hahaha, yea...she didnt buy it though oh well, but ill post some others up. like this one

She’s got that sparkle in the eye,
And the thousand kiss goodbye,
Oh I know that I love her so,

She’s the one I fell in love,
She’s the pretty, white dove,
Oh I can’t get my mind off her,

She’s got the loving that I want,
And caring in the heart,
Oh she’s still just a woman to me,

She’s a woman, to me,
She ain’t a thief or bore,
She doesn’t get me sore,
She’s always a woman to me,

Oh I really love her so,
I don’t want to let her go,
To fly to an evil man’s hands,

She’s got that twinkle of surprise,
When I gaze into her eyes,
Oh I know she’s the one I love,

She’s just woman,
Take my heart,
That woman,
Tear me apart,
That woman,
Woah oh,
That woman,
No, no, no, no,
Oh I love her so,
She’s that woman
For me-e-e-e

i made this like two years ago before i got into U2, and i just realized that this kinda sounds like "One"

I only have one wish to be,
That you can always stick by me,
And that they will see,
That we should stick together,

One wish,
For a better world,
One wish,
To make it so,
And always be close to you and me,

It doesn’t matter who we are,
Whether we live near or far,
By airplane, boat, train or car,
There is always a place for you and me,

One wish,
Can it get much better,
One wish,
For us to live together,
And lovin’ every minute of the day

And when I come to see you,
You can say “that I love you”
Our love is always gonna be true,
For all of us can live in peace,

One wish,
Is all that I ask,
One wish,
For us together at last,
Cause you and me were made to be,

One wish,
To stop the hate,
One wish,
Just to celebrate,
All the good times we will share together,

see, now this is what happens when you mix "Working Class Hero" and U2's "Sunday Bloody Sunday"  


The people are vultures,
Their lies are not true,
They tell you to do it,
And they laugh at you too,

They’ll take you away,
To a far away place,
They stab you and kick you,
They’ll spit in you face too,

What have we done for this?
To deserve such a fate,
To live in a this world,
That is filled with such hate,

You think they’re your friends,
They stab you in the back,
They’ll call you gay,
And then say that you’re black,

What have we done for this?
To deserve such a fate,
To live in a this world,
That is filled with such hate,

The time has come, my friends,
To take back the world,
The haters and hypocrites,
It’s time their hand folds,

What have we done for this?
To deserve such a fate,
To live in a this world,
That is filled with such hate,

So brothers and sisters,
Let’s go change our fate,
With the old and the young,
Let’s stop the hate.

fellow musicians, are these any good?

The love songs a little cliched but I'd have to hear the melodies to have a full opinion. I like the last one quite a bit though. Maybe you should write more like that.

It's the chords underneath that can change a lyric....hard to say without heavy analysis...I am a man of little time.  ...It's all in the final presentation.

sorry i'm being such an a** about this but i thought i'd run my stuff by you guys before i run them by my band.

and yes, i finally, finally have a freaking band after 3 years of failure.

(always go with people that are younger then you...silly freshmen )

my most emotional song i've got, something along the lines of "Mother" emotionally. seriously, i actually put my heart and soul into the tune and it just blows your mind once you here it...which ill put up once me and my band record it. the tone is like that of U2's "Kite"



They’re standing there,
Watching all day,
And hoping I’ll pray,
To the man that’s not there,

And as I sit in wonder,
As they watch my every move,
That I guess they were wrong,
Big brother ain’t watchin’ you,
(build up)
While my ideas clash,
And dreams slip by,
Still they watch me,
As time goes by,

Oh another moment past,
In this ungodly life,
With my poison covered blood,
Dripping from that red, hot knife,

(drum and guitar duet)

And I ask for forgiveness,
Oh please make it so,
There’s no room in their heart,
To make my mind grow,

(tempo slow down)

And still I-I wonder,
If this will happen,
When they’re six feet under,
And their hands still clappin’

(Build up of sound, cymbal clashing)

I’m no-o-ot a child!
I’m not the boy they thought I was,
I grew up for them,
I screwed up for them,(tone down)
But I’ll always wonder,
Where I would be-e-e,
Without them watching over me-e-e

That was really sad. Good imagery too. Do you have a name for it?

Oh, this is another little song I wrote called Gypsy. It was orginally supposed to be about the object of my unknown affection, but it kind of turned into something else.

You've got eyes like a gypsy
And a smile twice as wide
Your gypsy cart is left behind
But you don't seem to mind
There's something you will find
You don't have to act so kind
But you're a gypsy
So what's lost is yours to keep
You don't have to dig so deep

(Chorus)
Gypsy boy,
Won't you stay for a while?
With your long ago tales
And your far away smile
Your touchstone heart
And your dewdrop tears
Tell me many stories
But they don't calm my fears

Your gypsy cart is moving
I understand you must go
I only hope that you can know
Just what your tattered spirit shows
As the campfire embers glow
With your gypsy troupe in tow
Just like a child
We'll just have to say adieu
See you next life, good luck too

(Chorus)

Gypsy laughter echoes through the night
Lost in stars of shiny gold
Another chapter will unfold
What is lost will be untold
But I can't put my life on hold
For another gvypsy's promise sold
It's too upsetting
Beneath the darkened summer sky
I'll remember you and I

(Chorus)

And if we ever meet again
Under circumstances gray
We can dance for one more day
Admit the things we'd never say
Find each other when we're stray
From the forgotten
Think of me when you hear this song
And know that you could never be wrong

(Chorus)

thats a good song.

i was thinking something like "Watch Over". its supposed to be emotional. i just needed to express everything i felt. and i put all my emotion into it... and this crapped out

Tip toeing between genius and insanity,
That is me,
And more than likely,
You too

This is a simple song I wrote, I have better, I don't think it's quite there, as George Harrison said: "A few words needed yet".

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"I Can't Believe (It's Over)"

I can't believe it's over
I can't believe it's true
You were the one I loved, and that was true
You took my heart and ripped it in two

I can't believe it's over
I can't believe it's through
You took my love from me, and now I'm blue
You took my heart and ripped it in two

So sad again, I can't belive it
The air's so bad, I just can't breathe it

You we're the first I ever found
You took my hand and lifted me from the ground
You let it go I fell and found you we're the one that let me down

I can't believe it's over
I can't believe it's true
You were the one I loved and that was true
You took my heart and ripped it in two

I can't believe it's over
I can't believe it's over
I can't believe it's over
I can't believe it's over
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I've written about thirty all together but my Mother just throws them out when I'm not around, that really pisses me off. Hell, I guess John had the same problem with Mimi. Ha!

hahaha, that ones actually pretty good. you might want to try and put it all into like a Word document, that way there should be at least a copy saved to your computer. which you might want to back up on a disk or something (i didnt do that the first time and lost like 12 good songs i wrote down on one computer but not the other one)

Quoted from andersonCouncill

Tip toeing between genius and insanity,
That is me,
And more than likely,
You too

thanks, much appreaciated, always thought i tetered on insanity and genius, just needed a reason