enjoyable,

As day breaks,
We lie together,
Our arms around each other,
As we stare deep into our eyes,

At dawn,
It's like there's no one around,
Just you and me alone,
Hoping not to be found,

And as your kisses,
Linger on my lips,
I remember our first date,
How long we talked,
How long ago it feels,

Sleep now, sweetheart,
Another day is calling,
Another day for me to fall for you,
I'll share my warmth with you,
I'll share my life with you,

Close your eyes,
I'll be here when you wake,
If you're scared, hold me close,
Even when there's nothing to be scared about,

You warn me of the risks,
That you may be falling for me,
and you smile when I say,
"That's a chance I'm willing to take,"

Oh I wished that day would always last,
But I know there will be more,
I know that this is true,
I'll never find another girl like you,
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Post by: Kaleidoscope_Eyes on May 14, 2007, 12:26:02 PM
Damn you somedude!!!!!! (in a good way)

AWWW!  :P


You warn me of the risks,
That you may be falling for me,
and you smile when I say,
"That's a chance I'm willing to take,"

You actually included that....! EEEEE!
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Post by: somedude210 on May 14, 2007, 04:12:16 PM
hahahaha, yes i did put it in, and she enjoyed it too.  ;D oh im such a romantic
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Post by: Mairi on June 20, 2007, 08:43:14 PM
This song was inspired by a book my sister loved. It's not terribly profound- it's just supposed to be a fun, weird song.

Hungry Hungry Sharks

I was swimming down by the beach one day
When suddenly, to my dismay
I looked up and saw a great white shark
I knew that his bite would be worse than his bark

(chorus)
Hungry hungry sharks
They only wanna eat
Hungry hungry sharks
Humans are their meat
Hungry hungry sharks
They got sharp white teeth
Hungry hungry sharks
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Post by: Kaleidoscope_Eyes on June 20, 2007, 11:46:25 PM
^ I like it! Great song Mairi
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Post by: somedude210 on July 07, 2007, 04:50:44 AM
i wrote two more that you wouldve enjoyed, but they're currently mailed to her
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Post by: Kaleidoscope_Eyes on September 02, 2007, 10:13:12 AM
Its amazing what people come up with on the way home from work while spotting people runing on the botanical gardens...

Some People

Some people run in the park
Some people do things in the dark
Some people sniff glue
But we all do what we wanna do

Some people are sad
Some people are good, some are bad
Some people strike
But we all do what we like

Some people cry
Some people touch the sky
Some people laugh
But we all what we love

Some people write songs
Some people are never wrong
Some people never lose
But we all do what we choose (to do)

Some people like to roll
Some people wanna be tall
Some people are women some are men
But we all do what we can

Some people are like me
Not knowing which category
Of People they belong to
Is it the same with you?

There are different types of people
But I think we can all agree
It's love and free will
That binds us together and makes us happy.
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Post by: somedude210 on January 13, 2008, 07:53:31 PM
its been a real long time since i wrote anything. so heres my first foray back into it in a long long time, enjoy:

Its been awhile,
Since I penned a poem,
Went through my file,
Of the old ones I wrote,
With you as my inspiration,
I bet I won't choke,

Eight long months,
Seems like a lifetime to me,
Eight long months,
Feels so divine, you see,
Without you in my life,
I'm stuck dealing with me,

Oh along the road,
We've had our bumps and bruises,
But that never changed the way I felt,
Never changed how I saw you,

May the world be alight,
May the mountains crumble,
May the oceans dry,
May every conceivable bad thing happen in one day
I'll still be there,
Holding the light,
To find your way out,

Enlighten me,
Into your heart,
Frighten me,
From the ways that are dark,
Accept me,
For what I have wronged,
Show me,
The woman I have longed,

May the world break,
And may their hearts ache,
And may I smile everyday,
Knowing you're by my side,
Allowing us to take it in stride,
And may all the world know,
How I feel for you this day,
And how I wouldn't want it any other way,
For you are the love of my life,
The Yoko to my John,
My guiding light
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Post by: Indica on January 17, 2008, 09:50:33 AM
After Prom thing i wrote

Sleep now,
So sweetly, rest,
As you lay your weary head,
Upon my chest  ...



Soppy - but it flows well :) I would have changed the song half way through to reveal that she's gone or maybe dead, and that what you describe can only be a dream/wish. Cynical ... but that's me ... haha  :-/

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Post by: somedude210 on January 28, 2008, 01:45:14 AM
hahaha, well im not depressing like that *looks back at past lyrics*...oh, right....i am ;D
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Post by: Whoever on January 30, 2008, 02:23:41 AM
I write things when I'm out, by the time I get home I'll forget it, then I'll go out 6 months later and recall it...

Quote.
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Post by: Whoever on January 30, 2008, 02:24:30 AM
I think theres a song in that quote...

Quote.
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Post by: Kaleidoscope_Eyes on January 31, 2008, 11:18:01 PM
That's a beautiful poem Somedude! (long time no talk, by the way)

I can get pretty cynical in poems , but then i re-read my poem and i think "oh thats crap dont be so sad"  :-/

You used to write good poems whoever (unless im thinking of someone else...)
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Post by: somedude210 on September 18, 2008, 03:45:16 AM
Another Day - Wrote it tonight for my girlfriend's birthday. first i've written since i posted on here last. its kinda duety, bolded being me and italics being her, except for the last verse which is both of us

...yes im sappy, ive come to peace with that...

Driving the long road home,
Another day gone by,
Another hug goodbye,
Another time we cry,


Tonight, I lie awake,
Staring into the vastness of my mind,
Seeing you at every corner,
Wishing you a safe journey home.

Headlights flash,
Like the twinkle in your eyes,
Like the spirit lifted in me,
Like the words you say to me,
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Post by: Kaleidoscope_Eyes on September 18, 2008, 10:51:16 PM
How lovely! How did the girlfriend react?  :)
Been a while since I heard from you, Sommie. How's you been?
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Post by: somedude210 on September 19, 2008, 04:25:35 AM
hahaha, as she put it, she was starting to tear up and was trying so hard not to cry because her roommate was nearby, and then stated that i was absolutly wonderful.

i've been doing well, i started my second year at college. dont ever go into engineering unless you dont mind math. even then, its a pain.

how have you been KE? I've missed our wonderful conversations
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Post by: somedude210 on October 14, 2008, 11:10:16 PM
My girlfriend ranted about how her sister got everything she gets in life, and how her mother treats my girlfriend like crap over the same things, so i wrote this to cheer her up. Her family is the black-sheep of her grandparents, and since shes the black-sheep of hers, we joke how she's a cow-sheep. that explains the last lines


Oh darling,
I know you're feeling down,
As if you've been cheated,
But darling,
You don't need to feel sad,
Look around you,
Look inside you,
You still have everything you've ever had,

There are times you want to scream,
Days where you could kick a puppy,
People you wish you didn't know,
But you don't need to,
What you haven't found,
Is what's always been there,

Days suck,
People are a pain,
You could kick and scream,
Remember who you are,
What you have,
And you'll see that you have more,
Then they ever will,

Some people are spoilers,
Some people are spoiled,
Some people get pushed around,
Some people are the pushers,

Hold you're head up high,
Get out of your funk,
Lift up your spirits,
Climb out of your bunk,
There's a whole world to see,
A whole world away from prying eyes,
A world for just you and me,

Look at the glass half-full,
See what you have,
Live for the life you have,
Cheer up,
At least you're a Cow-sheep,
Instead of a Black sheep like them,
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Post by: somedude210 on February 20, 2009, 04:57:28 PM
Meditation:

My hands tingle,
The thoughts are thrown,
Smooth beads jingle,
Blood encased in stone,

And I pray for thee,
To find that one true love,
And I pray for me,
To mend a forgotten soul,

Mantras ringing,
The mind is awake,
A thousand monks singing,
I feel it through me,

Wake up this morning,
Thought I was alive,
Felt so nice and happy,
When my life took a dive,

And I listen to the birds,
Who sing of beasts,
And I listen to my mind,
Who cries out for peace,

Lives are never touched,
Lives can never feel,
The world we know is imperfect,
The feelings are all real,

Walked the line,
And dirt filled path,
Never lied before,
Saw the beauty of our world,
And the horrors of our wars,

Take me to the holy scrolls,
Show me the way,
Walked along another path,
Day after day,

You and I,
Have been through hell,
Saw it just the other day,
Still we're willing,
To give it away,

Oh shepherds come today,
Take my flock away,
Teach them how to live,
Show them what you preach,

Take my hands,
Make them clean,
Rid them of the blood,
Untouched by man again,

Feel your skin,
Clean and smooth,
Despite what you may think,
Its only in your head,

Oh lord,
Forgive me for my sins,
Shelter me from the winds,
Help me when I'm pinned,

And if the world goes down,
Will he wash it all away?
And if I just fall down,
Will you help me back again?

Blessed are the meek,
That take my plans,
Blessed are the weak,
That break my hands,
Blessed are the blind,
Who follow the light,
Blessed are the souls,
Who are far too bright,
Blessed are the friends,
Who stay by and true,
Blessed are rare,
Like me and you,
Blessed are the fair,
Like me and you...

Friendship:

Time ticks away,
The moment passes,
The phone sits,
Idly, waiting for that ring,

How do you tell her?
How do you let her know?
You've given her everything,
Happiness, love, understanding
A friend,

Friendship, love and understanding,
Should never be a condition,
Relationships come and go,
but those stay eternal,

You made her laugh,
You made her sing,
Be happy with that,
She lifted her standards for you,
She allowed you into her life,
And you made it better,

Don't underestimate your power,
Don't feel you can't do right,
You are one of the only ones,
Who can see the light,

You feel like sh*t now,
Thats okay, friend,
All things must pass,
All things must adjust,

Follow your heart,
You won't be disappointed,
Listen to the advice you give,
You won't be sad,

Take a look around you,
You've experienced something few will ever know,
Funny how it is now,
You're blind by your own anger,

Anger turned inward,
Leads to inner war,
Take a breath,
Calm down,
You don't need to be like this,
You'll find your path,

Dear friend,
Remember this,
Relationships come and go,
Friendships are eternal,
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Post by: somedude210 on February 20, 2009, 09:52:34 PM
Where did it all go wrong?

Can you hear my heart,
Thumping on the floor,
Can you see what I've become,
A shell of my former self,
My soul is aching,
My heart feels nothing,

Looking back,
How foolish I was,
To think that this was perfect,
To think that I was happy,

You betrayed me,
You promised me,
You said you loved me,
Now you say that to him,

My heart aches for you,
My mind wants it all back,
Where did it all go wrong?
When did I lose you?

You seem to forget,
What it felt like for you,
When he did this to you,

Did you miss him,
Like I miss you?
Did he take something from you,
Like you took something from me,

You seem so cold,
Do you need my heat?
Feel my warmth flow through you,
Or does he fill that need now?

You told me you love me,
You told me you wanted me,
You told me you wanted to stay,
Yet here I am,
Alone,
Without so much as a passing glance from you,
Without more than two words,

Are you afraid of me?
Well the damage is done,
You did it quick,
Gently turning the handle,
Taking me closer to pain,

I love you,
or at least I did,
You wanted to stay friends,
But you do nothing to that end,

We're one-sided now,
Our ying is no longer with yang,
What goes through your mind,
When you see me like this?
When you hear me cry out your name?
And refuse to do anything about it?

Where did it all go wrong...
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Post by: somedude210 on February 24, 2009, 11:10:00 PM
10pm, the fans keep moving,
My head is aching,
I wish I would die,
I thought about it,
Many times before,
I thought about what'd it be like,
To walk out that door,

Tomorrow I wouldn't be here,
Tomorrow I'd be happy,
In a world without pain,
In a life I could sustain,

There are no guarantees in life,
There are no promises you can always keep,
There is no such thing as love,
There is no such thing as life,

A darling she was,
Never even swore,
She told me tonight,
To go die, you a**hole,

12am, fast asleep in my mind,
Wondering what to do with my life,
Wondering why she agreed,
To someday be my wife,

These days keep coming back to me,
Some days are better than others,
Some days keep me alive,
Others make me wish I would die,

She made me see the light,
And a cold one at that,
She made me wonder about myself,
She made me think outside myself,

There were people I never thought I had,
People that I thought were just a passing fad,
People I can say, I'm glad to be with now,
People who kept my head up, when I tried to drown,

3am, Time slowly ticks away,
There is a life after death,
But no reason to seek it now,
I lost what I wish I didn't
Burned what I wish I put out,

People were there for me,
People inspired me,
To pull myself from this self-doubt,
Pull myself from my depression,

If I'm ever going to make it back,
I have to make a good impression,
I worried that I'd become cold as ice,
I almost was, I could feel the frost form,

It took awhile, but I made it out,
I look to the horizon,
My trust renewed,
I may have lost her,
But I didn't lose the one,
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Post by: Mellotroniac on March 10, 2009, 02:08:53 AM
I don't really have a title for this, its unfinished so maybe its more like a link hah.


"Love's lucid light lingers long lady,
much more might mean maybe,

So let me hear you say,
Tea in its time is all good and fine,
yet none quite so merry an carefree as wine...

Take my hand child to sea,
me oh you, you an me,
lets tattle on the breeze..."
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Post by: on March 30, 2009, 02:04:31 AM
Hello, my name is Jason.  I'm a huge fan of the beatles.  These are some lyrics I worte about a woman I once loved.  If anyone has time, I would love feedback.

1) Kisses Indicate

I can leave the place where time stops
Just outside reality
I can leave the place where time stops
Material paradise vanishes

Censored screams whispered
They're spectacular with the vernacular of confusion
Kisses indicate the illusion
There's correlations between your lacerations

Watch the sunrise
And fall asleep in your arms
Coffee kisses at sunset
And wake me from my dreams

Censored screams whispered
They're spectacular with the vernacular of confusion
Kisses indicate the illusion
There's correlations between your lacerations

2)  Dragon Fire Kisses

You re-hydrate my heart
And give me a soul inside
All I ever want is your love

I can look into your eyes
And gaze into a mystical paradise
All I ever want is your love

With lips like the smooth ocean current
Pulling my loneliness out to sea
With kisses like a dragon's fire
Burning away all my depression

All I ever want is your love
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Post by: somedude210 on May 23, 2009, 02:50:25 AM
Song I wrote about an old love. I incorporated and personalized lyrics of songs I used to sing to her in there (All My Loving, All I Want Is You, 40(kinda), With or Without You)

Song For You:

A thousand hours,
Since we parted ways,
A thousand times,
I said I loved you,
A thousand days,
Until my heart will heal,

No life is a certainty,
So why did I think it with you?
No deal was worth making,
But I'd give it up for you,
No one is worth knowing,
Like the way I knew you,

So tell me, Lord,
Was she the one?
Did you give up,
On your prodigal son?

I said close your eyes,
And I'll kiss you,
Because I'll always miss you,
I know what I felt to be true,
But while you've gone away,
I think about you everyday,
Even though, our love isn't true.

Your cared for me,
Loved me,
Still do,
Like a catchy tune,
You play over my head,
I can't get you out,
I don't really want to,
All I want is you

You were my harbor in a tempest,
My eyes in a moon of blindness,
My river in a time of dryness,
But all the promises we made,
To stay from cradle to grave,
When all you wanted was him,

I sing this song for you,
A song for all we stood for,
A song for all our days,
How long?
How long must I sing this song?
How long...

I see the stone set in your eye,
As you twist the thorn in my side,
But still I wait for you,
With or without you,
I still wait for you,

Through the storms, we sailed on through,
I gave it all, but you still wanted more,
And here I sit, waiting without you
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Post by: Kaleidoscope_Eyes on May 24, 2009, 03:26:26 AM
I have always liked your poems, Sommie.

It took awhile, but I made it out,
I look to the horizon,
My trust renewed,
I may have lost her,
But I didn't lose the one


That's bloody, and as long as you keep to it, you will be fine  :)

* A burnt candle may not be re-lit but you can always light a new one *
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Post by: somedude210 on May 24, 2009, 05:45:05 PM
Quote from: 596
I have always liked your poems, Sommie.

It took awhile, but I made it out,
I look to the horizon,
My trust renewed,
I may have lost her,
But I didn't lose the one


That's bloody, and as long as you keep to it, you will be fine  :)

* A burnt candle may not be re-lit but you can always light a new one *

you flatter me. i dont even remember writing that one, but i remember what was going through my mind.

thank you for enjoying what i write. you're one of the reasons i still do  :)
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Post by: Kaleidoscope_Eyes on May 25, 2009, 01:37:08 AM
Quote from: 343

you flatter me. i dont even remember writing that one, but i remember what was going through my mind.

thank you for enjoying what i write. you're one of the reasons i still do  :)

Awww! I feel loved!  :K)
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Post by: somedude210 on May 25, 2009, 02:12:25 AM
hahaha. I try :P
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Post by: somedude210 on June 01, 2009, 04:05:42 AM
Don't have a name for this one


The feel of the grass in my hands,
Heat from the ever sifting sands,
I cannot look away from the sun,
I'm blind, but I still want to run,

Lightning blocks out the moon,
Rain pouring through my gaping wound,
Still I stare into my heart,
And see the holes that tore it apart,

Clap of thunder overhead,
The cool earth I use as a bed,
I reach out and grab a star,
For you, my dear, but it cannot go far,

Another night I spend alone,
More fields and woods for me to roam,
My hand still quivers when you're near,
Even if I yell, you still cannot hear,

See your face in an old Polaroid,
You're smiling back at me,
And when the story ends,
You'll last much longer than your friend...
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Post by: somedude210 on June 01, 2009, 04:06:09 AM
Transitional Boyfriend:

I'm the girl's rehabilitator,
Give me your tired and hurt,
The cheated and shy,
And I shall make them anew,

I have no motive,
No hidden agenda,
You find me when you're in a rut,
You come to me when you're hurt,
For I am the transitional boyfriend,

I raise you up,
I lift your standards,
I show you there are better ones,
And I make it all worthwhile,
For I am the transitional boyfriend,

Some listen to my advice,
Find better lovers in life,
Others pass it by,
And all they ever do is cry,
For I am the transitional boyfriend

I give them hope,
I let them move on,
I help them learn,
And I sing my song,
For I am the transitional boyfriend

They come and go,
No matter how long they stay,
They love me, they say,
Then they find someone another day,
For I am the transitional boyfriend

All that pain,
Needlessly in vain,
They all pass me by,
When they find that other guy,
For I am the transitional boyfriend

I don't care for much in life,
Its not like I can get a wife,
They always leave me,
They never need me,
For I am the transitional boyfriend

So what happens then,
When you're in need of a friend,
But all they ever do is leave,
And when the damn breaks,
And your heart aches,
Who do you call on then?
For I am only a transitional boyfriend
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Post by: somedude210 on June 03, 2009, 07:52:47 PM
Been thinking this one up for a few days now. don't really have a title

I feel the hurt of it all,
The stupidity of what I felt,
I cannot go on like this,
I cannot feel like this anymore,

My skin tightens,
The knot loosens,
Everything goes dark,
For I have lost...

And there she was,
The angel of my dreams
She told me,
As she reached out,

Take my hand,
I know I'll be there
If you need me,
And you can see,
That will always be true,

I stared into her eyes,
That could make a man cry,
She touched my face,
And I could feel the warmth of her embrace,

Like a fire burning inside of me,
The hatred I felt subsided,
The pain and anger no longer mattered,
Unlike everything before, I felt reborn,

Like the monks of yore chanting,
And the plucking of heavenly harps,
That sweet lass came to me,
Softly, she whispered to my heart,

Take my hand,
I know I'll be there
If you need me,
And you can see,
That will always be true,

I awake with a fright,
Unsure where I am,
The pain racing through my leg,
But all I can do is laugh,

Standing over me,
With those eyes staring back at me,
Her smile from ear to ear,
And all she said to me was,

Take my hand,
I know I'll be there
If you need me,
And you can see,
That will always be true...
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Post by: Kaleidoscope_Eyes on June 05, 2009, 05:43:49 AM
Can I request a happier poem?

So what happens then,
When you're in need of a friend,
But all they ever do is leave,
And when the damn breaks,
And your heart aches,
Who do you call on then?


You call on a friend, someone who is willing to hear you out and willing to help you.
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Post by: somedude210 on June 06, 2009, 02:46:12 AM
my last one isnt happier?
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Post by: somedude210 on June 06, 2009, 10:23:13 PM
There was one day in April that I ranted to god and questioned all that I had given up on him (I'm still buddhist, but the catholic faith I was raised in still lingers) and to that end, this poem basically came about. Yes it is a very angry and bitter poem


For many years I worked in your name,
Gave all I had for you,
Cared for you,
But when I needed you,
You were nowhere to be found,

And when the curtain fell,
And you were not around,
Your prodigal son,
Turned his back on you,

Cruciatus in crucem. (To hell with your punishments)
Tuus in terra servus, nuntius fui, (I was your servant, your messenger on the earth)
officium perfeci. (I did my duty)
Cruciatus in crucem. (To hell with your punishments)
Eas in crucem. (And to hell with you)

My life well adjusted,
My happiness grew,
And all the while,
I wasn't thinking of you,

You no longer cared,
Neither did I,
Years went by, maybe more,
Before your revenge took place and knocked on my door,

Like an angry wind,
You swept up my life,
And just like that,
My back produced a knife,

Did I upset you?
My absence unbecoming?
Millions of sheep left for you,
Why f*** with my shortcomings?

For years I never saw what they did in you,
You're smart and funny,
and powerful too,
Still you took it all,
And gave it to them,
All because I wasn't your friend,

And all the angels in heaven sing your name,
So why make me your fair game?
Have I upset you?
Have I lost your good will?
You lost that with me,
Long before I had nill,

Cried in the night,
For a helping hand,
Were you there when I was lost?
No, you left me to rot

Where to now, on benevolent one?
You coward
You fool,
You vindictive twit,

Why me?
What greater purpose to you have?
What in your name do you want from me?
When I lost all hope, I am at your mercy,

I was your student,
I was your pilgrim,
Now I am but a lost soul,
Searching in a sea of thousands

Blessed are the weak,
For they break my bones,
Blessed are the beggars,
For they take all my clothes,
Blessed are the rich,
For they take all my money,
Blessed are your followers,
For they all bathe in honey,

And what of her?
Will you take that from me too?
Or are the mind games done?
Because you think you've won,

Cruciatus in crucem. (To hell with your punishments)
Eas in crucem... (And to hell with you)
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Post by: Kaleidoscope_Eyes on June 07, 2009, 09:19:54 AM
Wow, that is very bitter and angry. But very well written. The latin is very impressive.
Are you a religious man, then?

Quote from: 343
my last one isnt happier?
Not, if you read between the lines, I reckon

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Post by: somedude210 on June 07, 2009, 01:46:15 PM
Quote from: 596
Wow, that is very bitter and angry. But very well written. The latin is very impressive.
Are you a religious man, then?


Not, if you read between the lines, I reckon


used to be. im spiritual now, not terribly religious though, despite working at a church
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Post by: pc31 on June 07, 2009, 04:10:32 PM
wow....you need direction maybe?don't revel in anguish it will eat your senses....
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Post by: somedude210 on July 14, 2009, 06:09:00 PM
I try to sleep, my mind's a wreak,
Listening to the voices of my conscious,
She can't get out of my head,

The beautiful face,
Those passionate eyes,
The enamored voice,

I'm tired, my mind is weary,
I leave my bed,
Hoping to clear my head,

That blissful walk,
That tender kiss,
That night I'll never forget

I don't know what to think of her,
Or what she thinks me of me,
Could I have been to rash?
From my bedroom, I heard a crash

I opened the door,
My heart stood still,
For there she was,
Sitting on my windowsill,

The moon's rays beaming through her hair,
Her eyes shining in the light,
Our eyes met and time froze,
The feel of it lingers,
And never just goes,

“Hello, my dear,”
I say with a start,
She looks away and smiles,
As she warms my heart,
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Post by: somedude210 on July 16, 2009, 03:13:43 AM
Close your eyes and I'll kiss you,
What have we got to lose?
Another day,
Another moment in time,
When all you have to do is say,

Close your eyes and I'll kiss you,
You are my saving grace,
Wherever we are,
Its the right place,
From atop this hilltop I say,

Close your eyes and I'll kiss you,
The night is young,
But you're so beautiful,
To see you in the moonlight,
The love in your eyes as you say,

Close your eyes and I'll kiss you,
Your face turns red as you do,
As our lips meet,
Roses falling at our feet,
All because I say,

Close your eyes and I'll kiss you,
I know that I'll miss you,
You hold a place in my heart,
Even now, its beats faster,
Just because we say,

Close your eyes and I'll kiss you...
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Post by: somedude210 on July 19, 2009, 02:11:02 AM
There are times when life seems unfair,
Stuck in a moment of misery and despair,
You want to do everything but don't even bother,
Some days are just better than others,

The one who loves you,
You hate the most,
You beat them back,
When you get to close,
You look for love
But the answer,
Has always been there,
Darling, you're nowhere,

Some people just make you want more,
They're strangers, they're lovers,
You're just unsure,

Some people make you feel so unlucky,
They make you want to go punt a puppy,
Others make you ignore the rules,
Nothing but a bunch of miserable fools,
And still you keep searching,
For your love,

Maybe you just need a little shove,

Sometimes you call them up,
Your voice complaining,
Some sunny days,
They wish it was raining,
You pick them up,
And they kick you down,

Maybe they're better off not found,

You run from them when they needed you,
Tables are turned, foot is in the other shoe,
A happy day turned to a miserable place,
If only they could see your face,

Secrets and lies,
The truth really hurts,
Seems like everyone else is doing better than you,
You know that's not true,
Maybe if you reach out your hand,
You can see this one through
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Post by: somedude210 on July 19, 2009, 08:12:55 PM
The promises I make,
Are the risks that we take,
There are some things in life,
You can never guarantee
Still I keep my word,
Without a fee,

The times change,
The people lose faith,
Your friends are no longer,
Your enemies take shape,
Another mile in the road ahead,
With no one around to break bread,

Whispers and moans,
Drown out the night,
You need them now,
You can't win this fight,

You reach out your hand,
To one you tried to destroy,
But they promised you their loyalty,
How foolish they seem,
To think, to dream,
A life that will give back to them,

The promise he made to you,
Repayment is long overdue,
For anyone else that is,
Not him,
The one thing he'd want in life,
He can never have again,

Some of these promises and good will,
You enjoy too much, have more fill,
A voice so sweetly, always softly,
Asks you “When do you pay the bill?”

Take what you will for granted,
Enjoy it while you can
He promised a lifetime of loyalty,
But even he can hear the band,

Loyalty has a price,
Like castles in the sand,
One good puff at them,
And you have only a cloud of dust

And when you move on with glee,
I will stand there asking,
“Hey! What about me?”
I picked you up when you were down,
You came to me when your heart stood still,
And just as quickly, you left by the windowsill
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Post by: Lyrically_N_Gaged on July 19, 2009, 09:17:35 PM
A Hip-Hop song I wrote... R.I.P Brent

A perfect picture; word to Brent, I miss ya
But whether night or day
I light the haze and reminisce
Coughin' when we took our first hit together
But now you gone forever
So in your name I write this letter
My only hope that it'll reach you
Through the hands of evil
The people say that I will see you again
If my soul dont fall to sin
Even so, I'll still breathe through the pen
Only 13 years old, it wasn't time for you to go
The day of your funeral I cried, I couldn't go
But you're in the sky, no worries
A thugs mansion with four stories
Homie, save a place for me
And we'll catch up to the times
Spark one up, have a laugh
And kick some rhymes
Though in my mind
I still feel I'm in danger
'Cause we were two
Divided by death and I'm the remainder
It's a cold world, and I don't mean the winter
I swear my whole life changed that night in December
I still remember hearin ya moms cries
From my bedroom window, it's tearin into my heart
The thing about memories, they fade away
Into another day
But since these wanna stay I sit and blaze
Say I wont drop a tear when I miss ya
And then I saw ya picture

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Post by: somedude210 on July 23, 2009, 11:27:31 PM
Lying quietly,
In a field of green,
The warm summer breeze,
A place so serene,

Clouds of white,
A sky of blue,
There's nothing I'd rather do,
Than share a dance with you,

Another night,
You're sitting on my windowsill,
Gazing off into the sunset,
Your mind is never still,

A million thoughts run in and out,
A million things that could fall apart,
Why does a kiss from you,
Warm my cold heart?

Take my hand,
We'll dance the night away,
A feeling that will never end,
A feeling that will never stray,

I wrack my brains,
Trying to figure out what to say,
You calmly put your hand on my shoulder,
“Its all okay. I had a wonderful day,”

A drive home,
No longer are we so tense,
Laughter and jocularity,
Feeling like it all makes sense,

Another night passes by,
Another memory to enjoy,
There's still nothing I would rather do,
Than share a dance with you,
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Post by: Wonderland on July 24, 2009, 09:17:05 PM
I remember a line or two from a song I wrote when I was eight or nine, called 'Petrol-Powered Roller Coaster'

'Petrol powered roller coaster,
Pedalling towards the stop...'

And 'Secret Crush'

'Secret Crush:
Soccer and Sport,
Secret Crush:
He'll do what he wants to do,
It drives me crazy
When the sky is hazy
'Cos he don't know that I like him...'

I might redo them both, they had very catchy tunes.
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Post by: somedude210 on July 25, 2009, 03:08:53 AM
Inspired by my grandfather with Alzheimer's

Another day dawns,
Another year slips through,
If I tripped inside your head,
What would I find?

With every passing day,
Another memory fades away,
You try so hard to keep right,
But they go away at night,

You lie awake at night,
Thinking of your darling wife,
Your kids you wish you knew,
Wishing they could help you,

Tell me all that you know,
Remember it all, don't let it go,
A new day is dawning,
Your body is calling you down,

Grab on to those that pass,
Nothing in life can last,
You try to keep it at bay,
But the memories fade away,

Finally, the sun will rise some day,
But all your memories faded away,
You cannot laugh, you cannot play,
You just dreamt your dreams away,

Your mind is suffering,
Your body unwinds,
Your spirit starts to rust
Until it all becomes dust,
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Post by: somedude210 on July 27, 2009, 04:49:08 AM
I thought we were doing well,
Or was that part of your protective shell
Did I get to close?
Are you running away?
Afraid of feeling what you think is real

One day you're lovely with me,
The next, you're as cold as can be,
What did I do?
Did I say something wrong?
Or just pulling me along

You found me romantic, charming and sweet,
Now I feel I'm dancing with two left feet,
Did something happen?
Did it make you think?
That maybe I brought you to the brink,

The other day you wanted to dance ever so sweetly,
No longer now, you think its just rather creepy,
What happened to you?
Did you think this was feeble?
It feels like I'm dealing with two different people,

I didn't expect much from you,
But I still feel like crap,
Or maybe I'm just a sap,
Were you lying before?
Or are you lying now?
Like a snowflake,
I never know what to expect from you

A straight answer from you,
Is hard to come by,
You fight it,
You hide it,
But its never really true,
What should I expect from you?
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Post by: somedude210 on August 12, 2009, 03:15:49 AM
Wrote another one of the duet things like i did long ago. Kinda feels like a continuation of the last one "another day" Enjoy:

Another Day, Another Time

My heart is aching,
My heart is your home,
Its fascinating,
You know I'll never be alone,

 
Love took me by surprise,
Never knew what I had,
Till I had to say goodbye,
Maybe I'll reform again,

 
Maybe I was wrong,
I lost what was real,
Maybe I was right,
But I could dance with you all night,

 
Maybe when I see those taillights,
My heart will start to hurt,
Maybe when I see your face,
All those things will be unheard,

 
I said that I loved you,
From the very start,
It was true,
I think I've always loved you,

 
Take my hand,
I'll always be there when I can,
I give up the world for you,
I promise you, my dear,

 
Maybe we can be together,
Fight off any kind of weather,
Maybe from the very start, its true,
I'm still in love with you...

 
He was so kind to me,
Never raised his voice to me,
Oh how I wish I had been more kind,
He's one that's very tough to find,
 

She always made me laugh,
I dunno how I could be so daft,
I didn't see the signs,
I stopped seeing her mind,
 

From what I saw,
I knew it to be true,
He was unlike any man,
Always saw things through,

 
From what I saw,
I knew her to be true,
She took my hand,
And made me feel renewed,

 
My heart is aching,
My mind is racing,
Does he love me anymore,
Does he care about me anymore?


My heart is saddened,
My mind is maddened,
She whisked me along,
Singing that same old song,

 
Misery loves company,
I feel like you're a part of me,
Never feeling quite so alone with you,
Never falling the same like I did with you,

 
Still I miss him,
God I hate this,
Help me someone,
This is too depressing,
Should I give up now?
 
I wish I never said those things,

I wish I never did those things,
I hate how we're far apart,
I hate how we always depart,
Are they too much to ask for now?
 

My heart is racing,
My heart is your home,
I find you pacing,
With you, I'll never be alone,

 
And still we're like this,
Two people trapped in our own worlds,
Feeling like we're lost,
Not realizing how we're loved,
 
My heart is with you,
My mind is your soul,
I miss your smile,
I miss never being alone...
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Post by: Kaleidoscope_Eyes on August 12, 2009, 10:36:14 AM
This is bloody good mate!!!
Excellent!
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Post by: Whoeveriam on August 13, 2009, 06:42:34 AM
Somedude, do you actually compose these words or are they simply words, you seem to write at about 3 songs per week...
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Post by: somedude210 on August 13, 2009, 09:25:05 PM
some are just words, some have tunes that go with them as i write

depends on my mood. and i've been in a rather dry writing spell as of late
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Post by: Whoeveriam on August 14, 2009, 04:21:35 AM
You've written everything already.
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Post by: somedude210 on August 15, 2009, 01:54:08 AM
hahaha how so?
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Post by: somedude210 on August 24, 2009, 03:45:02 AM
another day, another lyric

Take Me With You:

I want to go back,
I want to be free,
I want to love,
I want to dance,
I want to be free,

I'm scared to return,
Afraid of what's in store,
Always lying,
Someone's crying,
Its in my head,
I wish I was dead...

Get me out of this place,
Let me see a friendly face,
Take me from the hellish place,
Let me run free,

Walls...
f***ing walls all around,
My sorrows drag me down,
I drink them all until they drown,
Until my mind blocks out their sounds,

The screams of it all,
My mind never lets me rest,
The pain beneath my chest,
Can you feel it too?
Its all because of you...

Running,
Let me run away from this,
Let me run into your arms,
Show me misery and love,
Show me happiness and sorrow,

Take me with you,
Don't leave me here again,
Don't let me listen to the voices in my head,
Don't let me sleep alone in my bed,
Don't let go of my hand...

Dying,
Like a Phoenix reborn,
My passion burns anew,
My soul ignites for you,
And again, you follow through,

Promise me the stars again,
Promise me we'll never fight again,
Promise me we'll stay in touch,
And never say never again,

And life, as we know it, crumbles beneath our wings,
Like sore peasents, we toil for our wages,
Another pound to pay off our debts to ourselves,
Another sound of dying in my heart once more,

Take me with you,
Through that open door....
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Post by: emmi_luvs_beatles on August 25, 2009, 01:15:40 AM
Wow!! I read back some pages and yours are really good!! ( Not that other peoples aren't  ;) ) But they're brilliant!
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Post by: somedude210 on August 25, 2009, 04:23:35 AM
awww, why thank you kindly miss. I always enjoy the compliments of others. I am no where near as brilliant as others on here, but I try my best

Another night, another goddamn lyric

Cards (about Tarot, if you're wondering)

The gods mock you,
They talk to you,
They warn you of all that is wrong,

They tell you,
They warn you,
They reveal themselves through cards,

Oftentimes you never understand what goes on,
You're insightful, delightful,
But desires cloud your mind,

You want him, you need him,
And when you can't believe him,
You look for another meaning to it all,

You talk to the Joker,
You fell in love with the King,
You played with the Jack,
Who married the Queen,

You drank from their cups,
You danced on their swords,
You talked to them all,
Until they got bored,

The king and his sword,
He drank from the cup,
Not seeing clearly,
What had all bubbled up,

You asked them for help,
They gave it to you,
Maybe its wrong,

They gave you a meaning,
They gave you a way,
They showed you the map,
Of an inglorious day,

Maybe one meaning,
You seem to have forgotten,
It may not be a thing or feeling,
It may just be a person

Take it in stride,
What the gods tell you,
You'll have to decide

You take what life gives you,
The good and the bad,
You throw back the worst,
And the sh*t that makes you sad,
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on September 11, 2009, 01:19:58 AM
Wishing you were here,
Another night goes by,
My mind wanders to you,
My phone sits idly by,

Its been so long,
Since I saw your face,
When I looked at you,
And decided to chase,

I miss you,
Sometimes I'm happy where you are,
Most days, I wish you were around,
Am I the only one?

How beautiful, your voice is,
The way it picks me up,
I listen, hoping,
To hear your 'Wonderful Tonight'

All we need to do in life,
Is keep talking,
Keep missing, keep hoping,
While we keep loving each other,

A thousand roses,
I give to you,
You want to be in my arms tonight,
I want to dance with you all night,

Still I watch the stars,
Knowing you're watching them too,
My heart is filled,
Still I watch my windowsill...
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: emmi_luvs_beatles on November 07, 2009, 08:44:04 PM
Ok, here's one I came up with literally three minutes ago. Its not done, but its a start. And theres some open spaces. If anyone could help that'd be great. It's really a depressing song lol.

I held her necklace in my hand, praying to alter the past
she left me in this cold world to fend for myself,
leaving only shards of broken memories.

I got on the train headed for Jacksonville, hoping for a new start.
I was leaving behind, only _______

I hold that knife to my tender wrist, wishing to alter the past.
I never found the light I was looking for,
.. When you left me
Now I only have scars, and broken memories.


So thats my new one! And it's still a major work in progress.
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Eliza on November 26, 2009, 04:47:26 AM
K this is a song I wrote with a couple other people for our christmas play it's really cute and a duet!

First person: You're getting older losing you're hair putting on some pounds
Second person: you are not as special as you seem to think even with your stupid indie radio link!
First person: if just got the way that think I would be concern
Both: you wish that you knew you wish that you could be like me a little more
First person: every christmas they all celebrate I don't have much fun, let me go with you and if I come along you'd be happy to
Second person: I'm very busy you can't come along there isn't any room inside my crowed sled you'd fall out and then you'd be dead!
(Now right here singing stops and they first person theartens the second person and I can't remember all of it but ends with "and all of your high school friends will join cuz they think you're a racist")
Music starts back up again
Second person: I know you're kidding it's not what you want you wouldn't be coming back but if you insits dear
First person: I won't be missed here I'll ride in the sack!


It's not much but it is very cute = )
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: emmi_luvs_beatles on December 23, 2009, 02:00:08 AM
Okay, here's one I just wrote about 30 seconds ago. It isn't finished though.

I take the next train to Boston, hoping to find you there.
Standing there in your leater boots, the wind blowing through your hair.
My mid races with thoughts of us together, keeping our love forever.
But my fantasies of a perfect life, were left hungry and in despair.

(Chorus, in my mind she was holding out the notes in certain spots, so it might seem choppy)

You left me here, in the pouring rain.
Knowing the next day, I'd feel your pain
I can't believe you'd steal my heart and shatter it,
leaving broken homes and empty dreams.

Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: somedude210 on March 09, 2010, 05:26:46 AM
Here's one that i just wrote in about 10 minutes having got the opening line stuck in my head. I think I've been listening to Johnny Cash's American Albums too much. enjoy anyway

As I lay dying:

As I lay dying,
The time is drawing near,
Losing you was what I feared,
And here I am without you,

And as I lay dying,
Even when I knew you changed,
And what we had would never be the same,
I still loved you...

As I lay dying,
All that bitterness came flooding back,
That hurt, that anger you gave to me,
Like nothing ever changes,

And as I lay dying,
Are paths will never meet again,
Our threads no longer intertwined,
Take my hand and help me along,

As I lay dying,
I whisper a dream to you,
All those years we spent together,
I wanted to marry you,

And as I lay dying,
I hope that one day,
You'll find what you want,
Like I have found in you,

As I lay dying,
Lying to the ones I once loved,
Telling them sweet nothings,
All the while, never feeling a thing,

And as I lay dying,
I tip my hat and bid adieu,
Au revieor,  farewell and aloha,
We'll meet again, my friend,
Very soon...
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: emmi_luvs_beatles on March 21, 2010, 02:25:14 AM
It sucks for all I know, but I like it.


The whispering trees are known for miles around,
They help with your troubles and are known to do well,
They keep your secrets and regrets the same,
And they call true love by it’s first name

a young boy walked in to the whispering trees,
They take him by the hand, a smile in place
The comfort they bring appears on his face,
He asks them for advice as they begin to sing,
Na na na na, na na na na na, x2

The stories spread through town of the boy and the trees,
His old life washed away as he heard the wishes of the trees,
His father’s empty bottles appeared less and less,
And all of his sorrows went into the past

A young woman heard the stories of the whispering trees,
She took her new born baby and  walked to tell of her need,
They took in her sorrows of her baby’s endless cries,
She asked them for help, and they began to sing,
Na na na na, na na na na na, x2

After that day the baby never shed another tear,
The hollow cries were replaced with smiles and cheer,
Now the mother is happy and the baby the same,
Now they too know of the whispering game,

But the mother didn’t tell of the whispering trees,
For she knew they’re majestic power was growing weak,
She tried to tell all not to go near,
But no one took notice of her worries and fear.

Soon everyone was going to get the trees advice,
Asking for help and how to break a vice,
But the trees couldn’t help every single soul,
They tried to do their best but became to old

They reached their long branches to the people,
Shouting they were weak and couldn’t help them all,
But no one would listen and went along the same,
The trees became still in time and in space,

We now know the trees as the weeping willows,
Their secrets remain hidden in the past for all the new people,
But the people who knew of them can still hear them today,
And take advice from the willows once again…
Na na na na, na na na na na, x2

Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Georgies Girl on May 18, 2010, 01:12:57 AM
Well, here's something I wrote recently. It is inspired on the boy I like (and still he doesn't know it as far as I can see :P)
He's the bassist in a band and the youngest member of it (17), so that explains the title.
I'm currently working on the music, I want it to be kinda in a Bob Dylan style :)

Little Music Man

Play your songs for me again,
Little Music Man
Let me hear your song again
Make me love you more.

Take the old guitar lying in the corner
Play another love song
Love songs that were played before
Cheerful songs that made the hearts melt.

Spread the message of love
Let it go 'round, let it sound
I will let it into my heart.

Play your songs for me again...

Oh yes, Little Music Man
You've gotten me, gotten me so high
My Little Music Man
All your charms can't be denied.

Under those blinging lights
Of a noisy show, close your eyes
Then listen between the voices of the crowd
You can hear my heart beating, beating just for you...

Play your songs for me again...

Sing, sing for me
I'll sing my heart out for you
Sing those old songs once again
And while you sing and smile
You smile for me from the stage
I just want to hold you
I just want to tell you
That I can't help loving you.

Play your songs for me again...



Kinda sucks, but well...is one of my first songs after all :P
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: BeatleBug on October 01, 2010, 03:34:43 AM
When The Last Beatles Gone

VERSE 1

Doesn’t seem so long ago
On that Little AM radio
The world heard “Love is all you Need”

Four Lads from Liverpool
Somehow re-wrote the rules
Still today we feel their legacy.

Lift 1
One by one They’ll all join Lucy In The Sky
But we’ll still have their memories
on our worn out 45′s

CHORUS

When the Last Beatles Gone
Just their music carries on
The magic they made will never fade
Somebody somewhere will still be singing (songs)

Yesterday – Let it Be (alt:Hey Jude ‘n Obladi)
Hey Jude ‘n Obladi (alt: Yesterday – Let it Be)
While our guitar gently weeps (along)
When the Last Beatles Gone

VERSE 2

Some say they changed the world
Took us somewhere Magical
The Fab Four rocked the status quo

How we Dressed and wore our hair
What was cool and what was square
From Abbey Road to Country’s Music Row

Lift 2
One by one we’ll all join Lucy In The Sky
But Rock ‘n roll will always have
The songs they leave behind (What they left behind)

CHORUS

When the Last Beatles Gone
Just their music carries on
The magic they made will never fade
Somebody somewhere will still be singing (songs)

Yesterday – Let it Be (alt:Hey Jude ‘n Obladi)
Hey Jude ‘n Obladi (alt: Yesterday – Let it Be)
While our guitar gently weeps (along)
When the Last Beatles Gone

BRIDGE

I fell in love to Something in the Way She Moves
But who know where that Long and Winding Road is leading us to?

CHORUS

When the Last Beatles Gone
Just their music carries on
The magic they made will never fade
Somebody somewhere will still be singing (songs)

Yesterday – Let it Be (alt:Hey Jude ‘n Obladi)
Hey Jude ‘n Obladi (alt: Yesterday – Let it Be)
While our guitar gently weeps (along)
When the Last Beatles Gone
When the Last Beatles Gone….Yeah Yeah Yeah Yeah….

Copyright © 1998 Paul Fitz-Patrick & Marc-Alan Barnette

Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: 7 of 13 on February 18, 2011, 04:44:43 AM
well now you know
she comes and goes
my ferdapet knows
my ferdapet oh.

(song for a friends cat)
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Whoeveriam on February 18, 2011, 02:56:14 PM
He's all on his own
He's left on a shelf
He's no good to you
He only thinks of himself
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: 7 of 13 on February 23, 2011, 03:42:37 AM
 ;D next to you  ;D

amok window my drain runs cry
can't sleep don't think
get it together with the color pink
by the end of next week
orange is better
than green or brown
white is purple is thick is deep
mako jai guru deva om
red light stop light second place go go go...
to wax this
machine
tonight.
butterflys are pink
the insects tonight
fly into my broken dreams
and thoughtless
concept
corncept'
antiseptic recursion
nono skullfactory
ain't that better ain't she sweet,
and ain't that a shame?
orange moreno y rosa tambien
otros pineapples son hacer
extra oceans
roses belong in the garden
the garden of extra delight
garden of flower und trees
colors can't
hide inside a broken cranium
tonks then con hacer
i'm so tired.
yeah.


 
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: Hombre_de_ningun_lugar on April 18, 2011, 10:01:07 PM
All my lyrics are in Spanish. I can translate them, but the rhyme will be lost. This is my favourite lyric I wrote:

Sopla el Viento

Si pudiera ir a Venus y a Marte
Y tan sólo verte sin soñarte
Yo podría saber si existes
O si sólo un sueño tú fuiste
Han pasado muchos años
Sin conocerte te extraño
Debo encontrar el camino
Donde tú seas el destino

Muchas cosas podría decirte
Aunque nunca yo pude oírte
Y si no puedo ver los colores
Buscaré el olor de tus flores
Quizás no tenga sentidos
Creo que no te percibo
Si nada tiene sentido
Sólo respiro y respiro

Pero yo sé lo que siento
Todo lo veo por dentro
Y cuando sopla el viento
Vuelo, viajo y me alejo

Y si hay algo más viejo que el tiempo
Son todos los recuerdos eternos
Existen porque ése es su destino
Aunque aún no se hayan vivido
Nostalgia de tiempos futuros
Ya sean claros u oscuros
Se descubren con el viento
Que sopla y sopla por dentro
 
Y yo sí sé lo que siento
Todo lo veo por dentro
Y cuando sopla el viento
Vuelo, viajo y me alejo

 
The Wind Blows

If I could go to Venus and Mars
And only see you without dreaming you
I would know if you exist
Or if you were just a dream
Many years have passed
Without meeting you I miss you
I should find the way
Where you are the destiny

Many things I could tell you
Although I could never hear you
And if I can not see the colours
I will seek the fragrance of your flowers
Maybe I have no senses
I think I don't perceive you
If nothing makes sense
I just breathe and breathe

But I do know what I feel
I can see everything inside me
And when the wind blows
I flight, travel and go away

And if there's something older than time
They're all the eternal memories
They exist because that's their destiny
Although they were not yet lived
Nostalgia of future times
Whether they be clear or dark
They're discovered with the wind
That blows and blows inside me

And I do know what I feel
I can see everything inside me
And when the wind blows
I flight, travel and go away
Title: Re: Post your own lyrics here
Post by: 7 of 13 on January 24, 2012, 06:55:39 PM
another one for the pile (fire)

let it be known
it gets inside my head

another one for the pile
another one for the pile

butterflys are pink
and roses are red
fly into my broken dreams
that's what i said

another one for the pile
another one for the pile

roses are red
violets are blue
say what you will
it's sad but true

another one for the pile
another one for the pile

you can say this
you can say that

another one for the pile
another one for the pile

  ;yes