Yes , its a forum It has my storys on it , or story as, i tend to think its a book of sorts . Please have a look and a read , it has been put together by Kaldiscope Eyes , who is on here , and i hope i will one day be rich and famous and knock that book called The Bible off its best seller of all time , anyway i`m ahead of myself . I have never wrote anyrthing like this before , the character , i just came up with on here , when i had a thread , which was like a chat show . Yeh, its mad stuff and they get better as they go on ,as i grow with confidence each one i write The storys are funny , and educational in time travelling , unexplained , and how to make a good brew . Hope you have a look , and even maybe join !,
Thats a good point there Beatles rock , but as i have a Forum to put them on , i can see who is reading them , and get feedback off people , hopefully I have them already on a Beatle related forum and though a lot of people read them , i dont get any feedback
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BlueMeanie is right Mr. Kite that blue made my eye's go wonky after reading the first two stories . Your writing reminds me a bit of Sue Townsend " Adrian Moles Diary " . I think your main Characters are strong and there dialogue is humorous . Maybe you need to be a little more descriptive of their world , i think the landscape needs a few more brush strokes . A bit like Tolkien did when he was describing Bilbo's hobbit hole , that description made me want to live in that world . Hope that's useful Mr .Kite , i will read some more and get back to you . And don't forget to excel yourself
Seems like a lot of fun. You certainly love your commas - I found most of the sentences a bit long and your grammar is a bit wonky (but maybe you do that on purpose for effect.) I can imagine people getting in to this so good luck.
Thank you all very much for your time and comments , i appreciate it
As i have said before i have never done anything like this before , and i have found it very hard when writing the buggers down , as i`m just a poor working class boy , i didnt really have a good education[ the only thing i learnt was to play football] , so i have no grammer , cant spell , and when it comes to commas and the other thingys well . Ok you can put the hankies away now BUT ! As for my imagination and sense of humour !, well i think they are worth a read . The storys do get better and longer , so i have improved a lot , i have tried to be more descriptive , ta DaveRam I just started out as a bit of fun and i really have enjoyed doing them and i hope you get to read a few . Cheers B.M, i know you have had the pleasure before , and i will sort out the blue , not my fav colour at the mo . C+ then , could do better , and i will do my best . Not bad for a poor working class northerner eh !
Ta People . John .
Read the latest Story of Albert and find out the truth of The Battle Of Hastings and where it all went wrong for the English and indoor plumbing . @
A year all ready ! Hope its going to go on and on and on and on and on and people from this forum will join and before you know it it will be a global success and i become a muilti millionare and have my own island where i can have a large statue of myself on top of the highest mountain and that you can see from 5 miles high in the sky as you land in Mr Kite airport and that all red haired ladies must report to my mansion for inspection and must not leave until they have seen the painting on the ceiling of my bedroom of me and bill Gates playing a round of golf on my large golf course and discussing that Terminator 3 was dissapointing as the woman Terminator was ok but really just eye candy and that her "i like your gun " was just a metaphor some inuendo that just didnt cut it when it came to Arnie`s I`ll be back"
Yes the comedy is better than above . But i will let you decide . Go on have a look , aww go on . And if you already have . Ta If you havnt , then exspect , a nice little read , its fun and erm different
A thought , why do wasps find bins so fastenating ?
Read the latest Story of Albert and find out the truth of The Battle Of Hastings and where it all went wrong for the English and indoor plumbing . @